Matthew, Nancy, and Sarah
A love story with a twist.3 total reviews
Comment from D.F. Wood
I gave it five stars but didn't really care for it. It's just my opinion. I am not so certain this person would go from very mad to a silly calm person as soon as receiving the coffee. The garbled speech is okay, I just feel there was a loss of reality. Again, I gave it 5 stars because I found no SPAG. Good luck.
I gave it five stars but didn't really care for it. It's just my opinion. I am not so certain this person would go from very mad to a silly calm person as soon as receiving the coffee. The garbled speech is okay, I just feel there was a loss of reality. Again, I gave it 5 stars because I found no SPAG. Good luck.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
Comment from Paul Bownas
I think it should be 'brakes' not breaks. This paints a good picture of an inebriated lady, but I sort of felt it needed a bit more? You certainly made me feel quite sorry for Matthew though.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
I think it should be 'brakes' not breaks. This paints a good picture of an inebriated lady, but I sort of felt it needed a bit more? You certainly made me feel quite sorry for Matthew though.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thanks for catching the error, Paul. What do you mean by it needs a bit more? More what? I appreciate your input!
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I am now interested in finding out what happened, both to Matthew and to Nancy? It sort of left me up in the air.
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Matthew, the Rock of Gibralter, took Nancy home to sober up and play with their dog, Sarah.
What is missing from the poem, Paul?
I must have screwed up, if the piece
isn't clear.
Don
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This poem to me sounded as though it was the forerunner of further poems or stories. I think I am in error here, not you Don, and I apologise if I caused you any bad feeling, and hope that you will forgive me on this occasion?
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There's nothing to forgive, Paul. I didn't mean to give the impression that I was disturbed. I appreciated your letting me know that I might have misjudged the clarity of the poem.
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Again, I apologise, and will make sure that I read your future works with more care.
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Cool.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a love story, family love, mom and daughters, all in action, a specific day, after the outing, parental advice, all now go home following chit-chats, I like. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
This speaks a love story, family love, mom and daughters, all in action, a specific day, after the outing, parental advice, all now go home following chit-chats, I like. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Huh? This story is about a man , wife, and dog. No daughters, no outing, no parental advice. I think you're commenting on a different story.