Childhood
The fleeting nature of innocence19 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This tetractys, Childhood, set up correctly, starts out as a happy frolic and ends in a misery of manhood. I guess the wife got the pot of gold. (Humor)
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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This tetractys, Childhood, set up correctly, starts out as a happy frolic and ends in a misery of manhood. I guess the wife got the pot of gold. (Humor)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Thank you for reading my poem, Bill. I guess that the wife did got the gold.
Comment from jlsavell
Author,
How very true is this.
"He stood at the window of the empty cafe and watched the activites in the square and he said that it was good that God kept the truths of life from the young as they were starting out or else they'd have no heart to start at all."
-- Cormac McCarthy, All the Pretty Horses
exceptional take of the innocence of childhood..
best wishes with the contest..
jlsavell
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Author,
How very true is this.
"He stood at the window of the empty cafe and watched the activites in the square and he said that it was good that God kept the truths of life from the young as they were starting out or else they'd have no heart to start at all."
-- Cormac McCarthy, All the Pretty Horses
exceptional take of the innocence of childhood..
best wishes with the contest..
jlsavell
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Sad words, but what a lovely review. Thank you for taking the time to offer that quote.
Comment from James H. Oldfield
I'd not really considered the pot of gold myth as a metaphor, before, so,e fine poetic fodde, there.
Great job, and a great observation. Nothing at all to suggest to improve this one.
Take care, and best of luck in the contest.
-James
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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I'd not really considered the pot of gold myth as a metaphor, before, so,e fine poetic fodde, there.
Great job, and a great observation. Nothing at all to suggest to improve this one.
Take care, and best of luck in the contest.
-James
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Thanks for your kind words, James.
Comment from moonsunrise
What a great poem. I had never heard of a Tetractys.
The visual is so happy, colorful and heart warming. If only we could all stay so innocent - no worries, no prejudices, no judgements, acceptance of one another regardless of genre, religious preference and color.
Very well done!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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What a great poem. I had never heard of a Tetractys.
The visual is so happy, colorful and heart warming. If only we could all stay so innocent - no worries, no prejudices, no judgements, acceptance of one another regardless of genre, religious preference and color.
Very well done!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Thank you. I had never heard of a tetractys either
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Have a great day!
Comment from TPAC
I carefully examined the rules for this particular poetry style, I found this writes lacks its four syllables connection.
Suggest:
Not a pot of gold
Hoping this was some help, certainly an opinion of this write.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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I carefully examined the rules for this particular poetry style, I found this writes lacks its four syllables connection.
Suggest:
Not a pot of gold
Hoping this was some help, certainly an opinion of this write.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Thank you
Comment from Fabiha_N
This is a very well-written poem, and carries a true message as well. Childhood is the best part of everyone's lives because it was a time of pure joy and laughter. It's sad that we all have to grow up at some point and have no time left to actually enjoy ourselves. Time just passes by so quickly..
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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This is a very well-written poem, and carries a true message as well. Childhood is the best part of everyone's lives because it was a time of pure joy and laughter. It's sad that we all have to grow up at some point and have no time left to actually enjoy ourselves. Time just passes by so quickly..
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Thank you for your nice review. Take life slowly today and enjoy.
Comment from Boogienights
I love that picture and your poem. Sadly you are probably right, growing up can take the color and magic out of life when you have to worry about adult problems. That's why you need to be a "kid" whenever possible and have as much fun as you can fit in. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I love that picture and your poem. Sadly you are probably right, growing up can take the color and magic out of life when you have to worry about adult problems. That's why you need to be a "kid" whenever possible and have as much fun as you can fit in. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I totally agree...about being a kid that is. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Debbie,
For the young are innocent indeed before the problems of adulthood enter the scene. Great picture and I assume this is of your grandson.
Cheers,
Winslow
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Dear Debbie,
For the young are innocent indeed before the problems of adulthood enter the scene. Great picture and I assume this is of your grandson.
Cheers,
Winslow
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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That is Eddy, Winslow. It breaks my heart when he is that happy. Thank you for reviewing my poem.
Comment from Pantygynt
This tetractys does exactly what the contest sponser invited you to do. Not only does it follow the syllabic requirements of the form but it makes perfect grammatic success and uses imagery and metaphor to good effect.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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This tetractys does exactly what the contest sponser invited you to do. Not only does it follow the syllabic requirements of the form but it makes perfect grammatic success and uses imagery and metaphor to good effect.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Thank you for this wonderful review. It was my first tetractys.
Comment from Ogden
A very well-written Tetractys contest entry.
I don't believe men necessarily lose their innocence by virtue of attaining manhood, which is not done by choice.
Some of us consider ourselves innocent of wrongdoing. :)
Don (Ogden)
Don (Ogden)
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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A very well-written Tetractys contest entry.
I don't believe men necessarily lose their innocence by virtue of attaining manhood, which is not done by choice.
Some of us consider ourselves innocent of wrongdoing. :)
Don (Ogden)
Don (Ogden)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I am convinced of your innocence, Ogden. Thank you for your review and for making me a fan.
