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The Deer Hunt

My actual first Deer hunting experience

14 total reviews 
Comment from oliver818
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That's really funny. Animals Can be so cute when they get angry, I'm not surprised the little guy distracted you. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
    I'm really glad you liked my story!....That was so embarrassing!...
    Oh, and thanks for the great review and rating!!
Comment from Dan Diego
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This is a sneaky-smart little story. I imagined the narrator sitting on a tree stump telling this story out loud. There's not much I can add to make it better. Thanks for sharing the moment. At first, i though you were going to shoot the squirrel and your very own tree branch from under you.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
    You know... I had NO intention to shoot the squirrel!... Guess I was being too entertained by it's ranting...
    At one point, I recall informing said squirrel that I had a loaded shotgun and that I could blow it away!...
    Glad you enjoyed my story!... Thanks for the Great review and rating!!
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

A nice fun little piece here.
Who knows, maybe the squirrel was in collusion with the deer. It's an age-old trick that gets hunters every time...

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
    Well it sure got me!... How embarrassing that was!....
    Thanks for the great review and rating!..... HAPPY NEW YEAR!!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks about a funny deer hunting experience, after waiting for hours, keeping everything ready, distracted by a squirrel, ultimate target not fulfilled; I liked. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
    Thank you for the great review and rating!... Glad you liked my story!....
    Have a Happy New Year!!
Comment from Mimi Linny
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Loved the story-telling on this one about the pesky squirrel who kept you from getting one of those deer! Can just image the chuckling from the cousins (and I'll bet that squirrel turned around and gave you the raspberry, too...after all, served you right for trespassing on "his" branch! Great job on this adorable story!

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
    Thank you!..... Yeah, just freshly out of the Army, and getting thwarted by a squirrel!...... How embarrassing!!
    Glad you enjoyed my story..... And thank you for the great review!!
Comment from pome lover
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well, you're probably an animal lover at heart, however...you could make a whopper of a tale out of that experience. You could say the deer probably sent the squirrel up on your limb to distract you, and you and he got into a big argument about whose limb you were sitting on, and go on from there, making it bigger and better. As you know, us Texans love tall tales.
pome lover

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
    Hey that's not a bad idea ! .... I like it ! ..... Yeah Texans have a tendency to spin a yarn or two(my DAD was a Texan)....
    Glad you liked my story....... Thanks for the fine review !
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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LOL! Deer don't look up, and evidently you didn't look down. The squirrel may have been hired by the deer to cause a distraction while they ate the acorns. :)

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
    Anything's possible, I suppose..... HAHA!!..... Glad you liked my story.....
    Thank you for the great review !....... I'm honored !
Comment from zekeziemann
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A good story, well told and simple for anyone to understand the wry comedy. Hunters love to tell stories and you have a good one to relate.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
    Thank you!.... Glad you liked it....
Comment from F. Wehr3
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Cute story, Jim! I enjoyed your little tale. This is the first post I've read from you, so If I may, I'd like to go over a couple of things for your consideration.

First, you've got this story spaced out kind of funny. What you want is paragraphs with a space in between them, so it is easier to read. What you have are just sentences with no spaces. Makes it look wonky.

This goes on for about 15 or 20 minutes and the squirrel finally decides I'm not leaving,
so it leaves. --Suggest spelling out fifteen and twenty. I go with spelling out numbers to a hundred. You have three complete sentences. Suggest a period after minutes and delete the and.

"Why didn't you shoot them deer?" One of them asked. --This is a speech tag. Lower case one.

When I climbed down off my perch I saw deer tracks all over the place
and the acorns were all gone! --You have two complete sentences and a dependent clause. When you begin a sentence with a dependent clause, use a comma to separate it from the main clause. Comma after perch. You also need a comma before and.

Needless to say, I didn't live that one down for quite awhile..... --The three dot ellipsis contains only three dots.

Welcome to Fanstory, Jim! Have a great day!

I hope you find this helpful.

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
    Yeah, it sure is helpful! Thank you very much!
Comment from damommy
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Oh, my goodness. That gave me a good laugh.

I know they didn't let you live that one down. I'd have been the same. I'd rather watch the squirrel than kill the deer. 8-)

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
    Yeah, it was pretty embarrassing!....... But I never forgot that squirrel!..... Thank you for the stars!