Stay With Me
double 5-7-566 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
Hello Linda,
A very nice double 5-7-5 poem on security and strength
It may well depend on how one measures strength -
by the strength of one's arm or the strength their love
Excellent counter-position of the poems and thoughts
Nicely done in all ways
RS
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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Hello Linda,
A very nice double 5-7-5 poem on security and strength
It may well depend on how one measures strength -
by the strength of one's arm or the strength their love
Excellent counter-position of the poems and thoughts
Nicely done in all ways
RS
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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HI Robert, Well!!!...first...by what's in your heart...then by your strength...and if you truly love that person...it don't matter how strong they are...it will still feel like the strongest of hugs...sigh...thank you for a wonderful review my sweet friend...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Benny Beeharry
HI yes this is the prayer we all keep in our hearts, being for the one one loves or friends. It is always sad to part ways. This write is great and simple and straight and carries all the prayers it expresses.
Danny Jock
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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HI yes this is the prayer we all keep in our hearts, being for the one one loves or friends. It is always sad to part ways. This write is great and simple and straight and carries all the prayers it expresses.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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HI Danny, thank you for a great review...I am so glad you like it...love Linda xxoo
Comment from JordanFrost
This is a very beautiful piece. I think the artwork goes along perfectly with the feel of the poem. A reminder that a woman's true strength lies in her heart.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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This is a very beautiful piece. I think the artwork goes along perfectly with the feel of the poem. A reminder that a woman's true strength lies in her heart.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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HI Michelle, oh!!! I truly know that...and it doesn't matter how strong a hug is...if you love that person...it will feel the strongest of all hugs...thank you for a great review...love Linda xxoo
Comment from rama devi
I like the juxtaposition of voices in the two stanzas. A women's arms are stronger than a mans in many metaphorical respects! Fine flow and simple voicing captures the POV and characterization between the lines. NIce medley of S and W sounds both stanzas and T in the second stanza. The flow between lines is not fluid but because the lines and poem are both short, it is easy to read even without smooth enjambment.
Reading this, I feel like pauses would enhance it. To keep no caps and punctuation, I recommend pauses with formatting to sculpt phrasing. Example:
stay with me always
you make me feel so secure
wrapped within my arms
a woman's embrace
may not be strong as a man's
but just as heartfelt
Love and hugs,
rd
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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I like the juxtaposition of voices in the two stanzas. A women's arms are stronger than a mans in many metaphorical respects! Fine flow and simple voicing captures the POV and characterization between the lines. NIce medley of S and W sounds both stanzas and T in the second stanza. The flow between lines is not fluid but because the lines and poem are both short, it is easy to read even without smooth enjambment.
Reading this, I feel like pauses would enhance it. To keep no caps and punctuation, I recommend pauses with formatting to sculpt phrasing. Example:
stay with me always
you make me feel so secure
wrapped within my arms
a woman's embrace
may not be strong as a man's
but just as heartfelt
Love and hugs,
rd
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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HI Sweet Angel, thank you so much for all your help...and thank you for a wonderful review my sweet friend...when it comes to love...no matter how strong the squeeze is...they feel wonderful...sigh...thank you...love you...Linda xxoo
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Comment from Ronni
True love's embrace, be it man or woman's lacks neither strength or warmth
security and reassurance is felt by both simultaneously!
Very sound message and theme dear Linda, love the pic too..
thanks for sharing...
Love, blessings, Ronni
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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True love's embrace, be it man or woman's lacks neither strength or warmth
security and reassurance is felt by both simultaneously!
Very sound message and theme dear Linda, love the pic too..
thanks for sharing...
Love, blessings, Ronni
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Hi Ronni, thank you my sweet friend for a wonderful review...and you are so very right...security and reassurance are felt by both...sigh...I love the picture as well...so good to see you...love ya...and blessings to you as well..and you are so welcome...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Susanjohn
oh such a feel good piece! perfect illustration ( colors too) ..totally compliments the sweet sentiments of this poem. I enjoyed reading!!! well done :-))))
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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oh such a feel good piece! perfect illustration ( colors too) ..totally compliments the sweet sentiments of this poem. I enjoyed reading!!! well done :-))))
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Hi Susan, thank you so much for a wonderful review...I am so glad you like it...smiling back at you...love Linda xxoo
Comment from penniless pen
I like this short poem, a woman's embrace needn't be as strong as there tends to be more emotion with it. Excellent description of the power of an embrace.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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I like this short poem, a woman's embrace needn't be as strong as there tends to be more emotion with it. Excellent description of the power of an embrace.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Hi Penniless, thank you for a great review...I am so glad you like it...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Roxanne56
Very few words but a very strong message. Don't need to add a word. Love the picture you selected. Beautiful picture for a beautiful poem Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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Very few words but a very strong message. Don't need to add a word. Love the picture you selected. Beautiful picture for a beautiful poem Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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Hi Roxanne, thank you so much for a wonderful review...I am so glad you like it...and you are so very welcome...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Leineco
Ahhh...what a lovely reversal...and yet, most apt! I don't
mean to presume to speak for my male counter parts, but
I have always felt women have a deeper connection to the
security aspect of both embracing and being embraced...I
have a suspicion many of us learned it from our dads, as
little girls :-)
A very nicely done pairing of 5-7-5s :-)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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Ahhh...what a lovely reversal...and yet, most apt! I don't
mean to presume to speak for my male counter parts, but
I have always felt women have a deeper connection to the
security aspect of both embracing and being embraced...I
have a suspicion many of us learned it from our dads, as
little girls :-)
A very nicely done pairing of 5-7-5s :-)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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Hi Lorraine, I think that when it comes to love...it doesn't matter how tight the grip is...it's going to feel wonderful...it from the heart...so good to see you sweet girl...thank you for a wonderful review...smiling back at ya...love ya Linda xxoo
Comment from kiwigirl2821
As beautiful as always and this one has a delicate presence to it as well. Profoundly gorgeous writing. I loved it sweetie! You have such a fabulous way of getting your message across. . xxoo
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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As beautiful as always and this one has a delicate presence to it as well. Profoundly gorgeous writing. I loved it sweetie! You have such a fabulous way of getting your message across. . xxoo
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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HI Deborah, thank you so very much sweet girl for a wonderful review...and for all your kind words...I am so glad you like it...God bless...love you...Linda xxoo
