FAMILY TIES.
Viewing comments for Chapter 58 "Frill On Strawberry Hill""ALL IN THE FAMILY."
4 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good 'Bear' story for the 'A Furry Tale' contest.
The picture is beautiful and a good match for your story.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
This is a good 'Bear' story for the 'A Furry Tale' contest.
The picture is beautiful and a good match for your story.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
Comment from Ricky1024
Summerhill weather well written story based on theme and imagery which was appropriate perfect flood well read well I have no grammar issues that I could see or perceive just content up work well with object of content and the descriptive measures were in line and perfect thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
Summerhill weather well written story based on theme and imagery which was appropriate perfect flood well read well I have no grammar issues that I could see or perceive just content up work well with object of content and the descriptive measures were in line and perfect thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 02-Dec-2017
Comment from Brigitte Elko
This was adorable story with unique characters to tell your furry tale. This was enjoyable and light. Children would love this story. A couple flaws noted:
* as long as we're home before Mr. sun (Sun)
*bee's hive to beehive
*you're welcome, I'm sure..Capitol You're..
* What' s your names.. Change to What are your names
* last line..mother dear...to Mother bear
No offense meant, just trying to be helpful. Still giving it 5 stars, you can easily correct in edit.
Brigitte
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018
This was adorable story with unique characters to tell your furry tale. This was enjoyable and light. Children would love this story. A couple flaws noted:
* as long as we're home before Mr. sun (Sun)
*bee's hive to beehive
*you're welcome, I'm sure..Capitol You're..
* What' s your names.. Change to What are your names
* last line..mother dear...to Mother bear
No offense meant, just trying to be helpful. Still giving it 5 stars, you can easily correct in edit.
Brigitte
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018
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Happy New Year Brigitte Elko: Brigitte, in your reply to my review for your poem, "Playful Dog, " you suggested that I post some of my poetry. Here I've already done that. Remember? I took your advise and made the corrections that you advised me to make.
Yes. You were right. It made my poem better. Thank you, Brigitte, for your help.rhonnie69.
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OOps, getting forgetful and old.
Faithful fan friend,
Brigitte
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a funny tale about how to enjoy away home a family, wholly where father, mother and children equally enjoy and pass happy moments, parents offer freedom to their children invite their friends also; I like. DR ALCREATOR
This speaks a funny tale about how to enjoy away home a family, wholly where father, mother and children equally enjoy and pass happy moments, parents offer freedom to their children invite their friends also; I like. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017