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Lipstick on your collar

Caught my husband out at last.

8 total reviews 
Comment from Nuki
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I liked this poem very much, it had a natural rhythm.
Did you draw this picture as well? Your choice of colors are excellent. The red background, as well as the red in the girl's hair. ð??¹

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2018

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
    Thanks for the review. I didn't draw the picture.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem about betrayal. To suspect it is making a person paranoid. When we find out our gut feeling was right it feels like the world aroyb us crumble under our feet.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018

reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
    Many thanks for your comments.
Comment from Dean Kuch
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I suppose if your husband or significant other were a cross-dresser that could be construed as a bit of a betrayal in a way, heh-heh.
Especially if he ruined your new blouse!
Excellent rhyming in this entry with a surprise twist. I gotta admit, I didn't see it coming.
Well done and good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean �

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
    Thanks a lot Dean. Take care Jen.
reply by Dean Kuch on 02-Feb-2018
    You're welcome, Jen. I hope my vote helps.
    ~Dean
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
    Yes a great help. Thanks. X
Comment from mandyjpg
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What an interesting take on betrayal. There was a twist at the end which surprised me. I even let out a chuckle at the end. Nice work! I wish you good luck with the contest!

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2018

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
    Many thanks
Comment from GLOBALEYES
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This was cute and totally unsuspecting, especially with the selected picture . There is a nice rhyme pattern with good meter. Suggestion: "I'll stop you 'from' ever wearing..." completes that last beat. Betty Davis

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2018

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
    You are quite right. I have changed it. Thank you so much for your help.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This made me laugh, at first I was wondering where it was going until the last stanza! he he he, I then laughed, good luck with the contest, a great entry, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2018

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
    Thanks Dolly. So glad you liked it. X
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Betrayal' writing prompt.
You have made your story clear in your verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2018

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
    Many thanks
Comment from Ricky1024
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Lipstick on Your Collar is a betrayal contest poetry prompt Richard team as well as imagery Floyd well-read well with no grammar issues as well skip to measure for firmly in place good luck with this doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2018

reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
    Many thanks