If only
Ridden with sorrow and guilt9 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Suicide is a horrible thing to have to experience when it's a friend or family member. The worst part about it is that there's rarely any closure.
Contrary to popular beliefs not all those who commit suicide leave notes. Sometimes the families never find out why and can only speculate.
Good 1-9-1, very well thought out.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Suicide is a horrible thing to have to experience when it's a friend or family member. The worst part about it is that there's rarely any closure.
Contrary to popular beliefs not all those who commit suicide leave notes. Sometimes the families never find out why and can only speculate.
Good 1-9-1, very well thought out.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thanks Dean J. X
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-nine-one, If Only, has the correct format and deals with the 'What if' question that tends to swirl around a suicide. Guilt replaces the apathy of our typical response.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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This one-nine-one, If Only, has the correct format and deals with the 'What if' question that tends to swirl around a suicide. Guilt replaces the apathy of our typical response.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. Jen.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 1-9-1 poem. When someone gets to the point of suicide we wonder whyv the person did not tell us about their problems. Maybe they did tell us, but we did not care to listen.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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A very well-written 1-9-1 poem. When someone gets to the point of suicide we wonder whyv the person did not tell us about their problems. Maybe they did tell us, but we did not care to listen.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thanks Sandra for reading and reviewing.
Comment from l.raven
this is so sad...but so very true...if only
we would have talked......to many times people don't listen...and someone takes a life...so very well written...picture perfect...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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this is so sad...but so very true...if only
we would have talked......to many times people don't listen...and someone takes a life...so very well written...picture perfect...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much Linda for your comments.
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you are always so welcome...xxoo love
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 1-9-1 Lifee Poetry writing prompt.
Well said and the emotion is clear.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 1-9-1 Lifee Poetry writing prompt.
Well said and the emotion is clear.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you
Comment from RodG
This poem depicts a tragedy--a suicide-- that might have been avoided if the Speaker and the victim had only talked. So much said in three brief lines. Very poignant.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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This poem depicts a tragedy--a suicide-- that might have been avoided if the Speaker and the victim had only talked. So much said in three brief lines. Very poignant.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thankyou so much for your kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad write, but poignant because when we talk we seem to release our troubles when they are shared with someone else and World doesn't seem so bad, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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This is a sad write, but poignant because when we talk we seem to release our troubles when they are shared with someone else and World doesn't seem so bad, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Cheers Dolly, much appreciated. J x
Comment from Sherman541
Very emotional picture. Short poems often are straight and to the point, as well as, very blunt. This is very blunt, but so profound and very sad. Many of us have never had experience with suicide, it is not the outspoken people one must worry about. It is those who speak little and are loners in a sense, but really do not talk much. A sad painful topic. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Very emotional picture. Short poems often are straight and to the point, as well as, very blunt. This is very blunt, but so profound and very sad. Many of us have never had experience with suicide, it is not the outspoken people one must worry about. It is those who speak little and are loners in a sense, but really do not talk much. A sad painful topic. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you for your comments I really appreciate them.
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you are welcome
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks end of a life; author feels guilty; if only they had talked for a resolution; he never had taken his life; well said, well done; good luck with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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This speaks end of a life; author feels guilty; if only they had talked for a resolution; he never had taken his life; well said, well done; good luck with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you
