I Stand A Naked Man
A life lived.62 total reviews
Comment from Eli. Nightingale
This could perfectly paint a scene in a movie. I am sure it is probably out there somewhere. It tells a complete story and reads easily without slipping of tongue. The "dragon of deceit" almost brings to mind a Christian motif from the book of Revelations.
What I liked: If I had to imagine holding a camera lens over this poem, the view starts out very narrow, starting with the bag, and then it broadens to give us a generic picture, a setting, and then it focuses in. Whether intentional or not, the shifting of attention is expertly done.
What I didn't like: Nothing comes to mind.
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This could perfectly paint a scene in a movie. I am sure it is probably out there somewhere. It tells a complete story and reads easily without slipping of tongue. The "dragon of deceit" almost brings to mind a Christian motif from the book of Revelations.
What I liked: If I had to imagine holding a camera lens over this poem, the view starts out very narrow, starting with the bag, and then it broadens to give us a generic picture, a setting, and then it focuses in. Whether intentional or not, the shifting of attention is expertly done.
What I didn't like: Nothing comes to mind.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2023
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Reading this poem, I just hear in my head that song of Metalica "Nothing else matters" "- next to the picture of his bride
a loaded pistol lies in wait;
he picks it up and fires inside
the mind that found the truth too late." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Reading this poem, I just hear in my head that song of Metalica "Nothing else matters" "- next to the picture of his bride
a loaded pistol lies in wait;
he picks it up and fires inside
the mind that found the truth too late." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
Comment from nomi338
Some couples start out so in love, so full of hope for the future. Bystanders feel they will make it, have a wonderful love filled life. However, the demons of lust, greed, ego and other such distractions seep in and change us so dramatically, that we become brand new characters. We become unrecognizable to people who knew us then. Your words describe this impeccably.
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Some couples start out so in love, so full of hope for the future. Bystanders feel they will make it, have a wonderful love filled life. However, the demons of lust, greed, ego and other such distractions seep in and change us so dramatically, that we become brand new characters. We become unrecognizable to people who knew us then. Your words describe this impeccably.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
Comment from BermyBye50
easyeverett1,
I love reading and learning from your posts. Studying each of your writes is a masterclass in writing poetry. I appreciate and value each lesson and hope one day to aspire to become a master poet like you.
All the best,
Eugene
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easyeverett1,
I love reading and learning from your posts. Studying each of your writes is a masterclass in writing poetry. I appreciate and value each lesson and hope one day to aspire to become a master poet like you.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
Comment from bob cullen
This was a tough read. As poetry, it was magnificent and right up to your ridiculously high standards. Reality however painted a differing scene. To me, and I hope I've not misunderstood your message, it suggested a life of regret and disappointment at life decisions made.
Nonetheless the poem carried all the trademarks of Easy Everett's classic writings. Your quality never disappoints. You are in my opinion, the best poet on Fanstory.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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This was a tough read. As poetry, it was magnificent and right up to your ridiculously high standards. Reality however painted a differing scene. To me, and I hope I've not misunderstood your message, it suggested a life of regret and disappointment at life decisions made.
Nonetheless the poem carried all the trademarks of Easy Everett's classic writings. Your quality never disappoints. You are in my opinion, the best poet on Fanstory.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Hey Bob, I am most complimented by your review and comments. Like you, I write what I see and feel. That does not make me write it only makes me as honest as possible. I thank you again for such complimentary words. I try to be an optimist in a rather negative world. But as we know that position is difficult to maintain. Take care and keep creating. That is all we've got friend. Thanks. tom
Comment from Neonewman
Wow! What a heart-wrenching, relatable piece you have delivered here my friend. I love the old leather bag hiding photo's within. Incredibly written.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
God bless!
Steve
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Wow! What a heart-wrenching, relatable piece you have delivered here my friend. I love the old leather bag hiding photo's within. Incredibly written.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
Comment from Wendy G
Powerful, engrossing, and very moving - a reality check for many, or it should be, regarding priorities and attitudes, and the nature of love and differentiating it from lust. And then the horror of self-awareness and realisation.
Wendy
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Powerful, engrossing, and very moving - a reality check for many, or it should be, regarding priorities and attitudes, and the nature of love and differentiating it from lust. And then the horror of self-awareness and realisation.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
Comment from BenThrone
What a powerful meditation on the damage caused by naked ambition.There are many lines I like here, but "he cured his life in lurid greed" is probably my favorite. Excellent use of internal rhyme!
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What a powerful meditation on the damage caused by naked ambition.There are many lines I like here, but "he cured his life in lurid greed" is probably my favorite. Excellent use of internal rhyme!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
Comment from GWHARGIS
Whoa. This was a poem that showed how our priorities and views of life change. We value financial success over family. Work, put others first. Lie, cheat, ignore the truth. This was a very sad poem. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
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Whoa. This was a poem that showed how our priorities and views of life change. We value financial success over family. Work, put others first. Lie, cheat, ignore the truth. This was a very sad poem. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
Comment from Ulla
Oh dear, another poem so full of hatred, and disdain, but ultimately with such self- loath when it was all too late. The only way out was to kill himself when the truth of love finally appeared in his darkened soul. Ulla:)))
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Oh dear, another poem so full of hatred, and disdain, but ultimately with such self- loath when it was all too late. The only way out was to kill himself when the truth of love finally appeared in his darkened soul. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
