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They're Hanging Tom Horn

A conversation with Tom Horn in prison.

16 total reviews 
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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Great imagery my friend. I wrote a poem about Tom Horn. It's in my portfolio. In the Book, "Windows to the Past." I saw the movie staring Steve McQueen. Tom Horn was certainly a very talented man. He seemed to excel above the ordinary with every endeavor. I enjoyed your story. Nancy

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thanks so much for the 6 stars and the kind words.
Comment from humpwhistle
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Forgive me, Zeke, but I couldn't help visualizing Steve McQueen. That's Hollywood for you.

Lots of good information here. But the conversation feels like a contrivance--more or less a disguise, an excuse to detail aspects of Tom Horn's life. It feels more academic than conversational to me. But that's just my opinion.

On the whole, Zeke, I found this both enjoyable, and educational.

Best of luck in the contest.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
    Thank you. I admit I tried to get the "facts" into the story as seen through the eyes of an admirer. Horn had quite a life and could have been remembered as one of the greatest Westerners, but??
reply by humpwhistle on 12-Nov-2017
    No buts, Zeke. This is a fine piece. I just wonder if you tried to cram to much biography in too short a conversation. Just a thought. Lee
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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I was off duty the next night and didn't see him again. Two days later November 20th, 1903, Tom Horn was taken to the gallows. It was one day before his forty-third birthday. I chose not to be part of the large crowd in Cheyenne that witnessed his hanging.
God rest his soul. ' This is my kind of poem, I love poems based on tru stories, fantastic work this is a real piece of art, written so carefully and the results show. I have learned something I had never heard of and it's fascinating brilliant!Oh God I could never witness an execution of any sort. Horrific. Kind regards Meia xx

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
    THANKS for the stars and comment. In the Old West, many parents thought that the witnessing of a hanging would leave a positive affect on the children.?/?
Comment from Rasmine
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Hello, :)

I'm usually not interested in Western writing (that is something I should try to write to expand my writing.)

I was hoping that Tom would escape with his girlfriend.

I found some typos:
At first (comma) he would just sit in his cell and write notes in a journal. I looked into his rigid (I think a comma is here cause this is a list) black (comma) beady eyes. So I took a risk and decided to ask him more about his early adventures in the West (maybe you could combine this sentence with the last using a comma). For a second or two (comma after prepositional phrase) I thought I must have hit a mighty sore spot and the conversation would cease. For a second (comma after conjunction? I think) it seemed as though he might charge right through the bars. In a way, yes (I would connect these two sentences with a comma, but it is your writing.). But a conversation with a famous Old West Scout was one that I would never forget.
Important: I did research on the grammar, but always do your own because mistakes can be made.

Good luck in the contest!!

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
    Thanks for the help AND THE STARS!
Comment from Ricky1024
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They're hanging Tom Horn with wonderfully written it sag good to see someone riding western there's very few of people out there doing it to see Lucas does it all the time and he's a novelist with it and a personal friend of mine this was well written also as in his style the great team and imagery it flowed well read well with no grammar issues and great scripted measures thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
    Thanks
Comment from pbomar1115
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After getting to know someone, talking about him and hisfriends, you feel close to them. I don't think I could witness the killing of a friend where I was unable to do anything about it.

Phillip

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    I am not sure I could witness an execution either. But the Old West ...different times. Most of the evidence points to Horn's guilt, although I will not pass judgement on the death penalty. I have more Old West tales on my books on Amazon.
    Thanks for the stars and the review!
    Zeke
reply by pbomar1115 on 11-Nov-2017
    You're welcome.
Comment from trumby
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I'm a big fan of any information that has anything to do with the old west, either in America or Australia.
I also love any historical pieces that appear in fanstory, although, for obvious reasons, I'm slightly biased towards Australia.
I thought that your historical piece on Tom Horn was well=written and informative

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thank you very much. Check out my Old West short stories on Amazon
Comment from robyn corum
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Zeke,

I love, love, love Old West stories, and even more especially those that contain actual historical information. *smile* It's like learning while I read -- a twofer! *smile*

This was a superb story. I enjoyed the way you wove all those facts into a believable situation and natural-sounding dialogue. Worked perfectly - at least, to this reader. Wish I had a six to throw at you. --frowny face--

Maybe next time. Thanks again!

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks Robin. Check out my Old West stories on Amazon.
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi Zeke,

You did a great job with this competition piece. Good use of the required phrase to tell a great and engaging story.

rescue me from the hang man - hangman can be one word.

look of a coiled rattle snake - rattlesnake?

I always could out shoot him - outshoot?

All the best
G

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks for the help and stars!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Zekeziemann

= I enjoyed your story based on Tom Horn.
= Didn't Steve McQueen play him in a movie? Jeesh, that's dating a person. I must have been a VERY small child. LOL!
= FYI: You could do away with quite a few of unnecessary dialogue tags when there are only two characters. Unless, of course, you have the character doing an action as well.
= WHY limit them? The read can get bogged down with too many 'said', etc. Without so many, the read is much smoother flowing.
= No disrespect intended, so use or lose as you see fit.
= I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Good Luck.

Cheers, J
Have a good day/evening!
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*>*)

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Appreciate the tip. Thanks. I have some similar stories and mistakes on my Old West books on Amazon,,,Check it out.