Across The Silver Flow
A tip of my hat to my ancestral homes with nostalgic love.29 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
That's so beautiful. Light, and musical and almost ethereal with the lyrical imagery. It's like the Romantic style of poetry. Very well crafted.
(Your notes made me chuckle.)
Wendy
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That's so beautiful. Light, and musical and almost ethereal with the lyrical imagery. It's like the Romantic style of poetry. Very well crafted.
(Your notes made me chuckle.)
Wendy
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
Comment from forestport12
Interesting mood and tone set here. Like the way you sweep our hearts up into it and move us along with a dramatic feel and view of the silvery stream and the sense of being in the moment.
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Interesting mood and tone set here. Like the way you sweep our hearts up into it and move us along with a dramatic feel and view of the silvery stream and the sense of being in the moment.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
Comment from Tom Horonzy
This reminds
Me of Gaelic love
Or maybe a Burns
Penning
Either
Way I enjoyed it
Well
Done
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This reminds
Me of Gaelic love
Or maybe a Burns
Penning
Either
Way I enjoyed it
Well
Done
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A lovely, lilting, nostalgic tone here as you chase that elusive dream from long ago. My favourite stanza is the last above the final couplet which captures the essence of your theme. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
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A lovely, lilting, nostalgic tone here as you chase that elusive dream from long ago. My favourite stanza is the last above the final couplet which captures the essence of your theme. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a lovely poem with plenty of well-defined descriptions of where you were when this fantasy took place. I love the musicality of the piece with lots of good vibrations. Thanks for sharing a fantasy many of us would love to have and dive into while asleep or awake.
Jesse
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This is a lovely poem with plenty of well-defined descriptions of where you were when this fantasy took place. I love the musicality of the piece with lots of good vibrations. Thanks for sharing a fantasy many of us would love to have and dive into while asleep or awake.
Jesse
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Exceptional sonnet about ancient origin homes memories of love. It's something I can relate to. My home of origin is in Spain and I have loved and lost... from to time I think about it with sadness in my heart.
I love the imagery in your poem. great rhyming that doesn't sound forced and flows nicely.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
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Exceptional sonnet about ancient origin homes memories of love. It's something I can relate to. My home of origin is in Spain and I have loved and lost... from to time I think about it with sadness in my heart.
I love the imagery in your poem. great rhyming that doesn't sound forced and flows nicely.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I couldn't help but smile as this young lass teased you and then I laughed out loud as I read your author's notes. Thank you for this reposting this. Reading it made my day brighter.
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I couldn't help but smile as this young lass teased you and then I laughed out loud as I read your author's notes. Thank you for this reposting this. Reading it made my day brighter.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
Comment from RoDanni
It is very wistful and romantic. i like the form and rhyme and meter--it has good flow. i like all of the comparisons, too. it's a very good poem, well-written.
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It is very wistful and romantic. i like the form and rhyme and meter--it has good flow. i like all of the comparisons, too. it's a very good poem, well-written.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2017
Comment from robyn corum
She sees me standing here a bit amisss;
Then smiles and throws me one sweet blissful kiss.
Oho! So, she's a teaser, eh? I think she may even know ahead of time that you will most certainly trip on that tree root when you charge after her. Smart and elusive thing, the muse. Thanks!
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She sees me standing here a bit amisss;
Then smiles and throws me one sweet blissful kiss.
Oho! So, she's a teaser, eh? I think she may even know ahead of time that you will most certainly trip on that tree root when you charge after her. Smart and elusive thing, the muse. Thanks!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2017
Comment from rama devi
Beautiful; love poem, my friend. But I am sorry it never turned out to flourish. Your notes are laced with regret for those trips!
Lovely line:
Her song an echo in a dream.
Memorable lines and well alliterated:
No Nightingale has ever pined as sweet
Nor laid such bashful beauty at my feet.
Great stanza with rhymes, alliteration and meaning:
Such plaintive strains of purity
Enrapture like a symphony.
No springtime trill of whippoorwill
Can touch so much my weary will.
Extraordinarily unique and well voice the great rhymes:
No Sirens of exotic seas,
Heard off the Southern Hebrides,
Could lift so high my troubled soul
Or fill it full so joyous whole.
Nice voicing here too and rhymes:
Yet language lost does not affect
My love for ancient dialect.
*optional suggestion:
And now(,) across the silver flow(,)
I see her face flushed all aglow.
* typo--one extra 's':
She sees me standing here a bit amisss;(,)
Then smiles and throws me one sweet blissful kiss.
Lovely SSSSS sounds in the closing couplet. Fine ending note.
Sweet and tender.
Love,
rd
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Beautiful; love poem, my friend. But I am sorry it never turned out to flourish. Your notes are laced with regret for those trips!
Lovely line:
Her song an echo in a dream.
Memorable lines and well alliterated:
No Nightingale has ever pined as sweet
Nor laid such bashful beauty at my feet.
Great stanza with rhymes, alliteration and meaning:
Such plaintive strains of purity
Enrapture like a symphony.
No springtime trill of whippoorwill
Can touch so much my weary will.
Extraordinarily unique and well voice the great rhymes:
No Sirens of exotic seas,
Heard off the Southern Hebrides,
Could lift so high my troubled soul
Or fill it full so joyous whole.
Nice voicing here too and rhymes:
Yet language lost does not affect
My love for ancient dialect.
*optional suggestion:
And now(,) across the silver flow(,)
I see her face flushed all aglow.
* typo--one extra 's':
She sees me standing here a bit amisss;(,)
Then smiles and throws me one sweet blissful kiss.
Lovely SSSSS sounds in the closing couplet. Fine ending note.
Sweet and tender.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 04-Nov-2017
