What Water Whispers
Three Line Poem61 total reviews
Comment from nordicgirl
Gee wiz, I can barely believe you wrote something this damn good with so few words. This would make a great poster. Really gets the brain going. Love it. I can't imagine anyone topping it. We'll see though. Hehe. NG
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Gee wiz, I can barely believe you wrote something this damn good with so few words. This would make a great poster. Really gets the brain going. Love it. I can't imagine anyone topping it. We'll see though. Hehe. NG
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the Three Line Poem writing prompt.
Very well written, and a lovely picture besides.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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This is a good entry for the Three Line Poem writing prompt.
Very well written, and a lovely picture besides.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
Comment from zekeziemann
Well thought out and presented. I am not sure a mountain is ignorance, but I understand your use of the river and mountain. Happy New Year
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Well thought out and presented. I am not sure a mountain is ignorance, but I understand your use of the river and mountain. Happy New Year
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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I'm viewing the mountain as something monolithic and dense, impenetrable. Of course, it is the river that over time, cuts through the mountain to form the canyon. I LOVE that concept. LOL Thanks so much. mike
Happy New Year to you as well!!!!
Comment from johnwilson
This is the first poem, seventeen syllables no less, that I have read on this site that makes perfect sense. You created a perfect word visual to accompany the picture visual. I'm going to have to stop by and visit your other work, sir!! Quite impressive!
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This is the first poem, seventeen syllables no less, that I have read on this site that makes perfect sense. You created a perfect word visual to accompany the picture visual. I'm going to have to stop by and visit your other work, sir!! Quite impressive!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
Comment from Neonewman
This entry fits the prompt nicely, but it does state no words in the artwork. Love the artwork and the well crafted piece you have delivered.
God bless
Steve
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This entry fits the prompt nicely, but it does state no words in the artwork. Love the artwork and the well crafted piece you have delivered.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
Comment from Poetic Friend
Michael, it could be my computer, but I don't see the words of your poem. I just see a question mark on the screen. I am sure you have a fine entry because you are a fine poet.
I like the alliteration of your title. It caught my attention.
I am considering entering this contest, but I would have preferred it was blind.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Michael, it could be my computer, but I don't see the words of your poem. I just see a question mark on the screen. I am sure you have a fine entry because you are a fine poet.
I like the alliteration of your title. It caught my attention.
I am considering entering this contest, but I would have preferred it was blind.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Hi. I'm sorry it doesn't show up. That happens with embedded pieces sometimes or if you're on Classic Fanstory.
truth is a river
flowing through a canyon
ignorance a mountain
That's what it says. :))
The blind contests here aren't that blind. Many of us have distinct styles that are easy to pick out, myself included. So this way your fans at least get notices. There's arguments both ways. I agree a totally blind, TRULY blind, contest would be best and we've all argued that to Tom for years. LOL HOW to actually do that is the question. Thanks so much for the kind award of stars, the benefit of the doubt. I hope you still approve after reading the words now. :)) mike
Comment from Heather Knight
Even though this is a tiny poem, you have managed to fit two wonderful metaphors in the three lines.
I particularly like the way you describe truth.
The presentation is also great.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Even though this is a tiny poem, you have managed to fit two wonderful metaphors in the three lines.
I particularly like the way you describe truth.
The presentation is also great.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
One of the rules you quote states: "NO words in the artwork." Where are are your words? OK now they're where they should be this next paragraph is out of date.
How the hell can I give such a rule "more honoured in the breach than the observance" anything but a four star grading?
Yes take them out of the artwork and I will upgrade it if you tell me when you have done it. You did it so I shall do it. Up to 5.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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One of the rules you quote states: "NO words in the artwork." Where are are your words? OK now they're where they should be this next paragraph is out of date.
How the hell can I give such a rule "more honoured in the breach than the observance" anything but a four star grading?
Yes take them out of the artwork and I will upgrade it if you tell me when you have done it. You did it so I shall do it. Up to 5.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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The intent is clear, not to add EXTRA words to enhance the piece. They can set me up before a firing squad and ... I'll run like a little bitch. LOL mike
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OKAY! I changed it ... NOT because I'm wrong, but because the presentation is an unfair advantage since no one else is doing it. HAHAHAHA!!!!! Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.........
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Ok I have reassessed. Whatever the intention was the actual wording said... well you know what it said. If I come across any others they will get the same treatment.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written three line poem. You may check your last line which has six syllables that gives you a total of eighteen syllables for the entire poem. 'Ignore the mountain'.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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A very well-written three line poem. You may check your last line which has six syllables that gives you a total of eighteen syllables for the entire poem. 'Ignore the mountain'.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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True, but line two is six also. 5-6-6=17 Tricky mike. LOL Glad you liked it. :)) mike
Comment from MSJVClarke
That's an interesting and true concept. You used 17 syllables well to express a point well-justified. Truth does flow and ignorance certainly can be a mountain if not rectified. I like the softness but strength of your words.
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That's an interesting and true concept. You used 17 syllables well to express a point well-justified. Truth does flow and ignorance certainly can be a mountain if not rectified. I like the softness but strength of your words.
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Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
