Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a well done loop poem where each loop creates a feeling of deeper grief
of the loss of a spouse. I like the dove as a metaphor of a carrier pigeon for the message to God to lessen the grief so the stone heart will crack and feel less alone.
Maybe even find someone in that crowd to start over with.

Congrats on the win.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2017

Comment from LIJ Red

Exceptional

No wonder you won. Loop poems are touchy about sounding like natural speech, and tougher than they look to make flow smoothly. Exceptional poem.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2017

Comment from kathleenspalding

Exceptional

Wow. A difficult form flawlessly executed. Excellent use of words, artwork, colors and font for a beautiful visual display and read. Great job!

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2017

Comment from Contests

A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2017

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

I.,

This is such a beautiful poem to describe loneliness. A state of mind that we should be able to easily shake...but simply can't. Wishing/hoping this is mostly fiction--

Favorite lines:
Crowds make me feel more alone,
Alone I'll face your death and then,
Then this heart will turn to stone.

Thanks a bunch!

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I am so glad you liked it. Take care and have a great day.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That was a very sad, but beautiful poem, Ida. I've read many poems lately from poets who have just experienced their loved ones passing over, we all have to face it one day. Not that it makes it easier to know that. I've been there, and I know I will again unless I go first this time. This is such a good, well written Loop poem. I wish you good luck in the contest. :) Sandra.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017

Hi,

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments. Take care and have a great day.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Exceptional

Hi, Idamarty

= This is such an excellent poem on sorrow.
= Your words really do 'loop' around and roll down the page as I read.
= Gorgeous artwork as well. Together, they make a beautiful entry.
= Good luck in the contest.

Cheers, J
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 Comment Written 18-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017

Hi Jacqueline,

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing and for the six stars! I truly appreciate them and I am so glad you liked my poem. Take care and have a great day.

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

This is just so lovely, with stunning artwork. Crowds can certainly make the lonely even lonelier. The ending is so very tender and touching. Great entry, blessings...

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017

Hi,

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I am so glad you liked my poem. Take care and have a great day.

reply by Irish Rain on 20-Nov-2017

You too!!

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

What a perfect piece of matching artwork. I have never attempted the loop but you seem to be quite astute at writing them. My :favorite line is:
Disappear amongst the crowds,
Crowds make me feel more alone, I can relate to that.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017

Hi,

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I am so glad you liked my poem. Take care and have a great day.

Comment from Cedar

Excellent

This is such a beautiful poem. Your rhyming, rhythm and presentation are all perfect. I wish you the best of luck in the contest...Bill

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017

Hi,

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and I am so glad you liked it. Take care and have a great day.