The Princess And The Pea
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Comment from sibhus
An interesting take on this fairy tale, and I liked how you have interjected the talking cat. Not only does it fill the contest requirements, but it adds a nice twist to the story. A well written piece that makes for a excellent entry for the contest. Good job, and good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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An interesting take on this fairy tale, and I liked how you have interjected the talking cat. Not only does it fill the contest requirements, but it adds a nice twist to the story. A well written piece that makes for a excellent entry for the contest. Good job, and good luck.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review this silly story. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from giraffmang
A nice take on the old tale, changing enough to make it fresh and a good strong point of view.
You can take shelter in a yon pigsty - this caught me as oddly phrased. Normally one would see it as yon or yonder pigsty without the 'a'.
placed twenty elder-down quilts - eiderdowns?
I fall off of there we will break our necks - you don't really need the 'of' here.
and twenty eider-down quilts, she had felt the pea - eiderdown.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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A nice take on the old tale, changing enough to make it fresh and a good strong point of view.
You can take shelter in a yon pigsty - this caught me as oddly phrased. Normally one would see it as yon or yonder pigsty without the 'a'.
placed twenty elder-down quilts - eiderdowns?
I fall off of there we will break our necks - you don't really need the 'of' here.
and twenty eider-down quilts, she had felt the pea - eiderdown.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Excellent. I know it sounds odd, but you can blame Grammarly for that one. That's the way the silly thing said it should be written and so it was. Thanks for the spelling tip on the eiderdown quilts, much appreciated.
Comment from MelB
An interesting story about the princess and the pea told from the cat's POV. She fooled the queen, but I wonder if she can fool the prince too?
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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An interesting story about the princess and the pea told from the cat's POV. She fooled the queen, but I wonder if she can fool the prince too?
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thank you, my friend. I love to stick cats in my stories whenever possible. I'm an incurable crazy cat lady. LOL
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You're welcome. Me too. We have 3 in the house.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly. There was no SPAG to be had so you are good to go in that respect. I enjoyed Sir Gawain's rendition of the tale and imagine he lived a pretty rewarding life after the wedding. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly. There was no SPAG to be had so you are good to go in that respect. I enjoyed Sir Gawain's rendition of the tale and imagine he lived a pretty rewarding life after the wedding. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review this silly story. Much appreciated.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Ah, pretty kitty!
You've given us a wonderful rendition of the 'Princess and the Pea.' It was well-told from the viewpoint of the cat, and you did a great job of describing how Annabelle fooled the queen.
~patty~
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Ah, pretty kitty!
You've given us a wonderful rendition of the 'Princess and the Pea.' It was well-told from the viewpoint of the cat, and you did a great job of describing how Annabelle fooled the queen.
~patty~
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting. It makes more sense than the real story. LOL
Comment from apky
Prettybluebird, it's so nice to have you back here again. I haven't received any alerts on your writing for quite a while. But maybe I missed something that had no writer details on them, as is often stipulated in various contests.
You certainly found a fun way to interpret this fairy tale, and from the perspectic of Sir Gawain, the cat. Absolutely entertaining and well written piece.
Well done.
But she must be a real princess, mind you. [since you're writing this in the past tense, it's better to be consistent and keep it all in the past tense. I'd change this sented to: But she (had to) be a real princess, mind you.]
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Prettybluebird, it's so nice to have you back here again. I haven't received any alerts on your writing for quite a while. But maybe I missed something that had no writer details on them, as is often stipulated in various contests.
You certainly found a fun way to interpret this fairy tale, and from the perspectic of Sir Gawain, the cat. Absolutely entertaining and well written piece.
Well done.
But she must be a real princess, mind you. [since you're writing this in the past tense, it's better to be consistent and keep it all in the past tense. I'd change this sented to: But she (had to) be a real princess, mind you.]
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reviewing and the catch in my tense. I will edit and change. I do know better but get in a hurry sometimes and don't edit enough. I haven't been doing much writing lately because of holidays and personal things.
Comment from Marvin Calloway
I've never heard or read this story before. It's interesting. You've told it well, and it sounds plausible.
Annabelle is a lady to be reckoned with.
Marv
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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I've never heard or read this story before. It's interesting. You've told it well, and it sounds plausible.
Annabelle is a lady to be reckoned with.
Marv
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, Marvin.
Comment from pbomar1115
As a child, I remembered the princess who had trouble sleeping because of a pea under a lot of mattresses for which she slept. But I never knew the whole story with was tastefully told.
Phillip
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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As a child, I remembered the princess who had trouble sleeping because of a pea under a lot of mattresses for which she slept. But I never knew the whole story with was tastefully told.
Phillip
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting. this is just a made up story for the contest. It makes more sense than the real story though. LOL
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Hahaha. I loved it.
Phillip
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I saw no errors, this just had me roaring with laughter, you have created such a brilliant and different story, I must say this is some strong competition as I have not read one bad or less than average 'furry tale' however this was outstanding and definitely in with a shot at winning. I loved the humour and Sir Gawain the cat talking and his mistress really being a spoilt brat and the prince so dumb lol...well in all fairy tales the prices are dumb, and the girls not muh better, falling 'in love' at first sight but I suppose that is the difference between you whimsical tale and theirs and I know what kids would prefer- stories like this to make them laugh. Although the moral be a brat and still get what you want may not be brilliant, neither is throw yourself at the first hunky prince you meet! A BRILLIANT work well done I LOVED it. kindest regards and best of luck MEIA XX
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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I saw no errors, this just had me roaring with laughter, you have created such a brilliant and different story, I must say this is some strong competition as I have not read one bad or less than average 'furry tale' however this was outstanding and definitely in with a shot at winning. I loved the humour and Sir Gawain the cat talking and his mistress really being a spoilt brat and the prince so dumb lol...well in all fairy tales the prices are dumb, and the girls not muh better, falling 'in love' at first sight but I suppose that is the difference between you whimsical tale and theirs and I know what kids would prefer- stories like this to make them laugh. Although the moral be a brat and still get what you want may not be brilliant, neither is throw yourself at the first hunky prince you meet! A BRILLIANT work well done I LOVED it. kindest regards and best of luck MEIA XX
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and your kind comments. So glad you liked the story.
Comment from lyenochka
Glad to see your posts again (I may have missed any that were anonymous due to contest entries.) Enjoyed all the humor here and I was thinking of a variety of different fairytales like puss n' boots. But yes, I know the Princess and the Pea. The way you describe them, they all deserve each other!
""Princess Annabell," I said" (one place where the name is missing the final e)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Glad to see your posts again (I may have missed any that were anonymous due to contest entries.) Enjoyed all the humor here and I was thinking of a variety of different fairytales like puss n' boots. But yes, I know the Princess and the Pea. The way you describe them, they all deserve each other!
""Princess Annabell," I said" (one place where the name is missing the final e)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reviewing and the six stars. Thanks for the catch, I appreciate it.
