What Water Whispers
Three Line Poem61 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
This is a profound piece of poetry dear Michael! I think you have struck a chord with this one. Indeed. A brilliant metaphor for your philosophical commentary.
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
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This is a profound piece of poetry dear Michael! I think you have struck a chord with this one. Indeed. A brilliant metaphor for your philosophical commentary.
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from judiverse
A very thoughtful message in this. I really like your analogy. Great artwork choice. Excellent contrast with truth and ignorance. Very attractive presentation. This flows very smoothly, too. Happy New Year to you, and best of luck in the contest. judi
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A very thoughtful message in this. I really like your analogy. Great artwork choice. Excellent contrast with truth and ignorance. Very attractive presentation. This flows very smoothly, too. Happy New Year to you, and best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from Boogienights
A beautiful image and true words make this three line poem exceptional.Just like a mountain,ignorance can sometimes be insurmountable, especially when it comes to accepting and understanding others. I think this will do very well in the contest and I wish you the best of luck.
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A beautiful image and true words make this three line poem exceptional.Just like a mountain,ignorance can sometimes be insurmountable, especially when it comes to accepting and understanding others. I think this will do very well in the contest and I wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from Joan E.
The striking picture called my attention to your philosophical Three Line Poem. I admired your thought-provoking message and alliterative title. Best wishes in the contest and here's to a peaceful and productive New Year- Joan
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The striking picture called my attention to your philosophical Three Line Poem. I admired your thought-provoking message and alliterative title. Best wishes in the contest and here's to a peaceful and productive New Year- Joan
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from rama devi
Outstanding imagery juxtaposed to dramatic effect, my friend. Well voiced, well presented and true to form. The punctuation choices serve the poem well. The word economy is good too,, though line one would be enhanced by a descriptive word. you might use a contraction (just a thought) to make room for one. Example:
Truth's a bright river
(long, wide, big, cold, bright, pale - any single-syllable descriptive)
ignorance is indeed a mountain, especially when it sits on the 'throne' of power.
Good luck. This is a strong entry! No sixes left, alas.
Warmly, rd
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Outstanding imagery juxtaposed to dramatic effect, my friend. Well voiced, well presented and true to form. The punctuation choices serve the poem well. The word economy is good too,, though line one would be enhanced by a descriptive word. you might use a contraction (just a thought) to make room for one. Example:
Truth's a bright river
(long, wide, big, cold, bright, pale - any single-syllable descriptive)
ignorance is indeed a mountain, especially when it sits on the 'throne' of power.
Good luck. This is a strong entry! No sixes left, alas.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This short but poignant write made me think and it is cleverly written and could be applied to many situations in life, well said and may I take this opportunity to wish you a happy new year Michael, love Dolly x
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This short but poignant write made me think and it is cleverly written and could be applied to many situations in life, well said and may I take this opportunity to wish you a happy new year Michael, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Michael;
This was just beautiful. I liked the contrast of the 'river of truth' and the 'mountain of ignorance.' It fits everything we see today. The world is facing a large mountain, and the river is drying up.
A great use of your seventeen syllables, and a perfect entry for this contest. You followed the rules exactly - Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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Hi, Michael;
This was just beautiful. I liked the contrast of the 'river of truth' and the 'mountain of ignorance.' It fits everything we see today. The world is facing a large mountain, and the river is drying up.
A great use of your seventeen syllables, and a perfect entry for this contest. You followed the rules exactly - Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is an excellent three line poem, Michael.
A lot of thought went into the writing of this.
A river flows freely until it meets an obstacle in its path, such as a rock or fallen tree. And although the flow is now impeded somewhat because of those obstacles, the water is still able to rush around them.
No so with a mountain.
A mountain blocks the river's previously free-flowing progress all the way up until that point.
Then--a dead stop.
So, I think the moral of this three-lined poetic tale is if your life is flowing along nicely, don't make mountains out of molehills.
They'll just get in your way.
Sorry I'm out of sixes. I hope a virtual six will suffice for now.
Happy New Year.
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This is an excellent three line poem, Michael.
A lot of thought went into the writing of this.
A river flows freely until it meets an obstacle in its path, such as a rock or fallen tree. And although the flow is now impeded somewhat because of those obstacles, the water is still able to rush around them.
No so with a mountain.
A mountain blocks the river's previously free-flowing progress all the way up until that point.
Then--a dead stop.
So, I think the moral of this three-lined poetic tale is if your life is flowing along nicely, don't make mountains out of molehills.
They'll just get in your way.
Sorry I'm out of sixes. I hope a virtual six will suffice for now.
Happy New Year.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from DR DIP
Truth is a river
flowing through a canyon--
ignorance ... a mountain
I deliberately cut and pasted your words so I could read them over and over.
These words are deep
Truth is a river, ignorance a mountain Michael I really have tried to decipher your analogy of truth and ignorance and I just can't get the gist of your metaphor
don't get me wrong the words sound great and I am sure many will get the relevance
dip
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Truth is a river
flowing through a canyon--
ignorance ... a mountain
I deliberately cut and pasted your words so I could read them over and over.
These words are deep
Truth is a river, ignorance a mountain Michael I really have tried to decipher your analogy of truth and ignorance and I just can't get the gist of your metaphor
don't get me wrong the words sound great and I am sure many will get the relevance
dip
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from Sherman541
So very true that is. You did a great job with only three lines. I really like the meaning and how you portrayed it with a river and mountain. I would rather it would be that the mountain was the truth solid and strong, but ironically enough, truth flows freely, while the strength of a solid mountain stands steadfast and almost impassable. Stubborn comes to mind. Best Wishes and Good Luck in the contest I think you could very well win. Sherman541
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So very true that is. You did a great job with only three lines. I really like the meaning and how you portrayed it with a river and mountain. I would rather it would be that the mountain was the truth solid and strong, but ironically enough, truth flows freely, while the strength of a solid mountain stands steadfast and almost impassable. Stubborn comes to mind. Best Wishes and Good Luck in the contest I think you could very well win. Sherman541
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
