Conscious Challenge
Rhyming Alliteration19 total reviews
Comment from Irish Rain
Such a nice entry for this alliteration contest, and you've written about writing, something we can all relate to. Good luck, blessings...
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Such a nice entry for this alliteration contest, and you've written about writing, something we can all relate to. Good luck, blessings...
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Hi Irish Rain Thanks for your review, fun to enter but no luck this time never mind Cheers Christine
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is excellent. It meets all of the contest rules and should do very well in the contest. No one can predict how people will vote, but no one can find fault with your poem.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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This is excellent. It meets all of the contest rules and should do very well in the contest. No one can predict how people will vote, but no one can find fault with your poem.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Hi Thomas, Thanks so much I am pleased you thought it excellent and yes no luck with this one but always fun to have a go Appreciate your kind words Cheers Christine
Comment from B.B. Rose
Well you nicely encapsulated Fan Story itself in this clever but challenging format.The only line where I felt that you strained to meet the rhyme was ("free flowing prose may out run) didn't make much sense due to the awkward construction. Otherwise a fun poem.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Well you nicely encapsulated Fan Story itself in this clever but challenging format.The only line where I felt that you strained to meet the rhyme was ("free flowing prose may out run) didn't make much sense due to the awkward construction. Otherwise a fun poem.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Hi BB Rose, Thanks for your review and I was trying to say with that line that some people prefer free style to Rhyme but maybe it was not clear enough as stated. anyway never mind it is always fun to have a go at these Maybe next time it will do better Cheers Christine
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a clever write, in full compliance with the prompt, though the ending line requires a bit more attention, perhaps adding the word "attracting," "drawing," or "inspiring" as the first word in the line, to complete the thought of the previous one. If doing so, affects the requirement of the poem, deleting the word. "received" can remedy this...
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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In my opinion, a clever write, in full compliance with the prompt, though the ending line requires a bit more attention, perhaps adding the word "attracting," "drawing," or "inspiring" as the first word in the line, to complete the thought of the previous one. If doing so, affects the requirement of the poem, deleting the word. "received" can remedy this...
Comment Written 24-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Hi evesayshi, Thanks for your review and I did change the last line as prompted by you comment but needed to keep with the R sound alliteration so I went with 'receiving reviews globally, However no luck overall but always fun to have a go. Cheers christine
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That works, Christine, and you are very welcome...Eve
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, this was adorable, everyone here can associate with that. Me especially as the one who loves those rhymes and rhythms (smile).
Rhyme with rhythm is such fun
Free flowing prose may out run.
I agree with you, rhyme is fun, can never be outdone!
I wish you luck in the contest with this excellent piece.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Oh, this was adorable, everyone here can associate with that. Me especially as the one who loves those rhymes and rhythms (smile).
Rhyme with rhythm is such fun
Free flowing prose may out run.
I agree with you, rhyme is fun, can never be outdone!
I wish you luck in the contest with this excellent piece.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Hi ytbard. Yes I too like rhyme the best and this was a fun entry to write bit no luck thos time bit your review is appreciated Cheers Christine
Comment from patcelaw
Author, you have followed the rules and you did will with the rhyming and the alliterations. Good luck in the contest and blessings. Patricia
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Author, you have followed the rules and you did will with the rhyming and the alliterations. Good luck in the contest and blessings. Patricia
Comment Written 24-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Hi patcelaw. thanks for yor review and good luck message. It was fun to write. Cheers
Comment from frierajac
Interesting as it seems to be addressed to the reader/reviewer. This approach
of designating the members as a coterie is refreshing and I do appreciate it.
It points out the 'fun' angle of Fanstory.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Interesting as it seems to be addressed to the reader/reviewer. This approach
of designating the members as a coterie is refreshing and I do appreciate it.
It points out the 'fun' angle of Fanstory.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Hi frierjac. Yes exactly we areca coterie here on FS so you have the message ai was hoping to portray. Thanks for reading this one And it was fun to write Cheers
Comment from zekeziemann
You nailed the feelings that I bet most of those who participate in this site agree with. Good rhythm and flow to this work. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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You nailed the feelings that I bet most of those who participate in this site agree with. Good rhythm and flow to this work. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Hi zekezemann. Thanks very much for your review and comments I hope so too Cheers
Comment from Brigitte Elko
Thank you for supplying the definition of Coterie. This is a well written presentation of a rhyming alliteration poem. Every reader that reviews will relate to these words. Very clever! Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Thank you for supplying the definition of Coterie. This is a well written presentation of a rhyming alliteration poem. Every reader that reviews will relate to these words. Very clever! Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 23-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Hi Brigitte, Thanks for reading and we are all a coterie here on FS so I thought it appropriate LOL Appreciate tour comments and good luck Cheers
Comment from Liberty Justice
Oh no, looks like I got some heavy competition, because this poem flows with joy and testament to how much writer loves to rhyme. I, also, love the magic of making up poems and stories. NICE. truly, liberty justice
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Oh no, looks like I got some heavy competition, because this poem flows with joy and testament to how much writer loves to rhyme. I, also, love the magic of making up poems and stories. NICE. truly, liberty justice
Comment Written 23-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Hi Liberty Justice Thanks for your review and I am sure eveyone's will be worthy of selection. It is interesting just what people like in a contest. We shall see .And good luck to you also. Cheers
