The evil within
A drug addict's lament15 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Amen, Waves, this reminds me of some I know...I have never done them myself...never will...drugs take all you can be...they take all you are...the only store you want to go to...is the pawn shop....and family and friends...you throw away...you either wake up to the ones who love you...figure out there is life beyond drugs...or you don't...and you have no life...you live unhappy...insecure...it's so sad...I will never understand it...how can people throw life away???...sigh...I'm so sorry you have friends that have been there...this poem should put in drug rehab centers for all to read...very well written my friend...and the picture says it all...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Amen, Waves, this reminds me of some I know...I have never done them myself...never will...drugs take all you can be...they take all you are...the only store you want to go to...is the pawn shop....and family and friends...you throw away...you either wake up to the ones who love you...figure out there is life beyond drugs...or you don't...and you have no life...you live unhappy...insecure...it's so sad...I will never understand it...how can people throw life away???...sigh...I'm so sorry you have friends that have been there...this poem should put in drug rehab centers for all to read...very well written my friend...and the picture says it all...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thank you Linda I think it touched a few people because of that reason.
dip
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your so welcome my friend...love xxoo
Comment from frogbook
Great empathy for another since this is not your story. I too have never done drugs but I write about the pain, now and again as I know relatives and patients of mine that have gone through this hell. A wonderful tribute to your writing skills as well as to your compassion to be able to see things from the "other" side.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Great empathy for another since this is not your story. I too have never done drugs but I write about the pain, now and again as I know relatives and patients of mine that have gone through this hell. A wonderful tribute to your writing skills as well as to your compassion to be able to see things from the "other" side.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much froggy your comments mean a lot to me
much appreciated
dip
Comment from Pantygynt
To try to get under the skin of the addict when you have never experienced the stuff let alone the addiction is hard. I have met addicts but, like you, I have never touched any drug other than alcohol and tobacco. The one I can control, and the other I gave up years ago. I don't think I would ever try and write about addiction though. I just feel I couldn't hack it. You have made a pretty good stab at it here though. Just two thoughts.
L1. Started off with smokin' weed
L2. Then moved up to snortin' a line
Use the patois. it brings it home.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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To try to get under the skin of the addict when you have never experienced the stuff let alone the addiction is hard. I have met addicts but, like you, I have never touched any drug other than alcohol and tobacco. The one I can control, and the other I gave up years ago. I don't think I would ever try and write about addiction though. I just feel I couldn't hack it. You have made a pretty good stab at it here though. Just two thoughts.
L1. Started off with smokin' weed
L2. Then moved up to snortin' a line
Use the patois. it brings it home.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Good thought Panty I will change. thanks as always. I am sure everyone will understand those expressions
dip
Comment from Chrissy710
Oh Dr Dip This is so raw and telling in the truth of it. Yes Drugs are shit and destructive and as a nurse I have seen my fair share of what drugs do . Ice is the scurge of this century and I am so lucky none of my kids ever took drugs but have close friends who arn't so lucky and lives are being destroyed. A very good post Well written Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Oh Dr Dip This is so raw and telling in the truth of it. Yes Drugs are shit and destructive and as a nurse I have seen my fair share of what drugs do . Ice is the scurge of this century and I am so lucky none of my kids ever took drugs but have close friends who arn't so lucky and lives are being destroyed. A very good post Well written Cheers Christine
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much Chrissy As a person who is a nurse like you said you would see your fair share of addicts.
dip
Comment from robyn corum
Dip,
(What is your real name, if I may ask? If you share it, can I use it?)
This poem moved me in a way that few poems here can really do. I actually came close to tears.
The images you've presented are visceral and cold and horrifying, and even more so since they are real. This is the 'scariest' poem I've read anywhere close to this Halloween holiday season.
Especially poignant were the lines about the physical effects of these drugs on their users and the idea that the person is in control instead of the drugs. Your line about trying - and then shunning -- reminded me of how we can fool ourselves into hideous lies.
As you can see, this piece took hold of me and kept me fixed in place.
I'm glad this isn't a problem you deal with -- and like you, I've seen good people put themselves and their families through hell. Seems fitting that you would ascribe that fate to those people who push these drugs.
Didn't enjoy it, but certainly 'appreciated ' it. Smart piece. Thank you!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Dip,
(What is your real name, if I may ask? If you share it, can I use it?)
This poem moved me in a way that few poems here can really do. I actually came close to tears.
The images you've presented are visceral and cold and horrifying, and even more so since they are real. This is the 'scariest' poem I've read anywhere close to this Halloween holiday season.
Especially poignant were the lines about the physical effects of these drugs on their users and the idea that the person is in control instead of the drugs. Your line about trying - and then shunning -- reminded me of how we can fool ourselves into hideous lies.
As you can see, this piece took hold of me and kept me fixed in place.
I'm glad this isn't a problem you deal with -- and like you, I've seen good people put themselves and their families through hell. Seems fitting that you would ascribe that fate to those people who push these drugs.
Didn't enjoy it, but certainly 'appreciated ' it. Smart piece. Thank you!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Wow Robyn that is a wonderfully supportive review and I really appreciate the 6. Drug addiction be it any drug is a real social worry in our society and it's sad when you see friends suffer and are addicts whose addiction has ruined there lives and the lives of their loved ones
Thank you so much Robyn and I am glad that it moved you
My name is Mark but dip has been my nick name since I was at school so that's what everyone calls me
dip
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Okay, so we'll stick with Dip!
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, DIP: I have been away from my computer for a few days so i know that i will have many poems to read from you. My messages are at 52 this evening but I will try to read most of the posts bu the morning.
This is a very powerful poem. As I was reading it, I said to myself that this person would be dead buy the time he got to all of these different poems. Ecstasy and Ice - I hear are killers, heroine also. It is all demonic as far as I am concerned. I hear it like being possessed. You have no real control over your mind and heart because the addiction and desires take over like a demon or the Devil.
This is a great awareness poem, DIP, it is great that you have posted it.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Good morning, DIP: I have been away from my computer for a few days so i know that i will have many poems to read from you. My messages are at 52 this evening but I will try to read most of the posts bu the morning.
This is a very powerful poem. As I was reading it, I said to myself that this person would be dead buy the time he got to all of these different poems. Ecstasy and Ice - I hear are killers, heroine also. It is all demonic as far as I am concerned. I hear it like being possessed. You have no real control over your mind and heart because the addiction and desires take over like a demon or the Devil.
This is a great awareness poem, DIP, it is great that you have posted it.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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You are such a wonderfully supportive FanStory friend Tier. I always appreciate your comments
dip
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow did you hit the nail on the head, it does start with one and leads to more and more as the need grows and has to be taken care of. Exellent flow and rhyme as always
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Wow did you hit the nail on the head, it does start with one and leads to more and more as the need grows and has to be taken care of. Exellent flow and rhyme as always
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thanks as always Barb glad you agreed
dip
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great commentary on a horrible practice that will never go away. Good job telling this story. Your lines flow well, the rhymes are great, & the message strong & sad.
Where I live, drug busts of incoming vehicles from Mexico are common. I don't know why people think they can hide the drugs in their cars. It is a major problem for all concerned except the dealers making $$$$$$$. Good job & thanks for sharing & caring. Jan
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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This is a great commentary on a horrible practice that will never go away. Good job telling this story. Your lines flow well, the rhymes are great, & the message strong & sad.
Where I live, drug busts of incoming vehicles from Mexico are common. I don't know why people think they can hide the drugs in their cars. It is a major problem for all concerned except the dealers making $$$$$$$. Good job & thanks for sharing & caring. Jan
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thanks so much Jan, I am glad you could relate
dip
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Drug abuse starts with an innocent taster and when it gets its hooks into you, then you need it to feel normal. I have never taken drugs but I was hooked on Coca-Cola! Don't laugh because I had a week of headaches when I came off it! Those poor drug users go through far worse than that, your poem is a stark reminder of what drugs can do to people's lives, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Drug abuse starts with an innocent taster and when it gets its hooks into you, then you need it to feel normal. I have never taken drugs but I was hooked on Coca-Cola! Don't laugh because I had a week of headaches when I came off it! Those poor drug users go through far worse than that, your poem is a stark reminder of what drugs can do to people's lives, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Hooked on coke? were you snorting diet coke? lol
thanks for the supportive review as always Dolly
xdip
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Dip,
I think you've done a good job carting how easy it is for these things to take a grip and wring the life out someone. Addiction is bitch.
GMG
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Hi Dip,
I think you've done a good job carting how easy it is for these things to take a grip and wring the life out someone. Addiction is bitch.
GMG
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thanks Gman much appreciated.
carting? lol
"wring the life out (of) someone"
"Addiction is (a) bitch.
I'll have to give you a four for doing what I do and not grammatically check what you have written haha
fat finger typing and slow brain is my excuse lol
I thought you were the anal grammar nazi? lol
dipster from the hipster
Thanks mate much appreciated
