Going to the Party - Dialogue Only
A mature couple prepare for a night out.22 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Daniel. It's those familiar conversations that I believe most people would miss should they all of a sudden not be there. You've done well to express this. I found myself thinking OMG that must be what I sound like! Great stuff! Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Hi Daniel. It's those familiar conversations that I believe most people would miss should they all of a sudden not be there. You've done well to express this. I found myself thinking OMG that must be what I sound like! Great stuff! Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much Kiwi fro your review and kind words. I am so glad you liked it.
Comment from humpwhistle
Yeah, it all sounds familiar to me.
It's like playing ping pong--one ping gets a pong response.
It might help readers if you named the wife
and used her name a time or two--just to help keep things straight.
Just a thought.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Yeah, it all sounds familiar to me.
It's like playing ping pong--one ping gets a pong response.
It might help readers if you named the wife
and used her name a time or two--just to help keep things straight.
Just a thought.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your review and critique. I truly appreciate it. You are the second person to suggest I name the woman. I will do that pronto. Thanks again.
