Into the night
Nocturnal love15 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello DR DIP, Your poem is beautifully penned in soft and soulful images. I especially liked your ending verse:
The love we have, for each other
Into the night we'll both discover
The joys of being here as one
Just you and me before the sun
Your poem left me with the feeling of Ahh. Very lovely.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
Hello DR DIP, Your poem is beautifully penned in soft and soulful images. I especially liked your ending verse:
The love we have, for each other
Into the night we'll both discover
The joys of being here as one
Just you and me before the sun
Your poem left me with the feeling of Ahh. Very lovely.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thankyou so much late bloomer. I am glad you liked it.
dip
Comment from Dean Kuch
And as the moon slowly rises
The moonlit night is full of surprises
We make love, under the stars
Lunar love, the night is ours.
Lovely poem, Mark.
A poignant poetic proclamation portraying pure passion and romance.
I saw just one line I would change for the sake of meter which I have noted above in red.
Wonderfully done...
~Dean
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
And as the moon slowly rises
The moonlit night is full of surprises
We make love, under the stars
Lunar love, the night is ours.
Lovely poem, Mark.
A poignant poetic proclamation portraying pure passion and romance.
I saw just one line I would change for the sake of meter which I have noted above in red.
Wonderfully done...
~Dean
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thanks so much Dean just curious? Does stars and ours rhyme in America? it's all in pronunciation I suppose.
There are a few options here I suppose:
And as the moon slowly rises
The moonlit night is full of surprises
We make love there for hours
Lunar love, the night is ours for perfect rhyme
or
And as the moon slowly rises
The moonlit night is full of surprises
We make love under the stars
Lunar love, it never mars
or
And as the moon slowly rises
The moonlit night is full of surprises
We make love under the stars
Lunar love, nothing ever mars
I'm so confused which one to go for. I am favouring perfect rhyme over slanted or near rhyme
What do you think?
dip
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As the moon slowly rises
moonlit night's full of surprises.
We'll make love beneath the stars
Lunar love--where nothing mars.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Nocturnal love, nicely done.
"We make love under the stars"...what better place to declare love than under the moon and the stars making it romantic . Nice AABB
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
Nocturnal love, nicely done.
"We make love under the stars"...what better place to declare love than under the moon and the stars making it romantic . Nice AABB
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thanks again Barb much appreciated
dip
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Dr D,
This is a great love poem. Good job on the smooth flow & great rhymes. Your picture is gorgeous. When paired with your words, you create a memorable read. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
Dr D,
This is a great love poem. Good job on the smooth flow & great rhymes. Your picture is gorgeous. When paired with your words, you create a memorable read. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Why thank you Jan, you have made my day
dip
Comment from Teri7
Dip, This is another very beautiful romantic poem you have penned from the heart. You used very good descriptive wording and very beautiful imagery with the art work. Blessings,Teri
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
Dip, This is another very beautiful romantic poem you have penned from the heart. You used very good descriptive wording and very beautiful imagery with the art work. Blessings,Teri
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thankyou as always Teri
dip
Comment from l.raven
HI Waves, this is just beautiful...and how it should be...you are all I want...and you are all I see when we are making love...forever....sigh...today it is so different ...lovers, spouses, mates, ...they are in bed thinking of someone else...and I don't mean God...love you love poem you...Love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
HI Waves, this is just beautiful...and how it should be...you are all I want...and you are all I see when we are making love...forever....sigh...today it is so different ...lovers, spouses, mates, ...they are in bed thinking of someone else...and I don't mean God...love you love poem you...Love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thankyou so much as always Linda glad you liked it
dip
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soooo welcome you...love xxoo
Comment from sandy montgomery
I love the presentation. This is a lovely romantic poem. Sorry you haven't seen many reviews from me lately I got behind again. Be patient and I'll catch up. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
I love the presentation. This is a lovely romantic poem. Sorry you haven't seen many reviews from me lately I got behind again. Be patient and I'll catch up. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thank YOU for being so kind and reviewing I always appreciate your input Sandy
dip
Comment from patcelaw
Dip, I do so much like this poem about the love of a man and his woman. I always like your poetry, because it is straight forward and simple, without obscure wording. Patricia
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
Dip, I do so much like this poem about the love of a man and his woman. I always like your poetry, because it is straight forward and simple, without obscure wording. Patricia
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thankyou Pat that is a huge compliment much appreciated
dip
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The moon is mystical and romantic and can bring joy to the couple in love, your words are loving and real, suns setting have the same ambiance, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
The moon is mystical and romantic and can bring joy to the couple in love, your words are loving and real, suns setting have the same ambiance, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thankyou as always Dolly I am glad you liked it. Yeah sunsets do have the same ambiance. There is something romantic about a sunset
dip
Comment from Pantygynt
Hi there, Dip. You are getting really quite technical these days. Rhyming couplets in quatrains and the "a" in every case a double rhyme (over two syllables) I am so pleased to see you picking up on the idea of unity in a poem I am going to give this one a six pack.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
Hi there, Dip. You are getting really quite technical these days. Rhyming couplets in quatrains and the "a" in every case a double rhyme (over two syllables) I am so pleased to see you picking up on the idea of unity in a poem I am going to give this one a six pack.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Wow a six I am humbled and honoured you feel it deserves this. You have made my day. I am glad you think I'm improving.
I think you'll like tomorrow's posts
Thanks again , always appreciated
dip