The Chain of Love
A poem of love7 total reviews
Comment from TPAC
I felt a slight sway in the course of the read, views given were entertaining delightful to senses, hope they come back for your sake. I thought this piece was expressive of feelings, conveying a needed desire - companionship.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I felt a slight sway in the course of the read, views given were entertaining delightful to senses, hope they come back for your sake. I thought this piece was expressive of feelings, conveying a needed desire - companionship.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you. Tpac.
Comment from James H. Oldfield
Very nice, a really well-written, deliberately dreamy poem, bear lovely expressions of love.
Line three, it feel like a stronger word than 'connected' is needed. Perhaps 'bound'? 'Tethered', perhaps (though that may hold unwanted connotations of control). Your choice, of course.
I love the repetition of 'she is so far away', in the mid-section, very effective.
Great job, I really liked this.
Take care.
-James
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Very nice, a really well-written, deliberately dreamy poem, bear lovely expressions of love.
Line three, it feel like a stronger word than 'connected' is needed. Perhaps 'bound'? 'Tethered', perhaps (though that may hold unwanted connotations of control). Your choice, of course.
I love the repetition of 'she is so far away', in the mid-section, very effective.
Great job, I really liked this.
Take care.
-James
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you, James. I'll check out your sayings.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
the wings of an angel hold the chain out to me.
I smile in my sleep and dream of her smile
only to awake with my love on my lips.
My heart is here.
Beautiful work I loved this well done kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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the wings of an angel hold the chain out to me.
I smile in my sleep and dream of her smile
only to awake with my love on my lips.
My heart is here.
Beautiful work I loved this well done kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you Meia. It is just feelings felt long ago.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have felt those feelings many times and you describe a yearning like no other in life, I could feel the pain in your words, yet there is a serenity throughout your poem too, good luck with it, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I have felt those feelings many times and you describe a yearning like no other in life, I could feel the pain in your words, yet there is a serenity throughout your poem too, good luck with it, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you Dolly.
Comment from Violet WolfChild
Excellent job. The emotion of this poem is clear and follows the theme of love.
"My heart holds a chain
that cannot be broken.
It is connected to the one I love."
Such a strong opening statement. Beautifully written.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Excellent job. The emotion of this poem is clear and follows the theme of love.
"My heart holds a chain
that cannot be broken.
It is connected to the one I love."
Such a strong opening statement. Beautifully written.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you Violet.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a lovely free verse speaks that heart holds a chain that cannot be broken as it is connected to the one the poet loves; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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This is a lovely free verse speaks that heart holds a chain that cannot be broken as it is connected to the one the poet loves; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank Al. Glad to have you with me.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Free Verse Poetry' writing prompt.
Well written and a clear story of love.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Free Verse Poetry' writing prompt.
Well written and a clear story of love.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you Sharon.
