Ode to the Sun
Without the sun we would not be3 total reviews
Comment from Ellie707
Beautiful picture does the poem justice.
I like the first verse especially about the "beams touching slumbering eyes, awakening us" and how it flows into the next verse "Thanks for a new day . . . till sleep comes again." Very well done.
A good reminder of what the sun gives us each day, and that we should be grateful instead of taking it for granted.
Good job.
Ellie
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Beautiful picture does the poem justice.
I like the first verse especially about the "beams touching slumbering eyes, awakening us" and how it flows into the next verse "Thanks for a new day . . . till sleep comes again." Very well done.
A good reminder of what the sun gives us each day, and that we should be grateful instead of taking it for granted.
Good job.
Ellie
Comment Written 02-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much for the kind review.
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you're welcome.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This presented a quandary as it is a 5-7-5 contest. Typically that means a three line poem of 5-7-5 syllable count and you have really provided multiple 5-7-5's instead. Since it does not say you can't I am rating on that basis as this is a well written ode (let's hope the CEC agrees with me and doesn't disqualify this well penned piece). All the best in the contest and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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This presented a quandary as it is a 5-7-5 contest. Typically that means a three line poem of 5-7-5 syllable count and you have really provided multiple 5-7-5's instead. Since it does not say you can't I am rating on that basis as this is a well written ode (let's hope the CEC agrees with me and doesn't disqualify this well penned piece). All the best in the contest and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Yes, the instruction was confusing an ode is generally a longer piece of love or praise. I was confused as to what was wanted.
Thanks for you review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this poem is a good entry for the '5-7-5' writing prompt.
Well written with good rhythm and rhyming.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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I think this poem is a good entry for the '5-7-5' writing prompt.
Well written with good rhythm and rhyming.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 02-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Thanks so much for your read and review.
