Matilda & I
A dream come true.14 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
Some things husbands have no clue about or how to handle a situation they usually end up saying you can handle it. Then they go on their merry way thinking they are off the hook so they don't worry about it
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
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Some things husbands have no clue about or how to handle a situation they usually end up saying you can handle it. Then they go on their merry way thinking they are off the hook so they don't worry about it
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
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So true. Thanks for reading.
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Smiles
Comment from robyn corum
MJ,
Oh, my. I think I shall have to pop over and wash your mouth out with soap. That, I think, is the very worst thing you can say about ANYONE. My, my. Surely, he is not THAT bad...? Come on... PLEASE???
hahaha!
This was quite fun and thoroughly entertaining. I enjoyed it very much. *smile* But, out of all the characters in all the books that I've read - I have no clue who I would bring home to visit!!! It would take me a while to figure that one out. Wow. A toughie.
Anyway, only a couple-three nits for you to take a look at, if you please?
1.) was reading a big book that she had rested on her lap.
--> not that there's anything really WRONG with this sentence...but I think it might flow better if you kept those verbs similar..
--> She had brown hair and big eyes and was reading a big book that she had (resting) on her lap.
2.) 'I've seen you have a book about me on the shelf.
--> this seems a bit wordy to me. Why not just:
--> 'I don't know any Matildas...'
'Yes, you do.'
'Excuse me?'
'You have a book about me on the shelf.
3.) (Neither) of us spoke for a while, but eventually she said,
That's it! Thanks so much! Rots o' Ruck! hahahaha!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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MJ,
Oh, my. I think I shall have to pop over and wash your mouth out with soap. That, I think, is the very worst thing you can say about ANYONE. My, my. Surely, he is not THAT bad...? Come on... PLEASE???
hahaha!
This was quite fun and thoroughly entertaining. I enjoyed it very much. *smile* But, out of all the characters in all the books that I've read - I have no clue who I would bring home to visit!!! It would take me a while to figure that one out. Wow. A toughie.
Anyway, only a couple-three nits for you to take a look at, if you please?
1.) was reading a big book that she had rested on her lap.
--> not that there's anything really WRONG with this sentence...but I think it might flow better if you kept those verbs similar..
--> She had brown hair and big eyes and was reading a big book that she had (resting) on her lap.
2.) 'I've seen you have a book about me on the shelf.
--> this seems a bit wordy to me. Why not just:
--> 'I don't know any Matildas...'
'Yes, you do.'
'Excuse me?'
'You have a book about me on the shelf.
3.) (Neither) of us spoke for a while, but eventually she said,
That's it! Thanks so much! Rots o' Ruck! hahahaha!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading and for your suggestions.
Comment from nor84
Thank you for entering my contest. I give this a quick read, and it is a good story. At first glance, I don't see this part of the rules: at some point character and author must meet.
The full rules: A fictional character(s) comes to life. What happens? Can be told from POV of writer or a character, but at some point author and character must meet. FICTIONAL STORIES ONLY, NO AUDIO, GRAPHICS. 1000-3000 words.
The video trailer should also be removed.
good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Thank you for entering my contest. I give this a quick read, and it is a good story. At first glance, I don't see this part of the rules: at some point character and author must meet.
The full rules: A fictional character(s) comes to life. What happens? Can be told from POV of writer or a character, but at some point author and character must meet. FICTIONAL STORIES ONLY, NO AUDIO, GRAPHICS. 1000-3000 words.
The video trailer should also be removed.
good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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I'll remove the video. But the author is me and I meet Matilda in my living room. Or by the author do you mean Roald Dahl?
Thanks for reading.
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I believe the story says she was created by Roald Dahl. If so, that's who she has to meet. You can create a character who is her creator and have her meet that character instead. There's probably plenty of time.
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The rules were not clear at all. Just withdraw my story from the competition, it doesn't matter.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
What a great contest entry. I enjoyed the story so much. Laughed at your son's annoyance at being bothered while he was eating and watching tv on him computer. Excellent write. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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What a great contest entry. I enjoyed the story so much. Laughed at your son's annoyance at being bothered while he was eating and watching tv on him computer. Excellent write. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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The part about my son is true...
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Quantum Traveler
An Extraordinary Read Maria.
There was no Hesitation in the Read from Beginning to End.
A Magical Captivating Story with a Solid Ending.
A Story when Read to a Child will Capture their Imagination and keep them Entertained.
Very Well Portrayed...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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An Extraordinary Read Maria.
There was no Hesitation in the Read from Beginning to End.
A Magical Captivating Story with a Solid Ending.
A Story when Read to a Child will Capture their Imagination and keep them Entertained.
Very Well Portrayed...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much for your generous review.
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An Enjoyable Read that holds One's Interest...Well Done...Maria...Q.T...Phil.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It's a classic for sure. I don't know if I've met anyone who has hated the movie. It would be interesting if that actually happened. I can only imagine what was actually going through your husband's brain. It's a good thing our husbands probably already think we're crazy
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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It's a classic for sure. I don't know if I've met anyone who has hated the movie. It would be interesting if that actually happened. I can only imagine what was actually going through your husband's brain. It's a good thing our husbands probably already think we're crazy
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Thanks for your fun review. Yeah, husbands can be like that...
Comment from Bucketlist
I think you have enough fantasy for both of you !!! You have a real talent for interweaving reality and fantasy. Your literary talent shines through in this one
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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I think you have enough fantasy for both of you !!! You have a real talent for interweaving reality and fantasy. Your literary talent shines through in this one
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much, you're very kind.
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You are welcome
Comment from Ulla
Hi Maria Jose, this is an enchanting entry to the contest. I hope a lot will read it. I so enjoyed it. What a great imagination you've got. I'm sure you'll do very well in the contest. Good luck. It was like reading a wee fairy tale. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Hi Maria Jose, this is an enchanting entry to the contest. I hope a lot will read it. I so enjoyed it. What a great imagination you've got. I'm sure you'll do very well in the contest. Good luck. It was like reading a wee fairy tale. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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I'm so glad you liked it, Ulla. Thanks so much for the six stars.
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I loved it!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
wow a neat POV from one that meets a special fictional character that showed us how to live and have fun, and trying to tell her that she is important and famous.lol
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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wow a neat POV from one that meets a special fictional character that showed us how to live and have fun, and trying to tell her that she is important and famous.lol
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading, Barb.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well, at first I thought you'd missed the mark with this one, but then I reread the rules and there's nothing in there that states it has to be your character or their author, which I think was the intent but the CEC can't judge on intent, only what is written so I think you did a fine job with this and the interpretation of the comp. Mind you, seeing as I know of at least 2 on the CEC, by accident, I wouldn't be surprised to see this pose an issue for them in particular, so that may be interesting to see...
I really enjoyed this. It reminded me a little of those first pieces you wrote - the Bronte stuff that drew me to your writing in the first place.
G
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Hi there,
Well, at first I thought you'd missed the mark with this one, but then I reread the rules and there's nothing in there that states it has to be your character or their author, which I think was the intent but the CEC can't judge on intent, only what is written so I think you did a fine job with this and the interpretation of the comp. Mind you, seeing as I know of at least 2 on the CEC, by accident, I wouldn't be surprised to see this pose an issue for them in particular, so that may be interesting to see...
I really enjoyed this. It reminded me a little of those first pieces you wrote - the Bronte stuff that drew me to your writing in the first place.
G
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017
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Hi Gareth,
I'm not sure I understand what you mean. Didn't the competition state the story had to be about a fictional character that comes to life?
Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading.
