Forsaken City
A garden poem.48 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Can a country that venerates God, make light of the enslavement of millions of persons who were also created and loved by that same God. If you read the Bible, did you ignore the two greatest commandments, Love God and your fellow man as you murdering your fellow man for the sheer pleasure of doing so. Yo murdered black men as a warning to not lust after your women while you were freely having your way with his women. I am sorry, but your awesome post opened up some wounds I though I had subjugated to the depths of my angry soul.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Can a country that venerates God, make light of the enslavement of millions of persons who were also created and loved by that same God. If you read the Bible, did you ignore the two greatest commandments, Love God and your fellow man as you murdering your fellow man for the sheer pleasure of doing so. Yo murdered black men as a warning to not lust after your women while you were freely having your way with his women. I am sorry, but your awesome post opened up some wounds I though I had subjugated to the depths of my angry soul.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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May peace return to you Nomi my friend. Take care poet. easy
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Please know that my anger was not directed to you. The guilty know who they are and will receive the justice thay have earned. I hate no one, jowever their wrongful actions will be repaid not by me but the one who sits high looks low and has promised that he will repay the hurts caused by the guilty.
Comment from GoWiSt
Wow! Is there an insult to God here, as HIS Eden has become a failed city?
Interesting metaphoric imagery and alliterations.
Is Eden a metaphor for the old South? Has its roses really died--been murdered? Is it lost forever? Interesting poem.
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Wow! Is there an insult to God here, as HIS Eden has become a failed city?
Interesting metaphoric imagery and alliterations.
Is Eden a metaphor for the old South? Has its roses really died--been murdered? Is it lost forever? Interesting poem.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
Comment from C.M. Brown
Wow! Absolutely beautiful! I think this my favorite line -" the dead roses float in symbiotic sacrifice to long dead religions and a joyous old South". Such a powerful line. Great job!
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Wow! Absolutely beautiful! I think this my favorite line -" the dead roses float in symbiotic sacrifice to long dead religions and a joyous old South". Such a powerful line. Great job!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
Comment from Bobby Jo
I didn't know for sure where this was heading, I see now. I'm not sure what I really think of this, the rhythem was good. Makes your mind wonder about Eden a little bit. What would it be like today?
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I didn't know for sure where this was heading, I see now. I'm not sure what I really think of this, the rhythem was good. Makes your mind wonder about Eden a little bit. What would it be like today?
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Excellent writing but actually eden is not God's garden therefore it's not a failure attributed to God. God banished the devil to this place so that is who f*ckec up it's great possibilities. The fact that there is any goodness that grows here at all is evidence if the power of God's Love to conquer the frailty of the failed, banished ex as
angel. Still God gave us all free will so you do you as they say. lol
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Excellent writing but actually eden is not God's garden therefore it's not a failure attributed to God. God banished the devil to this place so that is who f*ckec up it's great possibilities. The fact that there is any goodness that grows here at all is evidence if the power of God's Love to conquer the frailty of the failed, banished ex as
angel. Still God gave us all free will so you do you as they say. lol
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Well, I am a Buddhist but thanks for the info. I study religions without prejudice. Take care. ee
Comment from Cathy M
What a harsh poem, yet so fitting. What do we as humans do but destroy what God has created. Truly a failed Garden of God is Eden and our other cities and towns are following close behind. Instead of caring we destroy not only cities but our own humanity.
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What a harsh poem, yet so fitting. What do we as humans do but destroy what God has created. Truly a failed Garden of God is Eden and our other cities and towns are following close behind. Instead of caring we destroy not only cities but our own humanity.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
Comment from Terry Broxson
EE, you write so well and it is fun to read your work. I will say it is possible to read your poem and not interpret it right. Even so, I do there are those in the South, who do try to revise history. The justification could be guilt. Good job. Terry.
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EE, you write so well and it is fun to read your work. I will say it is possible to read your poem and not interpret it right. Even so, I do there are those in the South, who do try to revise history. The justification could be guilt. Good job. Terry.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
Comment from Goodadvicechan
You did a good job of describing the forsaken city.
I like you use dead roses to show a forgotten city like this one:
" The dead red roses float
in symbiotic sacrifice
to long dead religions
and a joyous old South."
Thanks for sharing your writing work. Certainly I can learn something from you.
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You did a good job of describing the forsaken city.
I like you use dead roses to show a forgotten city like this one:
" The dead red roses float
in symbiotic sacrifice
to long dead religions
and a joyous old South."
Thanks for sharing your writing work. Certainly I can learn something from you.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
Comment from Kathy Hyer
This piece made me stop to think and sent me to the dictionary a couple of times. It really is a little dark, but illuminating. I'll bet this took quite a time to write. Very nice.
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This piece made me stop to think and sent me to the dictionary a couple of times. It really is a little dark, but illuminating. I'll bet this took quite a time to write. Very nice.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is pretty intriguing with its literary/historical references. The idea that revisionists are revamping what the South really was is interesting, since we have some ancestors who lived in the South, like Tennessee and Kentucky. This poem points out that if the whole South and its history were really as awful as revisionists say, that it would have had to be some 'grisly, gated city' so to speak. If I read this right, the speaker seems to say it is a little more like the Garden of Eden and the Fall.
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This is pretty intriguing with its literary/historical references. The idea that revisionists are revamping what the South really was is interesting, since we have some ancestors who lived in the South, like Tennessee and Kentucky. This poem points out that if the whole South and its history were really as awful as revisionists say, that it would have had to be some 'grisly, gated city' so to speak. If I read this right, the speaker seems to say it is a little more like the Garden of Eden and the Fall.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
