The Waffle House
Running into a lost love.25 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Too cute! I love the way you write in a realistic fashion. You are down-to-earth, and warm.
You know I live the Dallas area too, right? It's a small world. Big state, but small world.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2017
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Too cute! I love the way you write in a realistic fashion. You are down-to-earth, and warm.
You know I live the Dallas area too, right? It's a small world. Big state, but small world.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 18-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2017
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I figured it when you mentioned Buckner Home for kids. You have a nice view of your stories ideas. And I see you read "The Waffle House" piece. My writing was beginning to come together on that one, but I still have ways to go. My problem now is writing something that I can believe, otherwise, I will have a hard time convincing the reader. Oh yeah, thanks for reading this piece, Rhonda.
Phillip
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That's an interesting point. I guess it really is hard to write what you don't believe, even fantasy, which is what I usually write. I have to make it sound like it really could happen, or I get lost as well. Thank you for the thoughts on that.
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Everyone has a way of inventing an outlook that's agreeable to them. You're welcome, Rhonda.
Phillip
Comment from Dean Kuch
No matter how beautiful a woman might be, it's just too damn difficult to top pancakes.
Well, it's probably for the best where Ellis is concerned. I think given his rather meek and mild demeanor Wendy might be a little bit too much woman for him to handle.
Nice writing, Phillip...
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
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No matter how beautiful a woman might be, it's just too damn difficult to top pancakes.
Well, it's probably for the best where Ellis is concerned. I think given his rather meek and mild demeanor Wendy might be a little bit too much woman for him to handle.
Nice writing, Phillip...
Comment Written 13-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
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Thanks for reading, Dean.
Phillip
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Anytime...
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Ok.
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Okay...
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Best to move on and leave well enough alone while you still can, Sparky.
Heh-heh-heh...
Comment from Brigitte Elko
With every posting, your writing improves in the grammar area. The content is always good and I enjoy reading your work. Do something for me, read your work out loud and listen to what you hear. After you do this, go back and make a couple of minor changes to make this great, I think you will catch what I am talking about. If not, I will be more specific but I am sure you can do this.
Blessings,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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With every posting, your writing improves in the grammar area. The content is always good and I enjoy reading your work. Do something for me, read your work out loud and listen to what you hear. After you do this, go back and make a couple of minor changes to make this great, I think you will catch what I am talking about. If not, I will be more specific but I am sure you can do this.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 11-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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Ok. I will go back and read it and let you know when I'm done. Thanks for the compliment but I do not feel improved.
Phillip
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But you have, so much. Great story by the way.
Brigitte
Comment from Ricky1024
Seems like you're being forever teased by this woman willing to buy you a cup of coffee as a waitress who hadn't seen since high school who when you were falling in love was interrupted by her boyfriend and then buy this truck driver I didn't get the jest on that if that was her current husband or boyfriend but anyhow at least you got to get your pancakes even though you want them yourself nice writing and I story thanks for this talk to Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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Seems like you're being forever teased by this woman willing to buy you a cup of coffee as a waitress who hadn't seen since high school who when you were falling in love was interrupted by her boyfriend and then buy this truck driver I didn't get the jest on that if that was her current husband or boyfriend but anyhow at least you got to get your pancakes even though you want them yourself nice writing and I story thanks for this talk to Ricky 1024
Comment Written 11-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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Thanks, for reading, Ricky 1024.
Phillip
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I looked at Wendy, "What's going on, Wendy? Is he looking for you?"
Wendy gently shook her head whispering, "I gotta go now, Ellis."
Wendy stole my head as she did in the library that day but not my yearning for the pancakes....I love pancakes and I loved this story. Very well done and much enjoyed kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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I looked at Wendy, "What's going on, Wendy? Is he looking for you?"
Wendy gently shook her head whispering, "I gotta go now, Ellis."
Wendy stole my head as she did in the library that day but not my yearning for the pancakes....I love pancakes and I loved this story. Very well done and much enjoyed kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 11-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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Thanks for reading, Meia.
Phillip
Comment from zekeziemann
Great story, cleverly presented. The timing is what I liked as it held my attention right up to the end. Keep writing. Well done.
Zeke
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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Great story, cleverly presented. The timing is what I liked as it held my attention right up to the end. Keep writing. Well done.
Zeke
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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Thanks for reading, zekeziemann.
Phillip
Comment from Gloria ....
This is an interesting story, Phillip. It has some nostalgia, allusions to a certain time in history and also the ever necessary bit of misdirection.
Thank you the share.
Gloria
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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This is an interesting story, Phillip. It has some nostalgia, allusions to a certain time in history and also the ever necessary bit of misdirection.
Thank you the share.
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Even though women, in general, have advanced, I would not exclude the option. It all depends on the locality. Thanks for reading, Gloria.
Phillip
Comment from Bob Stanton
I liked this a lot. It touched that spot in all of us that we think we have outgrown; that teenage angst - star struck yearning for another who is beyond reach. I get it whenever I hear "Goodbye Ruby Tuesday" by the Stones. Places me at the party where the love of my life walked away with another guy.
Oh to be a trucker :)
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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I liked this a lot. It touched that spot in all of us that we think we have outgrown; that teenage angst - star struck yearning for another who is beyond reach. I get it whenever I hear "Goodbye Ruby Tuesday" by the Stones. Places me at the party where the love of my life walked away with another guy.
Oh to be a trucker :)
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks for reading, Bob. I 'm happy you enjoyed it.
Phillip
Comment from Cybertron1986
Interesting and credible story which I appreciate reading. These are my favorite topics of story telling: chance encounters. I liked how you developed the present with the past, and how you were able to provide specifics from the past that made it an engaging piece.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Interesting and credible story which I appreciate reading. These are my favorite topics of story telling: chance encounters. I liked how you developed the present with the past, and how you were able to provide specifics from the past that made it an engaging piece.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thanks for reading, Cybertron 1986.
Phillip
Comment from Bill Schott
This was a slice of life story that reminds me a bit of a Hemingway short story. A lot of background is left up to me to construct. Is Wendy a prostitute, not a waitress? All her personality traits might lend themselves to that other people pleasing profession. Poindexter seems like a not-too-smooth operator, still not cresting the hill to maturity. We see this brief glimpse, then back to the pancakes.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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This was a slice of life story that reminds me a bit of a Hemingway short story. A lot of background is left up to me to construct. Is Wendy a prostitute, not a waitress? All her personality traits might lend themselves to that other people pleasing profession. Poindexter seems like a not-too-smooth operator, still not cresting the hill to maturity. We see this brief glimpse, then back to the pancakes.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Bill, you are the only reviewer who gets what I was trying and not trying to do. You are the best. Thanks for your understanding.
Phillip
