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The Shed

A writer loses the reason of his existence

29 total reviews 
Comment from zekeziemann
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A good story best understood by writers, but also by others who understand the peace and quiet of the mountains. Well done.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you zekeziemann for your review and rating of this piece. I was happy you liked it.
    Have a Happy New Year!
    JD
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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Hi JDan, First of course I want to say that you truly do know how to tell a good story. I always look at a writer when the story is good as I want to know if there was experience involved with the write or a fantastic imagination. I think what makes this particular story good is that it feels more like an experience and the words you give us allow us to go into that experience with you to feel it. You know how the story goes mate, I'm a girrrrrrlllllll! I wanna get up close and personal! lol loved it! xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you Kiwi for your review and generous rating. I must say, you have made my day with your kind encouraging words.
    I hope you have a Happy and prosperous New Year.
    J Dan Francis
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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How a shed can affect the life of a writer is well spoken in this story, the writer is much affected to think and ultimately there is a hope he finds to fly his wings of words; well done. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Thank you DR ALCREATOR for your review and rating of my story. I was very happy you thought it well done.
    Happy New Year
    J Dan Francis
Comment from Mabaker
Exceptional
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That was worth the six you are going to get. I read and review a lot of stories, and I give six where there is a story worthy of them. This was a well-crafted story that rings true with every writer of word or poem. Well done Mabaker.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
    Thank you Mabaker for your review and generous six star rating of my story. It was good to hear from you.
    Happy New Year
    JD
reply by Mabaker on 03-Jan-2018
    Mabaker has a motto, You earn 'em you get 'em you did.
Comment from doggymad
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I loved the story and your characters. I felt the pain through your strong images and dialogue.

One observation however. I found some of your sentences to be a bit too long. I am no expert on grammar and punctuation, but this is just my opinion

I like that the protagonist sees this as not an end but a new beginning

hugs

Freda

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
    Thank you Freda for your review and rating of my story.
    Have a Happy New Year!
    JD
Comment from sandramitchell
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Yes, they will build that shed again, and he will look to the mountains and write again, it is inside you, you can't deny the urge to write. At the moment he feels he's lost it, but that is just now, not tomorrow when the sun comes up from those mountains and draws him back. Loved this story, it was so well written and enjoyable to read. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
    Thank you Sandra for your review and generous rating. I was quite happy to read that you loved this story. I hope all is well with you. Happy New Year!
    JD
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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That's easy for Tom to say, but he doesn't understand what Nick was telling him about how a writer is only the vehicle for the stories that present themselves to him/her. We writers do understand, and we can empathize with the grief Nick must feel at his loss. Very well done. :)

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
    Thank you Phyllis for your review and rating of my story. I was happy to hear from you.
    Happy New Year!
    JD
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Fantastic. my favorite line - "It's not the end of your world, Tom. What do you know? you only drive a truck."

I was at first put off by this outburst but then was glad to see he recognized the error.

We often think that writing is the noble profession when in reality it is just another thing that we strive to be good at.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
    Thank you Thomas for your review and generous six star rating of this piece.
    Happy New Year!
    JD
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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He said, "We will rebuild that shed, and you will again look out at those mountains, and the mountains will speak to you, and you will write their stories." WOW. What beautiful words you write. This piece has EVERYTHING. Well done it is exceptionally interesting involving and entertaining as well as very well composed kindest regards Meia x

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
    Thank you Meia for your review and rating of my story. I was so happy you liked it.
    Happy New Year!
    JD
Comment from Angela VA
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Shew! Can you imagine? What a nightmare for Nick. Here are a couple of corrections you can make.

1st paragraph - "Nick Rodgers, wrapped in a tartan blanket sat on the concrete and flagstone deck adjoined to his late father's house he shared with his sister and brother in-law." Add a comma after "blanket."
- "He stared, bewildered into the rising damp smoke." Add a comma after "bewildered."

Your story was deep and flowed well. Finding one folder of writing, and then have it not be one that he really wanted, was a good touch. The ending was great, leaving a vivid picture in the mind of the reader.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
    Thank you Angela for your review and rating of my piece. And thank you for the advice. I will make those changes.
    Happy New Year!
    JD