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haiku 3-6-310 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 3-6-3 poem about the exe paradise bird on display in a picture frame, there for anyone to admire. It may also be the last one on earth forever.
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A very well-written 3-6-3 poem about the exe paradise bird on display in a picture frame, there for anyone to admire. It may also be the last one on earth forever.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line / syllable count and animal theme. The first two lines paint a vivid image and the satori sadly speaks more truth than we would like to admit to. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line / syllable count and animal theme. The first two lines paint a vivid image and the satori sadly speaks more truth than we would like to admit to. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
I looked it up and as I suspected, this beautiful creature is recently extinct. How truly sad that makes this poem of yours. It's powerful too. There it all is for all to see. We must do better. So well done. NG
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I looked it up and as I suspected, this beautiful creature is recently extinct. How truly sad that makes this poem of yours. It's powerful too. There it all is for all to see. We must do better. So well done. NG
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
Comment from amahra
Great animal artwork. Loved the haiku. People think because they're short poems. they are easy to write. But I find if written correctly, they are very difficult to write. Great job, my friend.
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Great animal artwork. Loved the haiku. People think because they're short poems. they are easy to write. But I find if written correctly, they are very difficult to write. Great job, my friend.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
Comment from Sherman541
Perfect picture and a poem about a Parrot. Great choice of words. Nice picture choice it some what looks faded, like the parrot, who either flew away or is no more. Good Luck in the Contest. Sherman541
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Perfect picture and a poem about a Parrot. Great choice of words. Nice picture choice it some what looks faded, like the parrot, who either flew away or is no more. Good Luck in the Contest. Sherman541
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
What happened to the poor bird that he's no longer in paradise, Anonymous Poet?
Was he captured and became someone's pet, kept in a cage?
Was he eaten by predators?
Do parrots even have any natural predators?
Food for thought...
Regardless of what happened, your 5-7-5 is well composed and in good form.
I wish you all the best in the voting booth.
~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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What happened to the poor bird that he's no longer in paradise, Anonymous Poet?
Was he captured and became someone's pet, kept in a cage?
Was he eaten by predators?
Do parrots even have any natural predators?
Food for thought...
Regardless of what happened, your 5-7-5 is well composed and in good form.
I wish you all the best in the voting booth.
~Dean
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Unfortunately, it's an extinct species. HEY! That's MY bird flyin' there. A green wing macaw. How cool.
Let's see if mine flies. I copied yours. :)) Thanks so much. :))
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WHOOO HOOOO. YAY!
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Look at him go!
LOL... ;)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think that this is a good entry for the Animal Haiku writing prompt.
Your picture matches your poem nicely.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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I think that this is a good entry for the Animal Haiku writing prompt.
Your picture matches your poem nicely.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Sharon :)) mike
Comment from poetwatch
Gone is the life as it once was. Everything becomes extinct as we venture into parts not known but to the creature that live there. Man is the villain in the story. A good three-six-three haiku.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Gone is the life as it once was. Everything becomes extinct as we venture into parts not known but to the creature that live there. Man is the villain in the story. A good three-six-three haiku.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Your reviews are more poetic than my poems. LOL
Thanks a million. mike
Comment from victor 66
An incredibly fascinating creature is the platypus. Perhaps your illustration is just as interesting. Your platypus now looks like a disgruntled, one eyed cat. Good luck in haiku animal contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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An incredibly fascinating creature is the platypus. Perhaps your illustration is just as interesting. Your platypus now looks like a disgruntled, one eyed cat. Good luck in haiku animal contest.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Yep, not a happy creature. LOL
Thanks a million, Victor. mike :))
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You are most welcome, Mike.
Comment from Janet Foor
I enjoyed reading your animal haiku. So glad you used minimal syllables to convey your message. A fun satori line.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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I enjoyed reading your animal haiku. So glad you used minimal syllables to convey your message. A fun satori line.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Less is more, so they say. Thanks so much, Janet. mike :))
