A Tragic Satyric Comedy
free verse9 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Poet,
For me these seems that this evil female does cause you pain and leaves you stranded. For she is out to do you harm even though all you want is a wild romp in the hay.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Poet,
For me these seems that this evil female does cause you pain and leaves you stranded. For she is out to do you harm even though all you want is a wild romp in the hay.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 02-Feb-2018
Comment from MaryAnnie
Are you kidding me? This is freaking brilliant. What an journey of mockery and disbelief and wtf you just took me on. So truly true. And so well done. I'm just glad I had a six to give it.
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Are you kidding me? This is freaking brilliant. What an journey of mockery and disbelief and wtf you just took me on. So truly true. And so well done. I'm just glad I had a six to give it.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2018
Comment from GLOBALEYES
It's hard to talk about what you don't know. Vindictiveness for the sake of it? Sounds like someone had one too many. "Is that a sextant in your pocket?" Funny. I like the font style, color and background. Sad picture you've displayed suggest inevitable deadly outcome. Betty Davis
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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It's hard to talk about what you don't know. Vindictiveness for the sake of it? Sounds like someone had one too many. "Is that a sextant in your pocket?" Funny. I like the font style, color and background. Sad picture you've displayed suggest inevitable deadly outcome. Betty Davis
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks for your comments and review. I'm not quite clear on why you've marked me down though. Do you have suggestions for improvement? Regards, Anon
Comment from brenda faye curtis
The raw emotion you've poured out so clearly describes the skin-scorching experience of opening your heart to another, only to have the one you loved and trusted pour salt in it. You clearly illustrate that the pain of betrayal is as physical as it is emotional, and I'm sure you'll do great in this contest. Love the hawk!
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The raw emotion you've poured out so clearly describes the skin-scorching experience of opening your heart to another, only to have the one you loved and trusted pour salt in it. You clearly illustrate that the pain of betrayal is as physical as it is emotional, and I'm sure you'll do great in this contest. Love the hawk!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
Comment from Mustang Patty
Scrotal dust? Is that a real thing? Yuck.
Anyway...Dear Anonymous Poet,
Thank you for sharing this somewhat macabre look at what a wretched woman can do to a good man -- or vise versa,
Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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Scrotal dust? Is that a real thing? Yuck.
Anyway...Dear Anonymous Poet,
Thank you for sharing this somewhat macabre look at what a wretched woman can do to a good man -- or vise versa,
Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
Comment from James H. Oldfield
Ok, I have to admit I genuinely laughed out loud at the first stanza :)
Wonderful, very well done.
A very good poem throughout, I enjoyed this in a dark, guilty way.
Best of luck in the contest.
Take care.
-James
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Ok, I have to admit I genuinely laughed out loud at the first stanza :)
Wonderful, very well done.
A very good poem throughout, I enjoyed this in a dark, guilty way.
Best of luck in the contest.
Take care.
-James
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow! This is a write and a half! And I loved it! Poignant words here of vengeance! 'Scrotal dust!" And "sextant in your pocket", loved it! Good luck with the contest, this is a great entry, love Dolly x
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Wow! This is a write and a half! And I loved it! Poignant words here of vengeance! 'Scrotal dust!" And "sextant in your pocket", loved it! Good luck with the contest, this is a great entry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
Comment from Sherman541
I love that picture, though I am not certain it matches the poem you have written. It does seem quite tragic and filled with some betrayal. I like the deep red color on the black, putting emphasis on the tragic and vindictiveness. Ouch, is maybe one way to put it. Very Nicely done. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
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I love that picture, though I am not certain it matches the poem you have written. It does seem quite tragic and filled with some betrayal. I like the deep red color on the black, putting emphasis on the tragic and vindictiveness. Ouch, is maybe one way to put it. Very Nicely done. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
Comment from MSJVClarke
Well, I suppose this poem certainly fits the criteria for a satire. It's quite tragic, emotional and humorous, all wrapped up together to make your point. I think it fits the challenge of betrayal quite well.
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Well, I suppose this poem certainly fits the criteria for a satire. It's quite tragic, emotional and humorous, all wrapped up together to make your point. I think it fits the challenge of betrayal quite well.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
