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The Waffle House

Running into a lost love.

24 total reviews 
Comment from Dean Kuch
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No matter how beautiful a woman might be, it's just too damn difficult to top pancakes.



Well, it's probably for the best where Ellis is concerned. I think given his rather meek and mild demeanor Wendy might be a little bit too much woman for him to handle.
Nice writing, Phillip...
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 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading, Dean.

    Phillip
reply by Dean Kuch on 13-Nov-2017
    Anytime...
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Ok.
reply by Dean Kuch on 13-Nov-2017
    Okay...
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
reply by Dean Kuch on 14-Nov-2017
reply by Dean Kuch on 14-Nov-2017
    Best to move on and leave well enough alone while you still can, Sparky.
    Heh-heh-heh...
Comment from Brigitte Elko
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With every posting, your writing improves in the grammar area. The content is always good and I enjoy reading your work. Do something for me, read your work out loud and listen to what you hear. After you do this, go back and make a couple of minor changes to make this great, I think you will catch what I am talking about. If not, I will be more specific but I am sure you can do this.
Blessings,
Brigitte

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Ok. I will go back and read it and let you know when I'm done. Thanks for the compliment but I do not feel improved.

    Phillip
reply by Brigitte Elko on 11-Nov-2017
    But you have, so much. Great story by the way.
    Brigitte
Comment from Ricky1024
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Seems like you're being forever teased by this woman willing to buy you a cup of coffee as a waitress who hadn't seen since high school who when you were falling in love was interrupted by her boyfriend and then buy this truck driver I didn't get the jest on that if that was her current husband or boyfriend but anyhow at least you got to get your pancakes even though you want them yourself nice writing and I story thanks for this talk to Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks, for reading, Ricky 1024.

    Phillip
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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I looked at Wendy, "What's going on, Wendy? Is he looking for you?"
Wendy gently shook her head whispering, "I gotta go now, Ellis."
Wendy stole my head as she did in the library that day but not my yearning for the pancakes....I love pancakes and I loved this story. Very well done and much enjoyed kindest regards Meia xx

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading, Meia.

    Phillip
Comment from zekeziemann
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Great story, cleverly presented. The timing is what I liked as it held my attention right up to the end. Keep writing. Well done.
Zeke

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading, zekeziemann.

    Phillip
Comment from gloria ...
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This is an interesting story, Phillip. It has some nostalgia, allusions to a certain time in history and also the ever necessary bit of misdirection.

Thank you the share.

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
    Even though women, in general, have advanced, I would not exclude the option. It all depends on the locality. Thanks for reading, Gloria.

    Phillip
Comment from Bob Stanton
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I liked this a lot. It touched that spot in all of us that we think we have outgrown; that teenage angst - star struck yearning for another who is beyond reach. I get it whenever I hear "Goodbye Ruby Tuesday" by the Stones. Places me at the party where the love of my life walked away with another guy.
Oh to be a trucker :)

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading, Bob. I 'm happy you enjoyed it.

    Phillip
Comment from Cybertron1986
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Interesting and credible story which I appreciate reading. These are my favorite topics of story telling: chance encounters. I liked how you developed the present with the past, and how you were able to provide specifics from the past that made it an engaging piece.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
    Thanks for reading, Cybertron 1986.

    Phillip
Comment from Bill Schott
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This was a slice of life story that reminds me a bit of a Hemingway short story. A lot of background is left up to me to construct. Is Wendy a prostitute, not a waitress? All her personality traits might lend themselves to that other people pleasing profession. Poindexter seems like a not-too-smooth operator, still not cresting the hill to maturity. We see this brief glimpse, then back to the pancakes.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
    Bill, you are the only reviewer who gets what I was trying and not trying to do. You are the best. Thanks for your understanding.

    Phillip
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Phillip, I liked this little story. It's always a bit melancholic to meet somebody you used to have a crush on.
A couple of things: When she came over to the booth, I slid out of the booth to my feet. I would suggest: When she came over, I slid out of the booth ... Or you could say : when she approached, I slid out of the booth ... This way you don't use booth twice in the same sentence.
It was thrilling to see her = I was thrilled to see her. Makes the sentence much more active rather than passive.
More dialogue would also be good. I hope this helps. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
    Thanks, Ulla.You are a genius. I will use those needed suggestions.

    Phillip