Cold Blue Yonder
Who am I? Too easy, I guess...18 total reviews
Comment from alf collier
a very moving entry into this prompt!! Flows like a river and is a very enjoyable read!! I cannot remove a word or phrase to highlight, as the whole is required.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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a very moving entry into this prompt!! Flows like a river and is a very enjoyable read!! I cannot remove a word or phrase to highlight, as the whole is required.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your very positive review.
Comment from BOO ghost
BOO was not sure, so I peeped. The person that crossed my mind was that fisherman when Jesus lived. Can not remember his name but Jesus told him if you have faith you can walk on water. The fisherman walked on water like Jesus but he became afraid and lost faith. He slowly sunk into the sea. BOO was wrong but that is what I pictured. Good imagination! BOO has five pebbles.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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BOO was not sure, so I peeped. The person that crossed my mind was that fisherman when Jesus lived. Can not remember his name but Jesus told him if you have faith you can walk on water. The fisherman walked on water like Jesus but he became afraid and lost faith. He slowly sunk into the sea. BOO was wrong but that is what I pictured. Good imagination! BOO has five pebbles.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your fun review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well done with this lovely free verse Maria, written from the POV of Virginia Woolf. Really like your opening couplet, a great lead in to this well written verse. Enjoyed it,
cheers
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Well done with this lovely free verse Maria, written from the POV of Virginia Woolf. Really like your opening couplet, a great lead in to this well written verse. Enjoyed it,
cheers
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thanks again for reading my posts. Have a lovely day.
Comment from Ulla
Hi jose Maria. Are you writing about Virginia Woolf? Tha's what she did. It must be her you're referring to. What a beautiful poem you've written here. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Hi jose Maria. Are you writing about Virginia Woolf? Tha's what she did. It must be her you're referring to. What a beautiful poem you've written here. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Yes, it's VW.
Thanks so much for your review, Ulla.
Comment from RGstar
Its virtually impossible not to put yourself in the characters shoes as you will write as you think the character feels, yet, I like the point of personification.
I once played a stone in a play abroad, in Cyprus, and had to roll down a hill, and received great reviews for playing a stone (fact)
So, you see, one can immerse oneself into character, yet, it will always be your perspective of how the character feels, performing or writing, so I really think
"Forget about yourself and what YOU would write." could have been left out of the specification of the challenge or worded differently. Being a drama teacher, one knows the two are linked, though one must assume the character of the subject, but still by ones own making.
Lovely job here. Quiet movement that ripples through the narrative, creating your setting.
Lovely write.
My very best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Its virtually impossible not to put yourself in the characters shoes as you will write as you think the character feels, yet, I like the point of personification.
I once played a stone in a play abroad, in Cyprus, and had to roll down a hill, and received great reviews for playing a stone (fact)
So, you see, one can immerse oneself into character, yet, it will always be your perspective of how the character feels, performing or writing, so I really think
"Forget about yourself and what YOU would write." could have been left out of the specification of the challenge or worded differently. Being a drama teacher, one knows the two are linked, though one must assume the character of the subject, but still by ones own making.
Lovely job here. Quiet movement that ripples through the narrative, creating your setting.
Lovely write.
My very best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thanks for your review, Roy. Have a lovely day.
Comment from royowen
I'm guessing it's someone who drowned themselves, but I don't know who, I guess there would have died this way, but not specifically. But well done Maria, I truly felt a "sinking" feeling, a sort of drowning with them, so good luck in the contest. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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I'm guessing it's someone who drowned themselves, but I don't know who, I guess there would have died this way, but not specifically. But well done Maria, I truly felt a "sinking" feeling, a sort of drowning with them, so good luck in the contest. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Yes, Virginia Woolf.
Thanks for reading.
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Yes, that's right. Well done.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Excellent
Clever in fact very clever
As I kept reading over your (Who am I?)
now could it be the The Rime of the Ancient Mariner written by Samuel Taylor Coleridge?
Gert
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Excellent
Clever in fact very clever
As I kept reading over your (Who am I?)
now could it be the The Rime of the Ancient Mariner written by Samuel Taylor Coleridge?
Gert
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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No, the narrator is a famous English writer. She committed suicide by walking into the river Ouse with stones in her pockets.
Thanks for reading.
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You are welcome So looks like you aren't going to give us another hint/clue
Smiles
Gert
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It's Virginia Woolf. Have a lovely day.
Comment from Bucketlist
A very cleverly worded poem with few clues. I was wondering and had the bad thought " I'll cheat" so the mystical figure was discovered (give me a break, I'm in my 60s!) i
I enjoyed your poetic penning, thanks for sharing
Hugs, Trisha
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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A very cleverly worded poem with few clues. I was wondering and had the bad thought " I'll cheat" so the mystical figure was discovered (give me a break, I'm in my 60s!) i
I enjoyed your poetic penning, thanks for sharing
Hugs, Trisha
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading and for your humorous review. ;)
Comment from pbomar1115
I'm not sure but my impression is a little boy who is with friends playing in the water. He has a pocket of rocks to throw while he's there but become frightened and wants to leave.
Phillip
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I'm not sure but my impression is a little boy who is with friends playing in the water. He has a pocket of rocks to throw while he's there but become frightened and wants to leave.
Phillip
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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No... it's a lot more tragic than that. It's about a famous British writer who committed suicide by walking into the river Ouse with pebbles in her pockets.
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Oh. Sorry.
Phillip
Comment from robyn corum
MJ,
Well, I had absolutely no idea who this could be. I have to admit, I cheated and peeked at the other comments hoping someone was much smarter than me. *smile*
I was so impressed with this poem, girl. The carefully repeated phrases of 'the little stones' and 'the water calls' were marvelous and MADE the piece.
Loved it!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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MJ,
Well, I had absolutely no idea who this could be. I have to admit, I cheated and peeked at the other comments hoping someone was much smarter than me. *smile*
I was so impressed with this poem, girl. The carefully repeated phrases of 'the little stones' and 'the water calls' were marvelous and MADE the piece.
Loved it!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I'm glad you liked it. It means a lot, as you are such a good poet.
So now you know who it is, don't you? At least one person guessed correctly.
Thanks for reading.
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Yes now I know but only cause I cheated. Haha!
