As we age
Lost loved ones and lost memory19 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Waves, I love when people are able to live their entire lives together...like mom and dad...and it's sad when that love gets separated...for any reason...I know and believe it with reunite...but the time waiting is seems so long...sigh...very well written you...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Hi Waves, I love when people are able to live their entire lives together...like mom and dad...and it's sad when that love gets separated...for any reason...I know and believe it with reunite...but the time waiting is seems so long...sigh...very well written you...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much Linda much appreciated as always
xdip
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sooooooooo welcome...love xxoo
Comment from closetpoetjester
Yes Mark. It is most enjoyable to grow old with the one you love. A nicely crafted poem. I see no spags or issues with meter.
Good day
P
Bore...fucking--ring!!!! LOL
You really want THIS shite, Mark?
Okay then. As you wish.
With BOTH barrels of "nicey nice" LOL
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Yes Mark. It is most enjoyable to grow old with the one you love. A nicely crafted poem. I see no spags or issues with meter.
Good day
P
Bore...fucking--ring!!!! LOL
You really want THIS shite, Mark?
Okay then. As you wish.
With BOTH barrels of "nicey nice" LOL
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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no I don't want this shit I want to play with you like we always played i hate boring critique i look forward to your innuendo and your end as well lol
keep the fun shit coming.... fk'm
xxdipster
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Tell me who had the fuckin whinge??
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I'll dedicate a social piece to them hahaha
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have a guess? see how good you are..They have been threatening to leave lately but never do
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Fuck knows
PM me
Comment from Dean Kuch
There are many beautiful images on the net that epitomize the kind of love you've written of here, Dip. You simply must use your imagination to make them pop and bring them to life through the narrative in your poem.
As you can see, some are animated while others are actual photographs.
But you are free to pick and chose whatever medium you like that you feel gets the message across the best.
Lovely poem, as usual.
One of your best...
~Deano
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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There are many beautiful images on the net that epitomize the kind of love you've written of here, Dip. You simply must use your imagination to make them pop and bring them to life through the narrative in your poem.
As you can see, some are animated while others are actual photographs.
But you are free to pick and chose whatever medium you like that you feel gets the message across the best.
Lovely poem, as usual.
One of your best...
~Deano
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Some beautiful images there Dean that would be also very appropriate thanks for enlightening me of what's out there
Thanks my friend for the wonderful 6 always appreciated.
dip
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You're more than welcome, mate.
Finding just the right photo or animation is a big hobby of mine as you well know, LOL.
Great job!
~Deano
Comment from Thal1959
Howdy, D. Decided to stop by tonight. This may sound terribly snobbish of me, but I am finding it difficult to read some of the other writer's works. If the meter is uneven, or the wording is too simplistic - or forced to make the syllable count even - the work reads clumsily and it bothers me. It makes me fear I will pick up those bad habits as I write. To be honest, I really think I am able to take my own work up another level. But in order to do this, I feel I need to focus on the works of the old masters.
I just read a handful of poems and they sounded herky-jerky. The meter is uneven and the wording is bland. I prefer rhyming poetry to free verse, but I have read two really good free verses tonight. Since I know the meter and rhyme scheme is unregulated, it didn't bother me - so that left the wording which was far better than the rhyming poems. Your poem here holds its rhythm well and the wording is well chosen so that the reading of the verses are smooth and pleasant. It sounds far more natural than the other poems I read tonight. Good job, D.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Howdy, D. Decided to stop by tonight. This may sound terribly snobbish of me, but I am finding it difficult to read some of the other writer's works. If the meter is uneven, or the wording is too simplistic - or forced to make the syllable count even - the work reads clumsily and it bothers me. It makes me fear I will pick up those bad habits as I write. To be honest, I really think I am able to take my own work up another level. But in order to do this, I feel I need to focus on the works of the old masters.
I just read a handful of poems and they sounded herky-jerky. The meter is uneven and the wording is bland. I prefer rhyming poetry to free verse, but I have read two really good free verses tonight. Since I know the meter and rhyme scheme is unregulated, it didn't bother me - so that left the wording which was far better than the rhyming poems. Your poem here holds its rhythm well and the wording is well chosen so that the reading of the verses are smooth and pleasant. It sounds far more natural than the other poems I read tonight. Good job, D.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Welcome back Thal even if it's only fleeting. That my friend is a very big compliment you have given me. I always appreciate and respect your critiques and you know that I look forward to some of your further posts.
dip
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You're always welcome, D.
Comment from Teri7
Dip, This is a very lovely poem you have penned about growing old together and I love this art work you chose. It goes so well together my friend. It all is very true! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Dip, This is a very lovely poem you have penned about growing old together and I love this art work you chose. It goes so well together my friend. It all is very true! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Thankyou as always Teri much appreciated
dip
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you are so welcome Dip!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
The picture is perfect.
You speak the truth, aging is perfection when done with love and caring instead of throwing it away/ Perfect ABAB
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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The picture is perfect.
You speak the truth, aging is perfection when done with love and caring instead of throwing it away/ Perfect ABAB
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thanks again Barb you always make my day
dip
Comment from Pantygynt
The sentiments expressed in the photo and enlarged with greater detail in the poem just have to be the right ones. It's a pity in a way that I didn't meet up with you earlier, like before I threw away what was broke.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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The sentiments expressed in the photo and enlarged with greater detail in the poem just have to be the right ones. It's a pity in a way that I didn't meet up with you earlier, like before I threw away what was broke.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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You can always repair what is broken
You can always heal a broken heart
You can always take back words spoken
You can always take it back to the start
For that's what life is all about
Forgive but never forget
I want to leave you with no doubt
not forgiving's my biggest regret
Maybe we can do it all again
Like it used to be
Just take away all the pain
That's still left in me
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi dip. Nothing sweeter than seeing an old couple who still love each other dearly. Even if they are getting a bit senile, they have so many memories of fun and youthful times spent together. They've grown old together.
This is a lovely, tender write. Excellent rhyme and smooth flow. Perfect pairing of picture and poem too. Luv it! ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Hi dip. Nothing sweeter than seeing an old couple who still love each other dearly. Even if they are getting a bit senile, they have so many memories of fun and youthful times spent together. They've grown old together.
This is a lovely, tender write. Excellent rhyme and smooth flow. Perfect pairing of picture and poem too. Luv it! ~~ Connie
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thankyou so much Connie your comments and review are much appreciated
dip
Comment from country ranch writer
Aging is a problem for some we become weak and unable to dothethings we used to do. But we stand fast I our belief as long as we have each other we can weather the storms that come our way lovers ever ending and the for ever kind.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Aging is a problem for some we become weak and unable to dothethings we used to do. But we stand fast I our belief as long as we have each other we can weather the storms that come our way lovers ever ending and the for ever kind.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thanks again Barb you are a good FanStory friend
dip
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Smiles
Comment from Lucian Carter
I thought I'd seen that image before :)
Good poem, rhymes are solid. Captures the maturing of true love quite well. Everyone who has found true love should be grateful. This poem makes it clear you are.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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I thought I'd seen that image before :)
Good poem, rhymes are solid. Captures the maturing of true love quite well. Everyone who has found true love should be grateful. This poem makes it clear you are.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thankyou Lucian much appreciated as always
dip
