Comment from rheabug

Excellent

I am so sorry to read of this incident. Hope you are having a better day free from worries. We all need that in our lives. I wish I could give you some suggestions for Robert's diet needs. My mother of long ago had cancer and some kind of wine helped her. HUGS

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from Rasmine

Good

Hello, Robina!

Please, don't be offended by the four stars -- it just means that you need to work on this. I have a lot of respect for you writing in English. I mean, wow! You are bi-lingual.

I haven't reviewed your stuff or others because this computer keeps crashing. Today it is good -- cross my fingers!

I found some typos, errors, and have suggestions:
I took my scoot mobile to the shops, and my little doggy, called Smokey (to get rid of clutter in your sentence, maybe [but remember to write it yourself. This is only an example]: 'I took my scoot and dog, Smokey, to the shops.'). And I just take the dog in to prevent theft (I don't think there is a rule against using 'and' at the beginning, but maybe you could leave it off here). I got (maybe use 'bought') what I needed, (put 'and' otherwise it's a fragment sentence) put them in my backpack. Maybe I was too tired to think, with the long hours I make (maybe 'I am up', instead of 'make'). I landed on my bottom, so the shop assistants hauled me up (maybe 'helped' instead of 'hauled'). When the boss guy arrived (Get rid of 'guy', boss is enough), he asked immediately if I was insured (don't they all? ;P). I hesitated shortly (don't need the word 'shortly'), then answered. I think if he had not just come at that moment, I might have got off with a lighter sentence (don't use 'sentence' because it sounds like you got arrested, maybe 'I may have gotten off lighter'). He is so handicapped after his operation, had two pneumonias, and hardly eats (:( I'm so sorry for this. 'had two bouts of pneumonia').

I really hope for healing for your husband. I have a suggestion. Is he still in the hospital? The food may suck there, maybe you could cook his favorite dish? I bet he may eat then. :)

Blessings to you,
Nome

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind and helpful review, Ine. Have a lovely weekend. No, he is home since nearly two weeks.

Comment from Ronni

Good

Sorry to hear about your latest mishaps....sometimes it seems like
accidents and mishaps occur, with no logical explanation...chalk this
one up to that...let it go, and move on. More important to help Robert
get well along with his Dietician. Patience...always prevails. You need more
rest too!
Best wishes, Ronni

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 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

God Bless you both, Ine. You are going through a hard time presently and I am sorry. It is difficult to think when you are worried about the one you love and then to have this accident on top of it is brutal. I hope things calm down for you soon. Love Nancy

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely weekend.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

You riding a scooter must be a real sight. I enjoyed your story even with the depressing end. But insurance covered the bill. So Robert can be happy because there is no added headaches. Feel better. Nice work. Have a great weekend :)

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making of a very interesting read.
scoot mobile ad (and) Smokey?
The biggest cost will be for a crack in (the) fortified window.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Oh my Ine. How did you do so much damage? Running into things with the scooter? Had you been drinking? I'm glad you were not injured and I am glad you have insurance to pay for the damages.

teresa

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend. No, I certainly had not been drinking. Lack of sleep was involved.

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Oh my, the boss guy seems nice about it. I thought you were going to write that he kicked you, the dog, and scoot mobile out of the shop.

You told the story well, but I am curious what were the other damages? How did you managed to damage the property?

I hope your husband feels better soon.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend. Apart from the door, several glass items.

reply by Poetic Friend on 10-Nov-2017

Oh my!

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Ine, if this is a biographical piece of writing - then I sympathise. It is well written in a way that I always enjoy with you. Your complete honesty shines through and you paint a clear picture with words. Good luck in the contest. Poor Robert, give hime my regards, he does not sound at all well. Keep smiling - you sound the type who will I am sure. Warm regards Dorothy xx

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from apky

Excellent

The things that can surprise us daily!

My suggestions for you are below:

Near to the post office is a(an) expensive plant shop. I wanted to buy some flowers for hubby, Robert, as he was ill once more.(line break)
Why the heck did I go in with the scoot mobile ad Smokey?

Why the heck did I go in with the scoot mobile ad(and) Smokey?

I was too tired to think, with the long hours I make.(line break)
Anyway, the pair of us ruined a lot in this shop

But (we are-our) insurance will pay for this.


had two pneumonia's,(delete the apostrophe in pneumonia's) and hardly eats.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.