Unleashed Chaos
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Revealed Secrets/Part Two"A Novel of the Breedline Series
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Comment from ngage
Shana, this is a captivating chapter that keep me glued to the computer screen. You always reel me into your story with every twist and turn of each scene. You are very talented. I have no doubt you will go far.
Great cliffhanger at the end. Looking forward to your next post.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Shana, this is a captivating chapter that keep me glued to the computer screen. You always reel me into your story with every twist and turn of each scene. You are very talented. I have no doubt you will go far.
Great cliffhanger at the end. Looking forward to your next post.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thank you, ngage! :)
I love to hear your feedback! You're very inspiring and encourage me to write. You are truly a gem!
Shana :)
Comment from Natali Holden
I really hope Jace hears her. But either way, soon enough they'll find out that she and Arius and Tidus are gone. Hopefully before they come back for Steven. And maybe they'll stop them from taking Steven.
"Tessa sighed as (she) got to the top of the staircase, her mind drifting back to Jace's dreams."
Why are you so good at ending chapters? I want more! Keep up the good work!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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I really hope Jace hears her. But either way, soon enough they'll find out that she and Arius and Tidus are gone. Hopefully before they come back for Steven. And maybe they'll stop them from taking Steven.
"Tessa sighed as (she) got to the top of the staircase, her mind drifting back to Jace's dreams."
Why are you so good at ending chapters? I want more! Keep up the good work!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Natali :)
You're such a great help. Thanks for catching my missing word. I read my chapters over and over, and never catch it. You are a great pair of eyes.
I just want to tell you how much you motivate me to write. Your words give me confidence. You are truly an inspiration to me. I can't thank you enough for all you do. It makes a difference to me. Stay tuned...
Shana :)
Comment from apky
Poor Tessa, I so hope she'll be all right. You really have made me fall for your characters, not to mention this genre that I deliberately never read before. I remember trying to read Twilight, which I got as a present, and I struggled so much I gave up after a hundred pages or so.
This was another Brilliant chapter.
Before I forget - do you do your artwork, like the one above, and book covers yourself, or do you have somebody to take care of that? I love them!
But some things just weren't met(meant) to be forever.
For her, a happy life for Arius and Tidus was one she would make damn sure(of?).
~ otherwise write it differently, because it doesn't sound right as you've done it. Suggestion: For her, a happy life for Arius and Tidus was one she would damn sure achieve.
"Lilith's orders were that under no circumstances (should) we harm the queen."
Ever fondly,
Aki
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Poor Tessa, I so hope she'll be all right. You really have made me fall for your characters, not to mention this genre that I deliberately never read before. I remember trying to read Twilight, which I got as a present, and I struggled so much I gave up after a hundred pages or so.
This was another Brilliant chapter.
Before I forget - do you do your artwork, like the one above, and book covers yourself, or do you have somebody to take care of that? I love them!
But some things just weren't met(meant) to be forever.
For her, a happy life for Arius and Tidus was one she would make damn sure(of?).
~ otherwise write it differently, because it doesn't sound right as you've done it. Suggestion: For her, a happy life for Arius and Tidus was one she would damn sure achieve.
"Lilith's orders were that under no circumstances (should) we harm the queen."
Ever fondly,
Aki
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thank you! :)
Wow! You like my characters better than Twilight? I'm speechless. That's a big compliment to me, especially coming from you.
You always catch my typos. You're awesome! You have a great pair of eyes.
About the photos I place with my chapters. I am part of a site called Wolf Pack. I found it on Facebook. I know it sounds weird, and yes some of the people on it are 'different,' but I love all the artwork they post. I get the photos from that site. There are a lot of great artists on this site too. I joined this site because I figured since the people on it are so crazy about wolves, it might boost my book sales. And so far... it has! :) It's a free way for me to promote my website.
For the cover of my books, I have an image designer work on it with me.
Thanks for taking time to read my chapters. I appreciate it!
Your fan,
Shana :)
Comment from beizanten
Very interesting and intriguing previous chapter summary what is victor secret. aN Interesting picture. You describe the character emotion well. A very good plorline. Keep up the great work
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Very interesting and intriguing previous chapter summary what is victor secret. aN Interesting picture. You describe the character emotion well. A very good plorline. Keep up the great work
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thank you! :)
So glad you stopped in to read my chapter. Your feedback is very helpful and boosts my confidence. Hope to hear from you again.
Shana :)
Comment from royowen
Poor Casey is worried about Lily discerning what he is, and he nearly blurts it out to Tessa. Also Eve is in a bad position, she doesn't want her son's to grow up in the same environment that she and Sebastion did. It's hard to see there's any other way but the bad way, when hurt and cruelty are part of it. We want a better way for our children. Sebastion and Thomas have kidnapped Tessa, along with Eve's twins, I'm suspecting Eve's sincerity and will are now to be tested well done, good scribing, dear Shana, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Poor Casey is worried about Lily discerning what he is, and he nearly blurts it out to Tessa. Also Eve is in a bad position, she doesn't want her son's to grow up in the same environment that she and Sebastion did. It's hard to see there's any other way but the bad way, when hurt and cruelty are part of it. We want a better way for our children. Sebastion and Thomas have kidnapped Tessa, along with Eve's twins, I'm suspecting Eve's sincerity and will are now to be tested well done, good scribing, dear Shana, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Roy :)
This chapter lets the reader see the transformation in Eve's character. Now that she has experienced motherhood, her outlook on life is different. The question is... will she be able to persuade Sebastian to change his ways?
My character Casey seems lost. He's keeping a secret from the Breedline Covenant and Lila. If his secret identity gets revealed, will they except him for what he is? Stay tuned.
Thank you for taking the time to read my chapters. You're awesome, Roy :)
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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It's a very skilfully woven plot Dear Shana, great wrote dear friend
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks truth has to reveal, secrets have to be unveiled; with this relationship in a new term has to be accepted and it is appealing, realistic and the ice is broken; I liked.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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This speaks truth has to reveal, secrets have to be unveiled; with this relationship in a new term has to be accepted and it is appealing, realistic and the ice is broken; I liked.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much! :)
It's great to hear from you again. I hope you keep checking in for new adventures of the Breedline. Your feedback is greatly appreciated.
Shana :)
