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Old Man Winter

A season of life for Old Man Winter

24 total reviews 
Comment from Cybertron1986
Exceptional
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This was flawless in both presentation and expression. So many vivid imagery here Inwould know where to begin identifying my favorite part of the poem. However, the use of citadel and slave was elegant and philosophically poetic. As a reader, I was truly engrossed in your piece. Beautiful

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
    Thank you so much for this wonderful review and comments. I?m so happy that you enjoyed and greatly appreciate your lovely comments! It was fun to write! Thank you again and have a grand day!
Comment from Bill Schott
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This personification poem, Old Man Winter, tells us a story in rhyming couplets that makes me almost want winter to come and stay awhile. Maybe.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
    Awww... thank you for your great review and wonderful comments! It was quite fun to write! I am so happy that you enjoyed! Hope we'll have some of that pretty white stuff to enjoy (at least for a little while)! Thanks again and have a wonderful day!
Comment from pome lover
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you paint a very strong character, showing different sides of him with enchanting words and phrases. Also a very appropriate picture to accompany it. An enjoyable read.
Congratulations on your contest win and being recognized.
pome lover

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
    Thanks so much for the lovely review and comments! So happy that you enjoyed - it was a fun challenge to write! Have a wonderful day!
Comment from JennaG
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Oh wow! I can see why this won the contest! It's wonderful! I love how you capture both sides to winter, its domination and its beauty. Great use of personification and perfect picture to accompany your skillful wording! Really well done! Congratulations on your contest win! :)

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Hi, Jenna! Thank you so much for the beautiful review! It was really very challenging, but fun, piece to write... I'm so happy you enjoyed! Thank you again and have a great weekend!
Comment from Boogienights
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This is a wonderful contest entry. You have captured both the good and bad essence of the winter season and made it come to life in the persona of an old man. Very strong entry, I think you will do very well,I wish you the best if luck.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
    Hi, Boogie! Thank you so much for the wonderful review! It was a fun challenge and even surprised myself getting it completed within the few hours for submissions. Thank you again - am so happy that you enjoyed!
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Comment from Sis Cat
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Oh, great! A contest winner! Congratulations. I feel honored to review it and am glad you posted it.

This is an excellent winter personification poem. I thought of Jack Frost and of Frosty the Snowman whose closing lines are

Mmm Frosty the snowman
Had to hurry on his way,
But he waved goodbye saying,
"Don't you cry,
I'll be back again some day."

This echo is found in yours:

With one last breath, a chill he'll blare
While Spring looms dancing in the air
"Goodnight, dear friends," he's heard to cheer
It's past my bedtime... til next year!"

I have been writing sonnets with meter lately, so I enjoyed the rhymes and meter of yours. They have a smooth, melodic flow like a Christmas carol. Furthermore, I enjoyed your vivid depiction of Old Man Winter. Your poem read like a storybook:

Yawning through the autumn breezes
Old Man Winter wakes with sneezes
Stretching wide his wings from rest
Another year's at his behest.

Also effective, is Old Man Winter's dialogue which brings the reader into his story:

"I'm here to rule this Winter Land
With brawn, controlled authority
I'll reign in true supremacy
And dominate in potent form
Through frigid cold, dynamic storm
And take to task the seasons mild
In strength, I'm nature's different child!"

All in all, Mimi, this is an exceptional poem and I can see why you earned a well-deserved win.

Thank you for sharing and congratulations once more.


 Comment Written 09-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
    Hi, Sis! Thank you so very much for this great review and the wonderful comments about my "Old Man Winter!" He was fun to write about and so happy that you appreciated my interpretation! You mentioned recently writing sonnets. I had never written one until a few weeks ago when there was a sonnet contest that was available. I found that I really enjoyed creating in the Shakespearean style, too; however, had a great time working on the personification challenge! Again, thank you so very much for a wonderful review and am so happy that you enjoyed! Have a wonderful day!
Comment from royowen
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I can see where and why this one won the winter personification contest. The language and persona are perfect, the flow is excellent, the rhyming is sublime, and the ease to read out loud is superb. Well done, written in iambic pentameter,, and aa rhyming couplets, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
    Hi, Roy! Thank you so very much for a lovely review and wonderful comments! It was quite a fun challenge for me to put together... I'm so very happy that you enjoyed! Have a wonderful day!
reply by royowen on 09-Nov-2017
    My pleasure
Comment from Mustangpatty1029
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Congratulations on your win for the Personification of Winter contest. Your entry was well done and certainly did a great job of bringing winter to life. Thank you for sharing,

~patty~

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
    Thanks, Patty! So glad you enjoyed. It was a fun challenge to put together! Thank you again for the great review! Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Thal1959
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Very well done, I'm sorry I missed the contest voting period - but I am glad you won. This is composed very elegantly and creatively. I remember an old cartoon where the underground gnomes are working to pump colors through the roots of flowers to announce springtime - but old man winter kept blowing frigid air as best he could before relenting.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
    Thank you so much for the wonderful review! I'm so happy that you enjoyed this piece. It was a fun challenge to work on in a short period of time... Thank you again for the great review! Have have a wonderful evening!
reply by Thal1959 on 10-Nov-2017
    You're welcome, Mimi - it was my pleasure.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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But then at last his time will come
When Old Man Winter's days are done
With one last breath, a chill he'll blare
While Spring looms dancing in the air
"Goodnight, dear friends," he's heard to cheer
It's past my bedtime... til next year!"
Its easy to see why you won, beautifully written and presented, well done love Meia xx

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
    Hi, Meia! Thank you so very much for the lovely review and comments! It was a fun challenge to write and am so happy that you enjoyed! Have a wonderful evening!