Privvyella
A new look at an age-old story4 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
I enjoyed this immensely and love the fast pace style of telling this delightful story. You did a marvelous job with this and I wish you all the best in this contest. I found one minor spag: proved to be as uhelpful as ever...I think you meant, unhelpful. You did great job with this and I do hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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I enjoyed this immensely and love the fast pace style of telling this delightful story. You did a marvelous job with this and I wish you all the best in this contest. I found one minor spag: proved to be as uhelpful as ever...I think you meant, unhelpful. You did great job with this and I do hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Hi Pumpkin - As you pointed out, uhelpful is not unhelpful. And, of course, it's not helpful, either. Now, because of your input, it IS unhelpful now, but still not helpful. Don't apologize, Pumpkin. It is very confusing. Although I've changed it, and it is unhelpful, as it's supposed to be, it's therefore not helpful, anyhow But, I assure you, it's definitely not your fault.
Most of all, Pumpkin, thank you for your very welcome, very praiseful comments.
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You are welcome, I think...lol
Comment from poetwatch
Ogden, this is a long winded but good story. I think I read something like it but... I can't remember. I could tell your wrote this story by candle light because close to the end it started to flicker. Correct these added words "what became of "became of" the characters. and add a Y in " they decided "the" had their fill of Incontinent," and the last line needs a space and an M "comes around.any years later" I feel you did this on purpose to see if the reader read all the story.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Ogden, this is a long winded but good story. I think I read something like it but... I can't remember. I could tell your wrote this story by candle light because close to the end it started to flicker. Correct these added words "what became of "became of" the characters. and add a Y in " they decided "the" had their fill of Incontinent," and the last line needs a space and an M "comes around.any years later" I feel you did this on purpose to see if the reader read all the story.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Hi, Poetwatch. You sure are a good watcher of prose, too. Thank you for being so generous with your time...and opinions. Your help is appreciated more than I can say.
You haven't heard the last of this.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a delightful entry to the contest mix. Melvin was a wonderful replacement for the usual fairy godmother as his perspective was a bit more fresh and of course furry. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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This is a delightful entry to the contest mix. Melvin was a wonderful replacement for the usual fairy godmother as his perspective was a bit more fresh and of course furry. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thank you for your generous comments, Angel, and for overlooking my many careless mistakes, (some of which I have corrected) You ARE an angel.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a story like an old wine in a new bottle, about the life of a teenage orphan called Privvyella; fantastic, fast forward of plot, taletelling is somewhat mystic I like flow and the curious beginning and ending. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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This speaks a story like an old wine in a new bottle, about the life of a teenage orphan called Privvyella; fantastic, fast forward of plot, taletelling is somewhat mystic I like flow and the curious beginning and ending. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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You have read a lot of my writing, but this is, by far, the best of all those reviews, Thank you so much, Alcreator.
