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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes my friend this is well written you have done very well using the beautiful photograph for your inspiration I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Oh yes my friend this is well written you have done very well using the beautiful photograph for your inspiration I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Hi, Jill;
thank you so much for reading my ekphrastic poem for the challenge.
~patty~
Comment from Heather Knight
Lovely tanka.
Straightforward, but with an interesting message.
Teamwork is always important.
Your words are a perfect echo for the picture.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Lovely tanka.
Straightforward, but with an interesting message.
Teamwork is always important.
Your words are a perfect echo for the picture.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hi, Maria;
thank you so much for your time to read and review my poem,
~patty~
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Patty;
-my first impression after reading your poem or tanka was the fact that you chosen to do the traditional 5/7/5/7/7 or 31 syllable format.
-I like the congruency of the enjambment of your tanka as it flows smoothly throughout the writing is because of the grammatically interaction and connection between the two thought processes of conceptual theme to create one desirable conceptual theme or thought.
-The pivot line, as you mentioned in your author's notes, definitely holds together the first and second conceptual themes but developed the two into one viable understanding.
-Thank you for sharing this Patty is I enjoyed the writing very much and it brought back the time when I was in Catholic school inside of a classroom like the picture expresses.
-I also failed to mention that the humor of this tanka was very enjoyable.
-Make peace and harmony be with you always, Patty and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Cheers, Patty;
-my first impression after reading your poem or tanka was the fact that you chosen to do the traditional 5/7/5/7/7 or 31 syllable format.
-I like the congruency of the enjambment of your tanka as it flows smoothly throughout the writing is because of the grammatically interaction and connection between the two thought processes of conceptual theme to create one desirable conceptual theme or thought.
-The pivot line, as you mentioned in your author's notes, definitely holds together the first and second conceptual themes but developed the two into one viable understanding.
-Thank you for sharing this Patty is I enjoyed the writing very much and it brought back the time when I was in Catholic school inside of a classroom like the picture expresses.
-I also failed to mention that the humor of this tanka was very enjoyable.
-Make peace and harmony be with you always, Patty and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hi, Alex;
thank you so much for your kind and thorough review. I'm glad you found my tanka well written and that it fits with the picture. I appreciate your comments and your share about Catholic school,
~patty~
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You're very welcome Patty and thank you for an enjoyable read.
Alex
Comment from fastdigits
Your interpretation of the art work is artistically phrased and emulates the picture in poetic fashion, painting this canvas with your words.
Well done
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Your interpretation of the art work is artistically phrased and emulates the picture in poetic fashion, painting this canvas with your words.
Well done
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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thank you so much for your time to read and review,
~patty~
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Patty. I've read quite a few of these 'Picture This' poems for this particular challenge. To me, your interpretation of the picture is bang on! I can easily see these kids saying the words in your poem. You've captured the essence of the image in your Ekphrastic poem. So very well done! ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hi Patty. I've read quite a few of these 'Picture This' poems for this particular challenge. To me, your interpretation of the picture is bang on! I can easily see these kids saying the words in your poem. You've captured the essence of the image in your Ekphrastic poem. So very well done! ~~ Connie
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for your kind words. I'm glad you could 'see' the little boys talking within the words of my poem,
~patty~
Comment from LIJ Red
Sounds like you got lucky and caught some kids talking in five and seven syllable bursts. Sounds very natural and goes well with the Picturethis picture. I won't presume to judge it as a Tanka...not my field. Excellent.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Sounds like you got lucky and caught some kids talking in five and seven syllable bursts. Sounds very natural and goes well with the Picturethis picture. I won't presume to judge it as a Tanka...not my field. Excellent.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for reading and reviewing this piece. I enjoyed finding words to compliment the photo for 'Picture This.'
~patty~
Comment from artisart4u
Your tanka is very nice and you have the correct amount of syllables.
The middle line ties every line together.
Your tanka is personal and emotional, two buddies sticking together.
Congratulations on being recognized.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Your tanka is very nice and you have the correct amount of syllables.
The middle line ties every line together.
Your tanka is personal and emotional, two buddies sticking together.
Congratulations on being recognized.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hi, there;
thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you found the piece worthy of a six-star rating. I appreciate your kind words.
~patty~
Comment from bluedragon776
Hello Patty,
It's been a little while since I reviewed one of your works. Seems like this poem would be a hard on to create based on the rules you posted. But you managed to pull it off quite well.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hello Patty,
It's been a little while since I reviewed one of your works. Seems like this poem would be a hard on to create based on the rules you posted. But you managed to pull it off quite well.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for reading and reviewing. The Tanka is one of those poetic forms you really have to be in the mood to work with. Thank you for acknowledging my effort.
~patty~
Comment from jenintorre
I thought this was an excellent Tanka poem and a very well chosen illustration to go
With it. It told a very good story. Cheers Jen.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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I thought this was an excellent Tanka poem and a very well chosen illustration to go
With it. It told a very good story. Cheers Jen.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning again, Patty:
As this is the Picture This poem, I have seen many different poems for this photo. Your interpretation of this picture is just as possible as the rest and is interesting. It is interesting to see the differences in the poets views of each picture. I would not be joing this group as I don't have the time but I will review them. Great job!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Good morning again, Patty:
As this is the Picture This poem, I have seen many different poems for this photo. Your interpretation of this picture is just as possible as the rest and is interesting. It is interesting to see the differences in the poets views of each picture. I would not be joing this group as I don't have the time but I will review them. Great job!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
