Jesus is God. God is alive.
I'm going to shout it. No doubt about it.5 total reviews
Comment from Liberty Justice
SIX STARS. 6******. I entered this website again just to vote and review because I have not written in a few weeks. My thumbs up just launched you higher up into 3rd place. Your story is so spiritually uplifting and inspirational. That is a worldly question: "Am I my brother's keeper?" Something we should probably think about helping less fortunate people. WELL DONE! Good luck. liberty justice
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SIX STARS. 6******. I entered this website again just to vote and review because I have not written in a few weeks. My thumbs up just launched you higher up into 3rd place. Your story is so spiritually uplifting and inspirational. That is a worldly question: "Am I my brother's keeper?" Something we should probably think about helping less fortunate people. WELL DONE! Good luck. liberty justice
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Mystery Writer. I think you have made a few valid points with this write. I also think that God will show up at the exact right time, as there are no mistakes in how this world and its people are going to find our Lord. Good luck in your contest. This is strong writing. xoxo Kiwi
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Hello Mystery Writer. I think you have made a few valid points with this write. I also think that God will show up at the exact right time, as there are no mistakes in how this world and its people are going to find our Lord. Good luck in your contest. This is strong writing. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
I was going to offer revisions for the quotation fiasco in your piece, but between the punctuation and quotations there is too much. Every couplet is, in my opinion, in need of revision. That is only because of the category of this challenge and the clarity of statements and questions. You've used a lot of quotable material, which is being confused with the poet's voice.
Example: Couplets six and seven...
"Is that why so many people hate you, my Lord?"
"Can this be why they say you don't exist?"
(Why are there quotation marks around the poet's voice. This is a poem to the reader, not a conversation with God.)
God said: "Everyone practicing evil hates the light"
"And does not come to the light, lest his evil deeds be exposed."
(The quotes after light are unnecessary as the statement goes on to the word 'exposed'. )
I'm certain I'm overreaching with this, but I found the text confusing with the poet's voice having a conversation as well as making a statement. I would treat God as an apostrophe with whom you speak to without quotation marks, and save the quotes for the text from the Bible.
Sorry to be so negative. I think with a revision this will win. It may win anyway, but I believe it could be shined up still.
Happy day.
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I was going to offer revisions for the quotation fiasco in your piece, but between the punctuation and quotations there is too much. Every couplet is, in my opinion, in need of revision. That is only because of the category of this challenge and the clarity of statements and questions. You've used a lot of quotable material, which is being confused with the poet's voice.
Example: Couplets six and seven...
"Is that why so many people hate you, my Lord?"
"Can this be why they say you don't exist?"
(Why are there quotation marks around the poet's voice. This is a poem to the reader, not a conversation with God.)
God said: "Everyone practicing evil hates the light"
"And does not come to the light, lest his evil deeds be exposed."
(The quotes after light are unnecessary as the statement goes on to the word 'exposed'. )
I'm certain I'm overreaching with this, but I found the text confusing with the poet's voice having a conversation as well as making a statement. I would treat God as an apostrophe with whom you speak to without quotation marks, and save the quotes for the text from the Bible.
Sorry to be so negative. I think with a revision this will win. It may win anyway, but I believe it could be shined up still.
Happy day.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
Comment from Susan Burger
Thought provoking piece. Why do so many prefer the darkness over the light?
One of my daily prayers is Jesus let people see more of you and less of me! That is our mission as followers of Jesus Christ is to love. Just love that is it.
Nice work! My only criticism is that for some reason there is a lot of white space after your piece, to get down to the bottom to review. Not sure why that is, but it does make it harder to look at the piece as it is reviewed.
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Thought provoking piece. Why do so many prefer the darkness over the light?
One of my daily prayers is Jesus let people see more of you and less of me! That is our mission as followers of Jesus Christ is to love. Just love that is it.
Nice work! My only criticism is that for some reason there is a lot of white space after your piece, to get down to the bottom to review. Not sure why that is, but it does make it harder to look at the piece as it is reviewed.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2018
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Statement-Question contest entry you have penned for the contest. Yes He is alive and lives in the hearts of the believers! Best wishes in the contest! Blessings, Teri
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This is a very well written Statement-Question contest entry you have penned for the contest. Yes He is alive and lives in the hearts of the believers! Best wishes in the contest! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-Jan-2018
