Reviews from

Poetry Written in December, 2017

Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Stone Cold"
in preparation for getting things off this site

20 total reviews 
Comment from Ricky1024
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I gave this six stars I just cuz it was wonderfully written but the way you brought the title back into the end which is I thought mine was the only one that knew that trick to bring in Pack'n to your piece that you're written so well done with this doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
    Thank you - still having laptop problems...*sigh* More a.s.a.p.
Comment from BeasPeas
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Your poem is very well written. Is there an abundance of homeless (not in shelters) in your city? From articles I've read, many homeless (especially mothers with children) are vulnerable to predators and fearful of spending nights in shelters. Therefore, they'd rather take their chances on the street. I do believe that politicians DO spend tax dollars unwisely, probably the crux of the problem. Marilyn

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
    Yes, there is an abundance, as shown in the video... Thanks very much.
Comment from Joan E.
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I must say we saw an extraordinary number of homeless individuals sleeping on the streets in downtown Toronto. We have a serious homeless issue in Los Angeles as well, but it typically exists in encampments on the peripheries--which to me seems to offer some "strength in numbers"--and we are actively seeking more beds in shelters. I admired your call for compassion in this rhymed sonnet--we are our brother's keeper. Sighs- Joan

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
    Thank you, Joan. Yes - we are our brother's keeper...
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Dawn, this is a very telling poem on the sadness and hardship that people are living in the world today. Homelessness is a tragic situation, especially when the weather is freezing cold. How can anyone survive that over a period of time... Your message is clear and written very effectively to allow for deeper reflection on the subject. ~DD

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
    Thank you - still having laptop problems...*sigh* More a.s.a.p. Honored, my friend.
Comment from country ranch writer
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

People only care for that almighty dollar when it comes to helping others who could use a hand out. There has to be something in it for them in order for them to give in return
. A lot of bullshit these days.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
    Thank you - still having laptop problems...*sigh* More a.s.a.p. Honored, my friend.
reply by country ranch writer on 11-Dec-2017
    Hang in there
Comment from frogbook
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This was really very good with a great title and ending line. Love the picture-that little birdie looks pissed off! He sure is cute though. Great thoughts in this time where few care about their fellow man.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
    Thank you - still having laptop problems...*sigh* More a.s.a.p. Honored, my friend.
Comment from Ulla
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Hi Dawn, what a sad state of affairs. So many must die in the cold. Is there really no help to be had? I liked your poem a lot, but it left me sad and frustrated. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
    Thank you! I am having to keep replies short because of laptop troubles. No. Ulla - far too little help.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi, Dawn

= Such an ongoing, sadly tragic situation--no matter the country/state we live in.
= Beautifully written poem, my friend.

Cheers, J
*** Merry Christmas & Happy New Year ***
(*.*) A Smile Is Just A Smile Turned Upside-down (*.*)

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
    Thank you! I am having to keep replies short because of laptop troubles (still). But Jax, I am truly honored, my friend.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is a lovely piece. The rhyme and meter are lovely throughout. Hopefully one day all of the glimmers of light and compassion will bond together and illuminate the darkness of the world. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
    Hmm, I wonder...

    Thanks very much. I'm keeping replies short because I'm still having issues with my laptop here, but I truly appreciate your kind review.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

One night out in this weather would kill me. My feet are cold in a warm house. It was really cold last night, I could feel the chill inside. I could hear that wind whipping up. The citizens will have to make a noise before the authorities will do anything. Well said Dawn. Nancy

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
    Thanks very much. I'm keeping replies short because I'm still having issues with my laptop here, but I truly appreciate your kind review.