Pecos Valley
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Ridin' For The Brand"Ride the trail with Wyatt and the Bar JS Wranglers
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Comment from George Jr
I enjoyed the way you create the characters but wish there were more definition between there identities and for me there was a bit to much Old Western Jargon thrown around. A good read none-the-less. Thank you for writing.
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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I enjoyed the way you create the characters but wish there were more definition between there identities and for me there was a bit to much Old Western Jargon thrown around. A good read none-the-less. Thank you for writing.
-peace
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Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. The Old West jargon is here to stay throughout its telling. Much more to come so I invite you to ride along as the tale unfolds.
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:-D Love you attitude Brett, gitty-up!
Comment from frierajac
I guess that your story is around the time of Wyatt Earp? And the character Wyatt is a namesake. I like the manner it's being told in the jargon, etc. No typos or anything.
I have got to give you a 6 for the popularity side. I don't cotton to special effects
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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I guess that your story is around the time of Wyatt Earp? And the character Wyatt is a namesake. I like the manner it's being told in the jargon, etc. No typos or anything.
I have got to give you a 6 for the popularity side. I don't cotton to special effects
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Was Wyatt named after Earp? Nope. I do not care for videos, a lot of pictures, of other special effects in a piece of writing. To me it distracts from the words and becomes the centerpiece of the writing. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale and invite you to ride along as the rest of it unfolds.
Comment from Sugarray77
I loved the western jargon you woven into your story. This is a good chapter that I think is balanced and flows well. I love westerns. Well done. Keep at it!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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I loved the western jargon you woven into your story. This is a good chapter that I think is balanced and flows well. I love westerns. Well done. Keep at it!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review. Much more to come so I invite you to ride along as the tale unfolds.
Comment from Ella Gott
This was simply amazing! You did a great job for just starting the western genre! I thoroughly enjoyed this as I read and I didn't want it to end! Keep posting this awesomeness!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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This was simply amazing! You did a great job for just starting the western genre! I thoroughly enjoyed this as I read and I didn't want it to end! Keep posting this awesomeness!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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Appreciate your support.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Oh, no! I do NOT like Sheldon and his guys. They are cattle rustlers! Hang the lot of 'em, I say. I sure hope Wyatt tells us they get caught and shot, hanged, or somehow put out of our misery!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Oh, no! I do NOT like Sheldon and his guys. They are cattle rustlers! Hang the lot of 'em, I say. I sure hope Wyatt tells us they get caught and shot, hanged, or somehow put out of our misery!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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But are they cattle rustlers? Perhaps they are Arizona Rangers confiscating stolen cattle? Ranchers?, Maybe they are members of the Calvary? Sorry, can't give all my secrets away just yet. It will all come out as the story unfolds. Thanks for the review. Appreciate it very much.
Comment from royowen
I loved the palaver, establishing your Characters. I believe that was a common pursuit by rustlers near the border, using it as a cover for their clandestine activities. My favourite thing was the conversation of the characters. Well done, Brett. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I loved the palaver, establishing your Characters. I believe that was a common pursuit by rustlers near the border, using it as a cover for their clandestine activities. My favourite thing was the conversation of the characters. Well done, Brett. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Rustling cattle did occur with regularity back then,. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale and appreciate your support.; Trying to focus heavily on the conversations as the tale progresses.
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Well done Brett,
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love your line, "Shoot Gunter and put him out of our misery." It's what I like about your characterization. It's humorous, easy banter. To me that is what is making your story good. In this chapter, there is literally no action--just dialogue. The story is character driven and I'm liking your characters. Good job on this chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I love your line, "Shoot Gunter and put him out of our misery." It's what I like about your characterization. It's humorous, easy banter. To me that is what is making your story good. In this chapter, there is literally no action--just dialogue. The story is character driven and I'm liking your characters. Good job on this chapter.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Good characters always make a tale much better. These I will keep developing as the tale progresses.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the conclusion of this fast moving Western Fiction that Mr. Shelton would come up with more chores to do than others would expect of him and that snake or rabbit would be served with all meals everyday; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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This speaks the conclusion of this fast moving Western Fiction that Mr. Shelton would come up with more chores to do than others would expect of him and that snake or rabbit would be served with all meals everyday; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the tale. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MelB
Hi Brett, you've done a great job with the old west jargon and dialogue. Good development of characters. I look forward to reading more of the story!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2018
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Hi Brett, you've done a great job with the old west jargon and dialogue. Good development of characters. I look forward to reading more of the story!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2018
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Thanks for your comments and support. Westerns are a new genre for me so I am kind of learning as I go. Much more to come so I invite you to follow along as the tale unfolds.
Comment from judiverse
I doubt that throwing rocks at a horse would be a way to endear yourself to it. Wyatt shows that he is young and immature. Probably not ready to carry a firearm. I imagine part of the story will be how he matures as the action unfolds. Amusing bit about how loud Gunther rings the dinner bell. And the prospect of rabbit stew or snake doesn't sound very appetizing. Great characterization with Verne and Mr. Shelton's arguments. Somehow the phrase "matter of fact" seemed out of place. The dialect usually sounds so authentic, but that sounds too smooth. judi
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I doubt that throwing rocks at a horse would be a way to endear yourself to it. Wyatt shows that he is young and immature. Probably not ready to carry a firearm. I imagine part of the story will be how he matures as the action unfolds. Amusing bit about how loud Gunther rings the dinner bell. And the prospect of rabbit stew or snake doesn't sound very appetizing. Great characterization with Verne and Mr. Shelton's arguments. Somehow the phrase "matter of fact" seemed out of place. The dialect usually sounds so authentic, but that sounds too smooth. judi
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I agree with your assessment about "matter-of-fact" and have removed it. I appreciate the in-depth review. I invite you to keep following along as this tale unfolds.
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You're very welcome. Great work with your characters. jludi
