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Grocery List

a poem about a grocery list

17 total reviews 
Comment from Ideasaregems-Dawn
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last line - after all, you are the boss - no abbreviation, for smooth flow, and Mister Smarty Pants, exceptional, whether I am late or not. In fact, it's being added to my list of favorite poems. LOL.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
    Thanks, Dawn. I'm honored that this one gets a space on your shelf.
Comment from LoannaLois
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I will tell you, Mr. Mark, why you received a six. I'm laughing and celebrating this night.For eight years you have read, reread, and strained your eyes reading my old sad story. I couldn't get over that kind of pain. Then, for some reason, I decided to read some from Fanstory. I read your list, remembering the way my husband hated shopping. He would get all fussy then he insisted on going because"he knew the produce better"(because of the restaurant business)
I couldn't stop laughing or remembering what we had once upon a time.
Then God gave me a nudge... I had done everything but forgive them. I wanted to blame her, but it was both of them... And I was holding on to the pain because it's all I had left. But, I heard my laugh. And, for the first time in eight years, I truly forgave them... and gave you a six.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
    Best six I ever got. True forgiveness is a rare commodity indeed - that makes you even more of an inspiration than you already are. I have been keeping you in my prayers and hope your treatment continues to go well. Peace.
Comment from emptypage
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Love this! I practically danced to the rhythm, the cadences strong and timely. And the humor was spot on. I enjoyed it immensely.... but I could never write one of these. I envy you, Mark, my friend.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thanks, Marla. Sometimes it's fun to just play with sounds and let the message be secondary. Hope things are going better for you health-wise. Peace.
Comment from Sharon Meda
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A good job with the grocery list challenge.
Artfully done with good rhyming and rhythm.
I guess it is possible to rhyme just about anything.
Well done.
Sharon

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thanks, Sharon. The goal with this one was to cram as many "icity" rhymes as I could.
Comment from robyn corum
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Mark,

Deee-LIGHT- ful! *smile* It looks like we all made the whole shopping trip/ experience/chore a highlight of our pieces. hahahaha! In my opinion, there's something quite torturous about having to go to the grocery store. YUCK!

I soooo enjoyed! Thanks for participating. Look for Sis Cat to possibly post one, too. He was challenged, anyway. *smile*

Loved it! (no sixes in the bank)

Thnaks!

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thanks for the review and the idea, Robyn. From now on, if Maggie wants me to do the shopping, she'll have to make the list rhyme.
reply by robyn corum on 13-Nov-2017
    Ha! Great idea!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem to keep the grocery list inside tour head to be sure there is nothing you forget. I write each item on my list as soon as it is finished and then I forget the list at home. Lol
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 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    I've left the list at home many times myself. Now. my wife just texts me while I'm at the store. Thanks for the review.
Comment from visionary1234
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I can see you had WAY too much fun with near-rhyme here Mark! potatoes/ great. Oh etc - spaghetti/already. Sounds like you're now ready for rap! I enjoyed the little rambles into the personal details re the SOS pads and kitchen being a mess. Who'd have thought a grocery list could be so entertaining? A delightful read.
:)Sharyn

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thanks, Sharyn. You're right - this was a fun one to write.
Comment from gloria ...
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Ha, yep, good one, Mark. And if you sang it to the deli counter lady she'd likely go and round up all those goodies for you.

This works, and I very much enjoy the subtle social commentary carefully hidden between the cheese and lasagne layers. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thanks, Gloria. Next time I go grocery shopping, I may try only buying items in rhymed pairs.
Comment from closetpoetjester
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Haha...now THAT's a shopping directive if ever I read one! Your sing song informative itinerary was flawlessly delivered and from tomatoes to tortillas, from cheddar to pizza cutting implements, you ran the gamut of what SHOULD be remembered. Engaging and witty throughout, going to the supermarket with you, must be a blast!

I simply MUST get you to do my next shoppping list
I have a feeling I won't forget a damned thing!
haha

Superb job. You give great rhyme, every time. Thank you for an enjoyable and intelligent read.

P

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    I'll do your list for you. but you may have to end up buying items in rhymed pairs (let's see, what rhymes with "Bourbon?")
reply by closetpoetjester on 13-Nov-2017
    Like I said...A blast!
    Get your scribe ready haha
Comment from Irish Rain
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This is BRILLIANT!!!! I need me some salami and pastrami now, ha ha. Your rhyming as usual...flawless. There should be an award for such genius!! Bravo!! Entertaining AND well done!!! Blessings....

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thank you kindly. BRILLIANT in all caps is more than enough reward for me. Made my day.
reply by Irish Rain on 13-Nov-2017
    You're welcome!!