Pecos Valley
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Comment from Zue65
Yes, the employment of Old West jargon made it easier to prepare the readers for the setting, characterization, setting the tone and mood of the story. I enjoyed reading this post for it gave me the chance to have a taste of the Old west. thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Yes, the employment of Old West jargon made it easier to prepare the readers for the setting, characterization, setting the tone and mood of the story. I enjoyed reading this post for it gave me the chance to have a taste of the Old west. thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. I am using the Old West jargon because I agree it lends more credence to the tale. Appreciate you taking the time to read my tale and pen this review.
Comment from MelB
Hi Brett, I think you are doing a great job with this story. I for one, like westerns. Jax Franklin and George Winterwin both have written westerns and I think they've done well with them.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Hi Brett, I think you are doing a great job with this story. I for one, like westerns. Jax Franklin and George Winterwin both have written westerns and I think they've done well with them.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. It seems to be coming along well. Appreciate you taking the time to read it and write a review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from judiverse
Mr. Sheldon seems a well-respected man, and Wyatt seems to have dreams of Mr. Sheldon taking him with him on his ventures. Wyatt has some understanding of Isabell, as they both were thrust into the paths the life had put before them. Good observation that we don't know what fate has in store for us. Good introductions of the piano player and isabell. Take a look at the sentence starting "Scantily dressed." Make it clear that Isabell is the one scantily dressed, not Wyatt. Great story and good development. judi
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Mr. Sheldon seems a well-respected man, and Wyatt seems to have dreams of Mr. Sheldon taking him with him on his ventures. Wyatt has some understanding of Isabell, as they both were thrust into the paths the life had put before them. Good observation that we don't know what fate has in store for us. Good introductions of the piano player and isabell. Take a look at the sentence starting "Scantily dressed." Make it clear that Isabell is the one scantily dressed, not Wyatt. Great story and good development. judi
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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I looked at that sentence and corrected it. Appreciate you pointing it out to me. Glad you enjoyed this portion of the tale and invite you to ride along as the rest of the tale unfolds.
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You're very welcome. Enjoyed the characters in this. Lots of atmosphere with the bar. judi
Comment from Ben Colder
This sounds as if will make a good story. Louie Lamoure type. Sorry I haven't been reviewing your other work. By the outline and descriptive characters it should do well. Never noticed anything to grind my teeth about. Keep on writing.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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This sounds as if will make a good story. Louie Lamoure type. Sorry I haven't been reviewing your other work. By the outline and descriptive characters it should do well. Never noticed anything to grind my teeth about. Keep on writing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review. Much more to come so I invite you to ride along as the tale unfolds.
Comment from apky
This was another very well written and excellent read of your story, Brett.
I really admire your finely defined characterisation of the people populating your story, each as distinct as a fingerprint. This is a sign of the mastery of excellent writing and craftsmanship.
believed just 'cause trouble descended don't mean you gotta offer it a place to sit down. ~ I liked this a lot. It sounds like a good philosophy.
"Who's(Whose) throat you gonna cut with that, half-pint?" Charlie asked him.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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This was another very well written and excellent read of your story, Brett.
I really admire your finely defined characterisation of the people populating your story, each as distinct as a fingerprint. This is a sign of the mastery of excellent writing and craftsmanship.
believed just 'cause trouble descended don't mean you gotta offer it a place to sit down. ~ I liked this a lot. It sounds like a good philosophy.
"Who's(Whose) throat you gonna cut with that, half-pint?" Charlie asked him.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. One of the features I am trying to focus on with this one is strong characters. The Old West was full of them, and I plan to keep developing these more. Appreciate you taking the time to read this portion of my tale and to write a review.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I like that your novel is told through the eyes of a narrator. It helps the reader put himself in the story by becoming the narrator. My story is also told by a narrator.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I like that your novel is told through the eyes of a narrator. It helps the reader put himself in the story by becoming the narrator. My story is also told by a narrator.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. I agree, at least for this tale, that a narrator paints the picture better. Appreciate your comments and support, and the review.
Comment from robina1978
A lovely photo of two horses and then you wrote about some interesting characters. I think I might have read a previous chapter as well. A.o. a wore.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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A lovely photo of two horses and then you wrote about some interesting characters. I think I might have read a previous chapter as well. A.o. a wore.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Appreciate you taking the time to read this portion of my tale and write a review. Deeply depicted characters are one of the features of this tale I am trying to develop. Much more to come so I invite you to ride along as the tale progresses.
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is my third or fourth installment. I enjoyed Chapter 4. Unfortunately I have no additional constructive comments. I think that it is a good story and plan to read all installment. Once again, good luck.
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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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This is my third or fourth installment. I enjoyed Chapter 4. Unfortunately I have no additional constructive comments. I think that it is a good story and plan to read all installment. Once again, good luck.
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Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Glad you are enjoying what I am writing in this tale. Appreciate your comments and reviews and that you will follow the tale all the way through to its conclusion. That might be a while as there are several chapters I plan to pen.
