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Like Footprints

Minute Poetry contest entry

14 total reviews 
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
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I think that if we leave an impact on someone our footprints will go on. However, if you're walking in the snow it will disappear. lol. The good things you do leave little footprints on people's hearts though and those are the important ones.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the great review, EL. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Yes life is short and our footprints are soon erased and new one's take their place as the cycle continues, your poem is meloncholy but also comforting, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the great review, Dolly. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.

    Ron
Comment from Irish Rain
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I wish I had a six left. This is just beautiful. The rhyme and rhythm are excellent, and the sentiments are timeless. A wonderful entry!!! Blessings...

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the fantastic review and virtual sixer, Irish. Yeah, I wasn't thinking straight when I posted this. I should have waited until Sunday when everyone had some fresh sixers to give away, lol. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great weekend.

    Ron
reply by Irish Rain on 11-Nov-2017
    I've done that!! This would have gotten a lot!!
Comment from marybell1
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I enjoyed reading your minute poem "Footprints". You followed all the rules for this genre and you chose a very appropriate picture
All the best in the contest.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the great review and gracious stars, Marybell1. I'm glad you liked this little piece.

    Ron
reply by marybell1 on 11-Nov-2017
    You are most welcome.
    Marybell1.
Comment from June Sargent
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A beautiful example of a minute poem. Touching and thought-provoking. Footprints on snow do not last. But imprints on hearts do. So make as many good impressions as we can in the short time we have. Well done.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the excellent review, June. I really appreciate the gracious stars.
    I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written minute poem. You're telling a mini story in this minute poem. The fresh footprints will soon fade. Our time is short and passing very quickly. By the time we try to look.back there is nothing left.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the fantastic review, Sandra. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this little piece.
Comment from Pantygynt
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Only a very few get to leave indelible "footprints" in the snow of history. I suppose that is just as well or there would be far too much for our kids to learn.

I like the minute form and this has done it proud. An appropriate form for something so evanescent.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
    Lol, yes, they would learn a lot, apposed to just having to Google it now. Ha ha. Thank you for the excellent review, Pantygynt. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Ideasaregems-Dawn
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What a truly splendid minute poem (one of my favorite forms)! I love every stanza, but that second one is beautifully written truth; if only we could recognize it (and 'seize the day').

Then again, that last stanza is so hard-hitting... The first one - aw, sheesh - see what you've done? I love them all. That first stanza so sweetly sets up the contrast...

If I had a six, that would be the rating I would assign this beautiful minute poem.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the fantastic review and big virtual sixer, Dawn. I dearly appreciate the kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a wonderful weekend.

    ;)
    Ron
reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 10-Nov-2017
    It was my pleasure. You have a wonderful weekend too!
Comment from patcelaw
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A beautifully written minute poem for the contest. I wish you good luck in the contest. May you be blessed with a great weekend. Patricia

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the great review and good luck wishes, Patricia. I'm glad you liked the piece.

    Ron
Comment from rama devi
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FINE SIMILE - and excellent slant rhyme here:

Like footprints where the soft snow falls
and time won't pause,


Pass and last are a good slant rhyme too.

Fine personification:
while time's embrace
slows not its pace.

Potent closing note of mortality and impermanence in the final stanza. However, the flow is awkward with your punctuation choices, IMHO. Example edit for your consideration:

Then comes the day we look behind,
and what we find:
so sad the song...
our footprint's gone.


Fine minute poem.
Fine presentation.

So true.
Good luck.

Warmly,r d

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
    Thank you so much for the kind and detailed review, rd. I thought about adding the comma after behind but I get mixed feedback when I put a comma just before the word and. I don't really know what's right for that situation. I will add the other though. I wasn't sure if a comma was right there either, lol. I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes, rd. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great weekend.

    Ron
reply by rama devi on 10-Nov-2017
    Ah yes, The rules for commas with conjunctions depend on whether the subsequent clause (after the conjunction) is DEPENDENT or INDEPENDENT. It is actually quite easy to discern. If the second sentence after the AND has its own SUBJECT, it is an independent clause and NEEDS A COMMA. If it relies on the subject from the first clause, then there should NOT be a comma. Hope that makes sense? In this case, it is indeed hard to say but there is WE there. So that is the subject...

    Have a great weekend too!

    WARMLY, RD