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A Mental Journey to Monterey

Thoughts of My Music Career

12 total reviews 
Comment from Joy Graham
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It's not easy to break into the music world. I wish you well with that. I think your poem and picture are in harmony together. I'm glad you defined hook in your author notes. I thought you were a crochet guy? Keep working on your music dream. I hope it works out for you.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Hi Joy; I never played croquet and I think I take that back because maybe when I was about 12. Thank you very much for your reading and reviewing of my work and thank you for your welcoming thoughts.
    Alex
reply by Joy Graham on 04-Jan-2018
    I wrote crochet. It's like knitting, but you use a hook instead of knitting needles.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
    So that's what it is, Joy, I thought you meant croquet. Chuckle!
    Alex
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hello Krys123, Alex, You've penned a poem that's both deeply personal and profound. Of special note:

I've been downsized
by democracy
and told so much
hypocracy
that I've eluded truth
since my youth
and ended with animosity.

(A, downsized by democracy is a line that many can/will relate to, and not just in the music field, but in many fields of employment/unemployment. The squeeze keeps getting tighter. If truth be told, I think we all have eluded truth at one time or another--that's how we keep on going when life becomes too troubled.)

Today you wrote something brave -- six star for you.
"Free verse is free-flow from the heart ~ LateBloomer"

Keep the blue waters flowing ... be they blue or be they true.
Smiles, Bloomer


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you very much, Late Bloomer, for a very surprising and astonishing six-star rating which I truly appreciate wholeheartedly. Thank you for your positive assessment and your welcoming thoughts.
    Alex
Comment from Lulube
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A very heartfelt, truthful self-encounter of your music side of life. One line particularly hit home for me, my father was a miller who gave insufficient hugs and I've regretted that throughout the years. I have those exact feelings over my dad. We do not have that father/daughter relationship and it has had a severe impact on my entire life. He is now 89 yrs and I am 62 yrs and I cannot ever see that bond connecting before one of us passes. and that's a crying shame. Maybe that's why we both love our music so much. You have achieved much success in your life and you should be proud of yourself when you reminisce about your life time achievements. You loved music and you went for it in your own way. Keep on playing and writing, for this is your true talent that you share with the world.

lulube

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, Lulube, for your reading and reviewing of my work and I also understand of your relationship as it can be very hard in that kind of circumstance for anyone and that type of relationship. Thank you very much for reading again and take care and have a good one especially with all those that you can love dearly.
    Alex
reply by Lulube on 04-Jan-2018
    welcome and thank you Alex

    lulube
Comment from Rubylou
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Hello Alex,
This is a powerful story which is made more impressive as you share your dreams and the journey thereof.

My favorite line, "... just matters that I tried."

The illustration reflects your first line , "Walking between the shadows..." impressively.
Rubylou

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you very much, Rubylou, for reading and reviewing this work and also I'm glad you got something out of it. Thank you for your welcoming thoughts and take care and have a good one.
    Alex
Comment from judiverse
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This tells of an amazing journey. Poignant details in this, such as the father giving insufficient hugs, and the sorrows of stumbling over failures. Stanza about being "downsized by democracy" is great and very revealing. You do a great job of telling your story in this. Sounds like you have found your home in Monterey. Shows how you've been working things out. judi

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you very much, Judi, for reading and reviewing which I always deem to be an honor. Thank you for your welcoming thoughts and take care and have a good one my friend.
    Alex
reply by judiverse on 04-Jan-2018
    You're very welcome. You say a lot about yourself in this. judi
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem about your life and chosen career. We all make mistakes in our lives. Sometimes we are hold back or pushed in a direction that we don't want to go. But somehow we get through it all with scars and bruises.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you very much, Sandra, for reading and reviewing this writings which I truly appreciate. Thank you also for your welcoming thoughts and take care and have a good one.
    Alex
Comment from Dean Kuch
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"Of all those distant instant goodbyes
which always leaves left a strain
on all those hurt feelings from lies
that were soon left let/washed down the drain."
...The majority of this stanza was written in past tense, Alex. I made a few suggestions with that in mind...

My favorite lines were:
"the many miles of roads
I've taken for a ride,
doesn't matter who I've owed,
just matters that I've tried."


I enjoyed this poetic journey and traveling along with you, Alex.
Bravo.
~Dean

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you very much, Dean, for your help in the few areas which I really like the word washed. Also, left a strain instead it leaves a strain. Thank you very much for your positive thoughts unwelcoming ideas which I truly appreciate wholeheartedly.
    Alex
reply by Dean Kuch on 04-Jan-2018
    My pleasure, Alex.
    Anytime.
    ~Dr. Shadow
Comment from royowen
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I sounds like a real ballad, though maybe some adjustment to the varying meter may be needed, (I very rarely put music to anything I write these days) some great rhyming, and creating some wonderfully memorable lines, very ballady, well done dear Alex, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you very much, Roy, for reading and reviewing this work which I truly appreciate I'm glad you think it sounds like a valid is that's what I was going for and take care and have a good one.
    Alex.
Comment from Sis Cat
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Alex, perhaps because I hang I am contemplating picking up a guitar that your narrative poem about a traveling musician appealed to me so powerfully that I wanted to cry because I can imagine myself in that life. All the times I saw musicians on stage or in subways I day dream of joining their ranks. This is the first stanza that jumped out at me because I am trying many things right now from haiku to solo performance, from poetry slams to story slams. Even if I fail to win, at least I can say I tried:

In any mystic journey,
it's traveling to an end,
and even if I hurry,
doesn't promise I'll extend,
the many miles of roads
I've taken for a ride,
doesn't matter who I've owed,
just matters that I've tried.

How in the world did that happen? I started singing instead of reading my poems and months later I took a songwriting class and I am contemplating going further. Your poem captures the befuddlement of becoming a rock 'n' roll singer:

A rock 'n' roll singer, I came to be,
without a clue of what I was to know.

I have been reading Steinbeck last year and listening to music by the Black Irish Band that sings of Monterey, so your piece of heaven ending calmed and brightened me:

I found myself a resting place,
a dream called Monterey,
and I'm still in my middle phase
creating hooks in which to play.

I love your free verse with scattered rhyme. I can imagine this read or accompanied with a guitar. It belongs to the long tradition of songs about and by traveling musicians. I know you told me you seldom travel and perform anymore, and yet I can feel the hunger for the road myself.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Dear Andre, what a fantastic analytical observation of my poem or that's what I would call it besides a review. You hit on a lot of the notes and concepts that I was trying to get across.
    Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, my friend, and take care and always have a good one with all those that love you dearly.
    Alex
reply by Sis Cat on 04-Jan-2018
    You're welcome, Alex. Much obliged.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks history in concept of music and journey to the world of music and shares experience of passion music that stands out in memory as he is trying for the dream Monterey; I liked. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you very much, Dr. Alcreator, for your welcoming comments and also for reading and reviewing this writing which I truly appreciate.
    Alex