What Water Whispers
Three Line Poem61 total reviews
Comment from John A Catania
Good for being limited but could have spent a lil more time.
John A. Catania
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Good for being limited but could have spent a lil more time.
John A. Catania
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Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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I'd love to read what you might write. Enthrall me with your acumen. :))
Comment from nomi338
Hear, hear! How often has the glorious truth been diverted and or outright blocked by bull headed ignorance. How true the statement that the wise know that they do not know, while the ignorant do not even realize that the very mountain blocking their progress, is their own ignorance, which they lack the will or sense to blast out of existence.
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Hear, hear! How often has the glorious truth been diverted and or outright blocked by bull headed ignorance. How true the statement that the wise know that they do not know, while the ignorant do not even realize that the very mountain blocking their progress, is their own ignorance, which they lack the will or sense to blast out of existence.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
Comment from c_lucas
Ignorance doesn't have the hold on use in later life like it did in earlier years. Mountains of ignorance are washed away with the rushing waters of wisdom. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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Ignorance doesn't have the hold on use in later life like it did in earlier years. Mountains of ignorance are washed away with the rushing waters of wisdom. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I think it is a clever use of your title to draw your reader into the piece at first look. The rest of the three lines are bold and beautiful. I think you've got a real shot with this wonder! Happy New Year. xoxo Kiwi
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I think it is a clever use of your title to draw your reader into the piece at first look. The rest of the three lines are bold and beautiful. I think you've got a real shot with this wonder! Happy New Year. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
Comment from smudge
A great concept"truth is a river flowing through a canyon" as the the river cuts the canyon like truth cuts a path through life. Excellent artwork.
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A great concept"truth is a river flowing through a canyon" as the the river cuts the canyon like truth cuts a path through life. Excellent artwork.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
Comment from Sugarray77
I like this very much. Because it is a 3 line poem and seventeen syllables, the writer must be careful to 'deliver' a punch in a few words. You did that very well. Good job. Good luck!
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I like this very much. Because it is a 3 line poem and seventeen syllables, the writer must be careful to 'deliver' a punch in a few words. You did that very well. Good job. Good luck!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from patcelaw
Michael, this is a well written poem with a great message about truth and ignorance. The way of truth is easy, but ignorance does seem like a very impassable mountain. Happy New Year.
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Michael, this is a well written poem with a great message about truth and ignorance. The way of truth is easy, but ignorance does seem like a very impassable mountain. Happy New Year.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from antonieta
Hi,
Thanks for sharing. The message of this poem is so true: a river flows all the time while as you suggested a mountain is static, years after years; no change like ignorance.
Antonieta
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Hi,
Thanks for sharing. The message of this poem is so true: a river flows all the time while as you suggested a mountain is static, years after years; no change like ignorance.
Antonieta
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from Wetbelly01
A lot said in so few words... I like the message here!...
Your words are so true!... My compliments!...
Good Luck in the contest!....
Oh, and Happy New Year to ya!!
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A lot said in so few words... I like the message here!...
Your words are so true!... My compliments!...
Good Luck in the contest!....
Oh, and Happy New Year to ya!!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
Comment from humpwhistle
I like this, Mikey. Especially when I bring the title into play.
I get confused when a 3-line poem is enhanced by the title.
Should I take heed of the title? Maybe that's why haiku and senryu
have different rules.
Regardless, I think your title adds a lot, and I don't care.
Water skirts the ignorant mountain. Better to move around and get somewhere,
than but up against an unmovable force.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
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I like this, Mikey. Especially when I bring the title into play.
I get confused when a 3-line poem is enhanced by the title.
Should I take heed of the title? Maybe that's why haiku and senryu
have different rules.
Regardless, I think your title adds a lot, and I don't care.
Water skirts the ignorant mountain. Better to move around and get somewhere,
than but up against an unmovable force.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
