Another Jackie O
Written in Chicago doing the beat clubs 196362 total reviews
Comment from Allieas
wow - a beautifully and dreadfully vivid story you've woven within this poem. I felt transported in time in space. I almost felt myself making this into a song as I read the words
Thanks for sharing this
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wow - a beautifully and dreadfully vivid story you've woven within this poem. I felt transported in time in space. I almost felt myself making this into a song as I read the words
Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
Comment from Jeano
I'm just not getting the correlation between Jackie O and this street person. I can tell a lot of deep thought went into this, and maybe some hurt. Is it circumstances of birth? I'm trying very hard to understand poetry and all its rules and those with no rules, rhyming, non-rhyming etc. I see this as a mixture. It has piqued my curiosity to the point that I have read and re-read it a number of times. I really liked some of the individual lines. Very intriguing. Good luck. Glad you got your notepad and your mind.
Jeano
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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I'm just not getting the correlation between Jackie O and this street person. I can tell a lot of deep thought went into this, and maybe some hurt. Is it circumstances of birth? I'm trying very hard to understand poetry and all its rules and those with no rules, rhyming, non-rhyming etc. I see this as a mixture. It has piqued my curiosity to the point that I have read and re-read it a number of times. I really liked some of the individual lines. Very intriguing. Good luck. Glad you got your notepad and your mind.
Jeano
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Well, Jeano, keep working on it. Surprise yourself! ee
Comment from BenThrone
This is certainly evocative of the cultural milieu in which it was created. An interesting romp; I can almost hear the voice of a young Bobby Dylan reciting this. I learned a new word from this: "pixelated" I knew, but not "pixilated". It isn't often i come across a new word, and for that I give you thanks.
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This is certainly evocative of the cultural milieu in which it was created. An interesting romp; I can almost hear the voice of a young Bobby Dylan reciting this. I learned a new word from this: "pixelated" I knew, but not "pixilated". It isn't often i come across a new word, and for that I give you thanks.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
Comment from Ric Myworld
I read little poetry and don't know the first thing about it. But, like prose, or general conversations, it's basically words, which consume most minutes of everyone's days and keeps us up-to-date on what others are thinking. Great job! And thanks for sharing.
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I read little poetry and don't know the first thing about it. But, like prose, or general conversations, it's basically words, which consume most minutes of everyone's days and keeps us up-to-date on what others are thinking. Great job! And thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
Comment from Jacob1395
I really liked the flow of this piece which kept me really engaged in the writing and I thought it was excellent how you brought the story of this person to life. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
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I really liked the flow of this piece which kept me really engaged in the writing and I thought it was excellent how you brought the story of this person to life. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
Comment from BermyBye50
easyeverett1,
You are not only a highly talented poet but a brilliant story teller also. There are a medley of various creative verses, phrases and metaphor creatively composed and state government place throughout this poem, with a story that has a beginning a middle and an striking end.
All the best,
Eugene
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easyeverett1,
You are not only a highly talented poet but a brilliant story teller also. There are a medley of various creative verses, phrases and metaphor creatively composed and state government place throughout this poem, with a story that has a beginning a middle and an striking end.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from Treischel
I think I'm speachless, probably because this incredible stream of consciousness sucked my breath away. About the only word that comes to mind is WOW! My mind is twisted from reading it. The alliterations, the poetic imagery, the names, the rush. Sheesh!
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I think I'm speachless, probably because this incredible stream of consciousness sucked my breath away. About the only word that comes to mind is WOW! My mind is twisted from reading it. The alliterations, the poetic imagery, the names, the rush. Sheesh!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I see this and read this poem as being written by someone who is utterly confused about what is happening around him. I see this was written in 1963 and it needs to be understood in that context. The whole world went upside down back then. At least in the Western world. Ulla:)))
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Hi there, I see this and read this poem as being written by someone who is utterly confused about what is happening around him. I see this was written in 1963 and it needs to be understood in that context. The whole world went upside down back then. At least in the Western world. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from John Ciarmello
I'm trying to understand this piece as your reference to Jackie O is woven in deceit and hate. I'm guessing she is used as an Idol and not a reference to the actual person but rather the times and your recollection of events.
The sixties were as good and as bad as today in retrospect. Best, JohnC
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I'm trying to understand this piece as your reference to Jackie O is woven in deceit and hate. I'm guessing she is used as an Idol and not a reference to the actual person but rather the times and your recollection of events.
The sixties were as good and as bad as today in retrospect. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from jenintorre
Wow wow wow! This is a masterpiece. I love character studies especially in a poem and this one is truly brilliant. It is definitely worth more than a mere 6 stars.
The best poem I've read for a very long time. Love Jen.
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Wow wow wow! This is a masterpiece. I love character studies especially in a poem and this one is truly brilliant. It is definitely worth more than a mere 6 stars.
The best poem I've read for a very long time. Love Jen.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
