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Grandpa's Alpha and Omega

He Came and was gone!

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Comment from Neonewman
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Short, sweet and to the point! Great piece of artistry you have delivered here with life's message wrapped about. I enjoy such talent and wish you well in the contest.
God bless!
Steve

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

Comment from Allyzeť
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This poem describe life so well with so little words, the beginning and the end. Excellent poem I really like it.
Good luck with the contest, and best wishes to you

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

Comment from Pantygynt
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When I first read this I thought this was recording a tragically short life, but reading it again after having read your notes I realised my error. Your third line contains all we need to know as footprints are a record of where we have been. A very cleverly wrought contraction of a normal life span

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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Almost too cute to be true (The baby) I think this is absolutely adorable... and then horrendously sad. I was not expecting the last part. My breath left my body. I hate thinking about death but always do. A fine write and a great poem love Meia x

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

Comment from nomi338
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Sadly, a life filled with activity, love, adventure, the full measure of living seems to end far too soon. On the other hand, a life lived reluctantly, filled with bitter disappointment, one failure after another, cannot seem to end quickly enough. Some hurry it along by committing suicide. Obviously you speak of a life that was filled with the very joy of living.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

Comment from Ulla
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Hi there, great little poem that tells a whole lifespan in so few words. Not an easy task when you only have so many words to play with. Well done and good luck. All the best. Ulla:)

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

Comment from Dorothy Fennell
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Hi Junglefighter, in a few short lines you have covered a lifetime. What a good idea you had for this poem. Life is sweet and also short so make the most of the in between. I love your words and the picture is great. Is it you? Probably not LOL, but a lovely entry for the contest. Good Luck - Dorothy

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Bill,
This is a great poem signifying your life. While it could be about most anyone's, it fits you. It tells of your birth, your life's events, & your eventual death. The 'proudly I die' refers to your military service for the US as well as how you lived your life. We should all feel this way about our country & life. The title, image, rhymes, & smooth flow all work to create a great, memorable poem. This is a strong entry, as well as, a great poem. I hope it wins. Jan

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

Comment from estory
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This is an interesting little piece that kind of in a nutshell, captures the nature of life. we enter the world kicking and screaming, full of trepidation, and then, after leaving whatever mark we leave here, we move on. I think the footstep image is strong and the best part of this poem. estory

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017

Comment from Jesse James Doty
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A very profound, cycle of life, short poem. You mention the cold world in which we enter, I know of what you speak. I was two weeks overdue, and a breech baby, too. I have been fighting for my existence, and identity, all my life. My favorite line is, the one where you say, "Having made my footprints in life, I proudly die." So poetic, and honest an evaluation, of going through life, trying to make a difference. And, I love the part of, being proud to die. That is the way of the indigenous people, of what was named America, by foreigners. I too hope to die proudly, however that may be. I have made a difference, and want to go proudly, in my end of life. I appreciate your Author's notes, which explain, in more detail, how you feel about, life and death. Thank you for writing an insightful, and honest poem. I enjoyed, reading it, immensely.
Take care, Jesse

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017