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Chinese Neighbors

A Tom and Carol story.

26 total reviews 
Comment from Tier V. King
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Good morning, Thomas: Thomas has certainly put his foot in his own mouth this time, huh? It's a shame that the neighbors didn't give him a chance to apologize. I certainly would not be moving as soon as I moved in, just because a neighbor said something offensive and extremely out of place. I do know though that this is just a humorous fictional story so I did get a laugh out of this. Thank you for the morning laugh.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading. I can always count on you. You're so nice.
reply by Tier V. King on 14-Nov-2017
    You too, Tom: Ditto
Comment from Jay Squires
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Humor does come naturally to you, doesn't it, Thomas. You have good comedic timing, so it doesn't come out as slapstick, but wit. Good job with this piece.

If I were pressed to come up with something constructive, it would be to tighten up the first paragraph by using the active voice, not the passive: "Tom SAT cross-legged on the floor. He TOUCHED his middle fingers to his thumbs, and CHANTED. One of the things I do before I post is put "Was" in the "Find/Replace" on Word. OF COURSE, "Was" has its place, but it's also an indicator of passive voice.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
    Thanks for the tips.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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This is really funny and I really enjoy your dry humour this is so well written and thoughtful I find it hilarious very well done kindest regards and warm wishes Meia xx

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading.
Comment from Ricky1024
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Review coming from and through a cell phone with no punctuation run in sentences and grammar issues this was another well written piece Thomas as all your work is a great theme and imagery it flowed well read well and had no grammar issues social speak ejective content greased objective content as descriptive measures were perfect thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024 never wonderful Sunday

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reviewing. I can always count on you.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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LOL oh I love your carol and tom stories, they really make my day and this one is exceptional. I laughed and laughed at the knowledge of the mistake and I can see Tom doing it.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading.
Comment from Unspoken94
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It's been a tough day. And then I close the day by
reading your piece. I can always depend upon you
and thank you. You made me smile and after losing
a 16-year-old today, I couldn't be more down. But
your write put some things into perspective.
BTW, if you're going to put your foot in your mouth,
wear peppermint shoes.

Bill Stephenson

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Sorry to hear about the sixteen-year-old. Thanks for reading and the advice. Also, thanks for the six.
Comment from bookishfabler
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Wow, Tom must have really insulted them. Never speak another language unless you are absolutely sure what your
're saying. My father once told a friend of his to go up to that German guy and say hello in German. He told him to say, okay I can't spell this, "Ich Lebe dich." He did and got such a look. He was lucky the guy didn't hit him. It was the seventies. He told the German stranger he loved him.

Hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks. So that's how the end of the war came abut.
Comment from rtobaygo
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Good afternoon, Thomas

As usual, I really enjoyed the humor. Tom seems to be one of those characters that despite his best efforts and intentions, something always goes wrong. I enjoyed the post.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written story. It is about the same with me and the English, that I try to learn myself and continuously mess up the tenses to the horror of those born and grown with the English grammar in their heads. Lol.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading. I feel bad for you.
Comment from BOO ghost
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This is funny: "Does this mean you're finally going to say hello to the Wangs? They're nice people."

"They might be spies."
Hum, never know,could be. More humor: "What do you know about my anti-gravity device? Paranoia will destroy ya.' grammar looks swell. Chinese words together. Lin slapped me. I think I insulted her." ha ha! Nice ending. They ran them out of town. BOO-tastic! ~

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading.