Blizzard
a tiny free verse14 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
Oh my. . .the things I miss when I stay away too long!!!
This is an incredibly potent and evocative poem. Truly
deserving of both a six star rating. . .and publication.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2017
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Oh my. . .the things I miss when I stay away too long!!!
This is an incredibly potent and evocative poem. Truly
deserving of both a six star rating. . .and publication.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2017
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I'm terribly sorry to be so long responding - I am having awful technical issues on site, and have been for some time. Thank you for this marvelous review - from you, it is especially appreciated!
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your dramatic and evocative free verse about lost love. Your "robe" simile and the "stripped naked...in a snowdrift" image along with the alliteration of "s's" are quite striking. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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I admired your dramatic and evocative free verse about lost love. Your "robe" simile and the "stripped naked...in a snowdrift" image along with the alliteration of "s's" are quite striking. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you ever-so-much, Joan. This is so special! I love your work, so knowing you enjoyed this free verse so much just made my night! I really like this one too. :))
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Thank you for your warmhearted response. Sweet dreams- Joan
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, Dawn: I truly appreciate the imagery that you used in this poem. I do love your poetry.
I have worn the essence of you all these years
like a white, terry cloth robe
and my favorite slippers.
The above is a deep description. I imagine the kind of personality or person who is described of wearing this thick white coldness of a blizzard like a terry cloth robe and favorite slippers. It is nothing to them to wear this daily and without this they wonder if they could even exist. I don't know if this is what you intended me to get from this poem but this is what I thought about. It is a perfect use of imagery.
I think about the encouragement to put on the new personality. It is just like waking up every day to put on that new garment, dress ourselves in it, keep up with the change. (Ephesians 4:24 and Ephesians 6:13)
MARVELOUS!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Good morning, Dawn: I truly appreciate the imagery that you used in this poem. I do love your poetry.
I have worn the essence of you all these years
like a white, terry cloth robe
and my favorite slippers.
The above is a deep description. I imagine the kind of personality or person who is described of wearing this thick white coldness of a blizzard like a terry cloth robe and favorite slippers. It is nothing to them to wear this daily and without this they wonder if they could even exist. I don't know if this is what you intended me to get from this poem but this is what I thought about. It is a perfect use of imagery.
I think about the encouragement to put on the new personality. It is just like waking up every day to put on that new garment, dress ourselves in it, keep up with the change. (Ephesians 4:24 and Ephesians 6:13)
MARVELOUS!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, Tier - I'm so glad you liked it. :)
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Dawn, this is just beautiful. The words are haunting and make the poem that much more emotional with the music to set the scene further. Sadness, loneliness, missing the love that once was there - so much from just 9 short lines. I can't help but shower you with a six on this one. ~DD
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Dawn, this is just beautiful. The words are haunting and make the poem that much more emotional with the music to set the scene further. Sadness, loneliness, missing the love that once was there - so much from just 9 short lines. I can't help but shower you with a six on this one. ~DD
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Albeit terribly sad, your words in this short piece
speak volumes -
have worn the essence of you all these years
like a white, terry cloth robe
and my favorite slippers.
the above is a wonderful description, Dawn.
Margaret
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Albeit terribly sad, your words in this short piece
speak volumes -
have worn the essence of you all these years
like a white, terry cloth robe
and my favorite slippers.
the above is a wonderful description, Dawn.
Margaret
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
Comment from GracieAnn
Dawn,
This free verse write is fun and humorous with its unexpected ending. Great way to grab the reader. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Dawn,
This free verse write is fun and humorous with its unexpected ending. Great way to grab the reader. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from sandy montgomery
"I have worn the essence of you all these years
like a white, terry cloth robe
and my favorite slippers." I just love the imagery here. It conveys a comfort with an in winter. One I don't share but I can feel the coziness of it because of your words.
"And now,
stripped naked,
barefoot,
I stand in a snowdrift
wondering how I can possibly
live to see Spring. " This second stanza is a complete turn around. It is stark and barren. I feel the grief of it and the lonliness. Your words evoke loss and despair. If I had a six left this would have recieved it. This poem causes me to emote...to see and for me that os what marks exceptional poetry. No spag but that is expected. Thank you for sharing your work.
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"I have worn the essence of you all these years
like a white, terry cloth robe
and my favorite slippers." I just love the imagery here. It conveys a comfort with an in winter. One I don't share but I can feel the coziness of it because of your words.
"And now,
stripped naked,
barefoot,
I stand in a snowdrift
wondering how I can possibly
live to see Spring. " This second stanza is a complete turn around. It is stark and barren. I feel the grief of it and the lonliness. Your words evoke loss and despair. If I had a six left this would have recieved it. This poem causes me to emote...to see and for me that os what marks exceptional poetry. No spag but that is expected. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from Sasha
I am speechless, really. This is so beautifully written. It is definitely one of your best. I love free verse and this one shines above all that I have read. Brilliant work with this one and lovely music to accompany it too.
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I am speechless, really. This is so beautifully written. It is definitely one of your best. I love free verse and this one shines above all that I have read. Brilliant work with this one and lovely music to accompany it too.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from visionary1234
Dawn, this is one of your BEST!!! I love the stark simplicity of this tiny piece of free verse. It sparkles like a gem! Simple. Stark. Perfect! ð??¼ð??¼ð??¼S
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Dawn, this is one of your BEST!!! I love the stark simplicity of this tiny piece of free verse. It sparkles like a gem! Simple. Stark. Perfect! ð??¼ð??¼ð??¼S
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from Ricky1024
Gone to have loved once is truly miracle and a blessing to lose love once is a curse to have loved once and then another time is a blessing and a sign of true love from above and to have lost that love is a curse and send this is very well written reflection of primitive active content thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024 be sure to read my upcoming piece another dedication to Jason it will be entitled death comes in the spring thanks dr. Ricky 1024
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Gone to have loved once is truly miracle and a blessing to lose love once is a curse to have loved once and then another time is a blessing and a sign of true love from above and to have lost that love is a curse and send this is very well written reflection of primitive active content thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024 be sure to read my upcoming piece another dedication to Jason it will be entitled death comes in the spring thanks dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
