Comment from MelB

Excellent

Wonderful description and imagery. Great use of alliteration. A sad story and I do wonder what happened to the lonely maiden and will she ever be found?

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018

Thanks much for reading and your thoughtful review.

Comment from Violet WolfChild

Excellent

Tragic, vivid and sad. This is beautiful and well written. I love the imagery. I could hear the ocean and the gulls.

"Seaweed wafts over her floating form.
She grips a chain in her hand like a talisman,
the name of her murderer engraved in gold."

Great job.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for your lovely review.

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

You were able to capture the hopeless cases of mysterious disappearance of people mostly women and little girls. Another stat in the unsolved murder cases brought to the attention of police authorities and their numbers are growing. Thanks for sharing a poem with very strong social relevance. All the best, well done.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for your thoughtful and kind review.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Frogbook, this is a very well written poem on a grim subject. But your work is beautifully descriptive. I particularly like -

Her body is pulled closer to the sea with the next strong wave
Velvet manta rays swim over her legs.
A plethora of loquacious gulls squawk overhead,
wings diaphanous in the sunlight,
lithely riding the warm currents of air. ..... The whole poem is a good read. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks much, Dorothy.

Comment from jppoet

Excellent

This is a very tender and sympathetic free verse ballad on this sad subject
but your artistic imagery, in superb literary excellence, captures its plight and pity masterfully. Blessings, john

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks much, Jon, appreciate you reading.

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

A good story. An actual occurrence or deep consideration, both are disturbing realities for its beholder, given thoughts a pill can't cure. The picture is precisely projected in this work, the cruel corpse floating as nature's victim. Very crisp defining of scene by given wording in this write. All in my opinion of this work.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks much for your thoughtful and eloquent review.

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello!
The visual descriptions found within your "sad little story" are incredibly powerful. Such are these times, I am afraid. As I read it, I thought of Simon in Golding's "Lord of the Flies." Powerful
One little nit: Iridescent need not be capitalized...unless, of course, you are employing poetic license.

Best Wishes,
diane

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thanks much-appreciate the read and correction also.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Here we have a free verse 'tableau vivant' of death. Yes that statement is somewhat oxymoronic but the tableau moves as a result of the sea's action rather than by voluntary action of the corpse. The impression of life therfore remains and is implied also by the actions of the sea creatures that interact with the girl's murdered body. This is an exceptionally moving piece in more senses than just one.

Had I sixstars at my disposal I would have awarded them here.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thanks so much. I am honored that you would think it worthy. I also enjoyed your thoughtful and interesting review.

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

Hi JoAnn. This is a unique premise for a poem. Yes, there are soOO many unsolved disappearances. Your unique choice of wording throughout this piece created a vivid, living imagery for your reader. You taught me a new word (bucolic).
"Velvet manta rays swim over her legs" ... this was my favorite line. What an image!

I enjoyed your story in a poem. Well done! ~~ Connie

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for your thoughtful review and I am happy that you enjoyed.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is so beautiful and it goes well with your sad poem.I didn't find this to be so violent.
The life in the ocean is not much different then human life
that is how it must be.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thanks my friend.

reply by misscookie on 08-Feb-2018

You're very welcome.Take care.
Cookie