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In my Blissful World

This is about all my friends who are struggling. I love you.

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Comment from Dean Kuch
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"...golden grass throw animated shadows across the ground." ... Very good use of alliteration and consonance of "g" used here, Ella.

"In my blissful world I can forget my pain.
My sorrows cannot stalk me here.
the vivid sunsets cast an amber
glow across the meadows;
the cursed ghosts dare not enter into this light."
... Superb imagery, and my favorite stanza.

"...And I smile" ...Short but sweet--a very powerfully penned ending to a sin-sational poem.
Exceptional poetry...

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018


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Comment from rspoet
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Hello Ella,
Fantasy can be firmly anchored to the beautiful imagery of reality
as reality can be assuaged by the "amber glow ... where ghosts dare not enter"
We are all apart of each and all
The mind is a wonderful transport through "blue-green rivers (that) branch
through limestone canyons"
The stars await .. and smile back
Welcome to fanstory
RS




 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018


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Comment from Bill O'Bier
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Happiness is not something you postpone for the future; it is something you design for the present. Today I choose life - I choose to feel life, not to deny my humanity but embrace it. Thanks so much for this wonderful poem
Bill~

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018


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    Thank you so much Bill!
Comment from estory
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I thought this was interesting, very contemporary in style, and the musical elements read like prose poetry at times, at times like free verse. I really liked the images, they were fresh, sharp, and deep. "My eyes reflect the stars" we get that connection with the sublimity of nature and the spirit, "My eyes bleed black" We feel the weight of anxieties and fears that you are trying to release. A few awkward breaks in the first stanza could be smoothed out, but the second stanza was pretty strong and the poem built up from there. We feel lots of emotion in your voice here, it is honest and personal and that makes it special. will watch for more estory

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018


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Comment from seken58
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I like that you have captured the pain and torment , often
Emotional, that some suffer which shuts out the sulight in their lives.
Often the only respite for them is in sleeping and, if fortunate,
To have blissful dreams.
An interesting and focused poem.
:-) Shirley

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018


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    Thank you Shirley!
Comment from Michelle_Clover
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This poem is absolutely amazing. Such beautiful imagery throughout. I think you are definitely on your way to being an accomplished writer. Fantastic!

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018


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    Thank you so so much!
Comment from jlsavell
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ella, it is very hard to believe you are fourteen. I wish I had a six for this exceptional write. It is quite mature.. there are many who struggle in this turbulent world... hope you are not one of them...

jlsavell

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
    I am not don't worry lol. My notes on it explain it better.
Comment from mmonaghan777
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Thank you. We need more writing like this to reassure anyone that bliss can be found and accomplished. I love positive encouragements.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018


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Comment from Liberty Justice
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What a beautiful description of your blissful world. I love your verses that are so musical. Your reader gets a sense of peacefulness and comfort. You are so at peace with yourself and your world. AWESOME! liberty justice

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018


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    Thank you so much!
reply by Liberty Justice on 10-Feb-2018
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Comment from penniless pen
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I really enjoyed this poem describing your blissful world. This well explains the common need to have a place to retreat to and recharge. There is a nice flow and rhythm to it. You are very talented, keep writing.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018


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    Thank you so much!