Autumn
The season is personified.26 total reviews
Comment from Writeling
I really like this.... and its unusual take on Autumn's influence.
'She crimsons crowns of trees'... such a pleasing and lovely image.
with best wishes, Writeling
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I really like this.... and its unusual take on Autumn's influence.
'She crimsons crowns of trees'... such a pleasing and lovely image.
with best wishes, Writeling
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much, Writeling, for your enthusiastic response to "Autumn" and that galaxy of stars. Rod
Comment from rama devi
Whimsical, imaginative, well voiced and superb personification. Fine form (interesting form!) great use of alliteration and consonance and assonance instead of rhymes to make it musical.
I like this: leaf-littered parks,
I LOVE this:
She crimsons crowns of trees
And splashes gold amidst the boughs,
Good pensive closing note.
The only critique is that you have capped all lines but left this one lower case:
with sticky sap.
Lovely presentation. An enjoyable composition.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Whimsical, imaginative, well voiced and superb personification. Fine form (interesting form!) great use of alliteration and consonance and assonance instead of rhymes to make it musical.
I like this: leaf-littered parks,
I LOVE this:
She crimsons crowns of trees
And splashes gold amidst the boughs,
Good pensive closing note.
The only critique is that you have capped all lines but left this one lower case:
with sticky sap.
Lovely presentation. An enjoyable composition.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Thank you, rama devi, for your thoughtful, comprehensive review of "Autumn." I am delighted you enjoyed it so much and will edit that line which SHOULD be capitalized. Rod
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Yes, it should, if you like capping all lines. Personally, I always avoid that style, as it does not serve well for enjambment (which I often use).
Warmly, rd
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I usually don't cap all lines, but I was just following the model of the Campion example Berg gives in her book.
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Autumn", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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"Autumn", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Thank you for so much for your warm reception of "Autumn," duchess. I hope to post another soon, but in the meantime, please feel free to browse through my portfolio. Rod
Comment from JennaG
What a gorgeous poem about autumn! I love the way you've personified the season. I can almost see this autumnal maiden flitting around checking out her work and being pleased with herself. She really is quite the artist! Fall is such a beautiful time of year and you've captured that so well in this very creative and clever piece. I loved it! :)
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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What a gorgeous poem about autumn! I love the way you've personified the season. I can almost see this autumnal maiden flitting around checking out her work and being pleased with herself. She really is quite the artist! Fall is such a beautiful time of year and you've captured that so well in this very creative and clever piece. I loved it! :)
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I am thrilled you enjoyed reading about Ms. Autumn's romp through the park, Jenna, and truly appreciate your kind praise and those six bright stars. Rod
Comment from Boogienights
This is a lovely descriptive poem about my favorite season. Your words bring the color of the season to life and the image you included is perfect. Thanks for sharing, I think you will do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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This is a lovely descriptive poem about my favorite season. Your words bring the color of the season to life and the image you included is perfect. Thanks for sharing, I think you will do well in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I love Autumn, too, and am de I lighted you enjoyed my personification of "her." Thank you so much for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from bertranclan
I enjoyed reading your poem! I love the metaphor and all the accompanying personification. Your imagery really takes off and describes the Fall season well. Bravo!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I enjoyed reading your poem! I love the metaphor and all the accompanying personification. Your imagery really takes off and describes the Fall season well. Bravo!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed this seasonal romp with Ms. Autumn. Thank you so much for sharing my poem and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Rod,
I like the personification of Autumn as a "red-haired maiden", and "laughs and dances" makes me envision her glee in watching leaves falling and twirling.
Terrific verb choices ... "crimsons/splashes/preening/trims". "chestnut flounce" ... very original ... very nice! Vivid imagery has been created for your reader.
Thank you for introducing me to the 'Campion' form of poetry. Virtual six for this lovely Autumn poem.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Hi Rod,
I like the personification of Autumn as a "red-haired maiden", and "laughs and dances" makes me envision her glee in watching leaves falling and twirling.
Terrific verb choices ... "crimsons/splashes/preening/trims". "chestnut flounce" ... very original ... very nice! Vivid imagery has been created for your reader.
Thank you for introducing me to the 'Campion' form of poetry. Virtual six for this lovely Autumn poem.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed this seasonal romp with Ms. Autumn. I am especially pleased my verb choices and imagery were appealing. The Campion is a new form for me, too. Thanks so much for the virtual six. Rod
Comment from teols2016
A creative approach, giving autum a human touch. I enjoyed reading this very much. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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A creative approach, giving autum a human touch. I enjoyed reading this very much. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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It was fun to personify Ms. Autumn, and I am delighted you enjoyed her romp. Thank you so much for sharing and your galaxy of stars. Rod
Comment from artisart4u
Autumn is awesome and so is your poem.
Good luck in the contest.
I am looking at various literary devices on line now, this is tough. I am sure you wrote it correctly. Literally, I love it.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Autumn is awesome and so is your poem.
Good luck in the contest.
I am looking at various literary devices on line now, this is tough. I am sure you wrote it correctly. Literally, I love it.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I am thrilled you think my Campion is "awesome." Thank you for your very kind praise and that bright gold star. Rod
Comment from zanya
What a delightful read -exquisite imagery 'red-haired maiden laughs'- interesting use of 'crimson' as a verb- it's a painter's autumnal palette combined with a poet's observant eye
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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What a delightful read -exquisite imagery 'red-haired maiden laughs'- interesting use of 'crimson' as a verb- it's a painter's autumnal palette combined with a poet's observant eye
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I am flattered by your wonderful description of my poem. Thank you so much for sharing "Autumn" and that bevy of stars. Rod
