Random Belief
Discussing belief63 total reviews
Comment from TPAC
Sometimes these realities do manifest among us. This write exploring the depths of past knowledge with current times feelings could become confusing actualities. Views played low not being understood in their given principles.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Sometimes these realities do manifest among us. This write exploring the depths of past knowledge with current times feelings could become confusing actualities. Views played low not being understood in their given principles.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Ok, TPAC I am most honored by this review and I wish you a good night and good morrow. Take care my friend. tom
Comment from Cycler
Very nice all around job with this. I first noticed the rhyme - the every other line. Thought this was cute and did not realize the Acrostic until I read your comments. Your insights mingle excellently with your words.
Good luck with the contest - this is high quality and worthy of many votes!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Very nice all around job with this. I first noticed the rhyme - the every other line. Thought this was cute and did not realize the Acrostic until I read your comments. Your insights mingle excellently with your words.
Good luck with the contest - this is high quality and worthy of many votes!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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I thank you Cycler, Most honored my poet friend. tom
Comment from Janet Foor
A very creative acrostic poem for the contest with rhyme which isn't usually present in an acrostic piece.
Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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A very creative acrostic poem for the contest with rhyme which isn't usually present in an acrostic piece.
Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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I thank you Janet very much. Take care my friend. tom
Comment from Joy Graham
This is a nice contest entry. Your lines are all rhythmic and pleasing. Nice rhymes throughout. I prefer to see acrostics have the first letter of each line in a larger font so the reader can see the acrostic word easily. Just my preference. Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
Hey that looks great. It looks much better to me.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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This is a nice contest entry. Your lines are all rhythmic and pleasing. Nice rhymes throughout. I prefer to see acrostics have the first letter of each line in a larger font so the reader can see the acrostic word easily. Just my preference. Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
Hey that looks great. It looks much better to me.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Hi Joy and I sure thank you for the time tonight and of course for the great review. Happy writing and thank you once again. tom
Comment from ameen786
My friend, your brilliant verse is a perfect example of using the poetic devices; alliteration, rhymes and above all, a profound theme; "Lost reason then will take retreat,"-sad reflection upon today's morality. My regrets for not having a
six; thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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My friend, your brilliant verse is a perfect example of using the poetic devices; alliteration, rhymes and above all, a profound theme; "Lost reason then will take retreat,"-sad reflection upon today's morality. My regrets for not having a
six; thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Hey good brother I am most honored and I thank you so much for the great support and review. I added another stanza so it now is entitled 'Random Belief'.
Take care my friend and thanks again. tom
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Everett;
-well it seems you have a definite opinion on one's beliefs and it is all well and true, as opinions go it can be supported in many ways.
-That's what's funny about belief, it has its own characteristics or can take on them.
-Your writing is very distinctively direct in administering a syllogistic reasoning that confers that beliefs are pretty much hocus-pocus. I may be a little bit embellishing here myself.
-I think it's brilliant and if I had a six of my profits I would've given you one.
-Thanks for sharing this, Everett, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Cheers, Everett;
-well it seems you have a definite opinion on one's beliefs and it is all well and true, as opinions go it can be supported in many ways.
-That's what's funny about belief, it has its own characteristics or can take on them.
-Your writing is very distinctively direct in administering a syllogistic reasoning that confers that beliefs are pretty much hocus-pocus. I may be a little bit embellishing here myself.
-I think it's brilliant and if I had a six of my profits I would've given you one.
-Thanks for sharing this, Everett, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Hi Alex and thank you much for the read and review and generous comments. I am honored my friend. tom
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You are Very welcome, Everett, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment from apky
Your acrostic is wonderfully clever and reflects the truth embedded into our world's fanaticism and fundamentalism.
It made me think of all those gazillionaire TV evanglists, all those government leaders claiming to receive messages from God directing them to do atrocious things to other people in His name.
I often wonder: If all these religions preach that we are all God's children, why does that Father "tell" them to annihilate other children in His name?
This excellent poem gave me food for thought - thanks for that.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Your acrostic is wonderfully clever and reflects the truth embedded into our world's fanaticism and fundamentalism.
It made me think of all those gazillionaire TV evanglists, all those government leaders claiming to receive messages from God directing them to do atrocious things to other people in His name.
I often wonder: If all these religions preach that we are all God's children, why does that Father "tell" them to annihilate other children in His name?
This excellent poem gave me food for thought - thanks for that.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Thank you my friend. I added another stanza so it now is entitled 'Random Belief'. Take care and I thank you very much. tom
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love your acrostic. Cleverly done and full of truths. I like the notion of reason taking a retreat. That's part of religion to me. I am puzzled, however, over your last line. My take is that theology is forged from self deceit. Right? I'm reading Dan Brown's ORIGINS and he seems to propose that all religion is self deceit. So that's what I am thinking you are artistically saying as well. My comments here do not help you with your poem. Personally, though, I like to know people's thought processes when they read my poems. Hope my thoughts help a little.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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I love your acrostic. Cleverly done and full of truths. I like the notion of reason taking a retreat. That's part of religion to me. I am puzzled, however, over your last line. My take is that theology is forged from self deceit. Right? I'm reading Dan Brown's ORIGINS and he seems to propose that all religion is self deceit. So that's what I am thinking you are artistically saying as well. My comments here do not help you with your poem. Personally, though, I like to know people's thought processes when they read my poems. Hope my thoughts help a little.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Hi Debbie. Your review helped a lot. I now have added another stanza plus the line of your concern now reads: "Fanatic Ideologies'. I thank you very much Debbie for the help and patience. tom
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I read your new version. I like it better. Good luck in the competition.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I have to give you a virtual 6 for this, unfortunately. I thought this was superb, and I suspect it will be a very strong contender in the contest. You've used the word, 'Belief' to absolute perfection, it rhymes, you've explained your first line of self-deceit with the following lines in an incredible way, it has to be a winner. Well done and good luck! :) Sandra xx
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I have to give you a virtual 6 for this, unfortunately. I thought this was superb, and I suspect it will be a very strong contender in the contest. You've used the word, 'Belief' to absolute perfection, it rhymes, you've explained your first line of self-deceit with the following lines in an incredible way, it has to be a winner. Well done and good luck! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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What a generous review and such kind comments are so appreciated. I have actually added another stanza so it now is entitled 'Random Beliefs'. I thank you friend of mine. tom
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written acrostic poem that defines the word belief technically. Belief is a result of our faith that gives us hope and let us belief in the things we cannot see.
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A very well-written acrostic poem that defines the word belief technically. Belief is a result of our faith that gives us hope and let us belief in the things we cannot see.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Thank you very much Sandra. I am honored by this fine review. tom
