A postcard moment
A vision to be saved6 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written descriptive poem about a wonderful Indian summer evening. A postcard moment edged into the mind and a.memory that will nor be forgotten easily.
A very well-written descriptive poem about a wonderful Indian summer evening. A postcard moment edged into the mind and a.memory that will nor be forgotten easily.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2017
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a painting in the visual in the sky along the horizon as if the moment of time is meant for doing so and it is the chance to be saved and after the job there is goodbye; I liked.
This speaks a painting in the visual in the sky along the horizon as if the moment of time is meant for doing so and it is the chance to be saved and after the job there is goodbye; I liked.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
Comment from DonandVicki
This poem did not need any artwork to back it up because the words you chose and the order you put them in creating their own image. Very well composed and a joy to read.
This poem did not need any artwork to back it up because the words you chose and the order you put them in creating their own image. Very well composed and a joy to read.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
Comment from B.B. Rose
This poem is inordinately lush and, oddly, in the face of its title, too long. If it's to be a postcard, not a painting, make it short and to the point. Literally go get some blank postcards and see if you can pick out the best parts of this poem and fit them on a single postcard. Or perhaps, just give it a new title that is more appropriate. The last stanza is puzzling to mere mortals such as myself. Here's some advice: Write for your readers, not yourself.
This poem is inordinately lush and, oddly, in the face of its title, too long. If it's to be a postcard, not a painting, make it short and to the point. Literally go get some blank postcards and see if you can pick out the best parts of this poem and fit them on a single postcard. Or perhaps, just give it a new title that is more appropriate. The last stanza is puzzling to mere mortals such as myself. Here's some advice: Write for your readers, not yourself.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
Comment from moongirlwriter
This poem is beautifully written but I must say. . .it does feel as though I'm reading several different nights from different perspectives rather than a continuous description of An Indian night sky. I do also have one suggestion, in the fourth stanza on the second line. . .the colors that brushes the mysitfy. . .to avoid word the twice in that line maybe you don't even need the first "the"?
This poem is beautifully written but I must say. . .it does feel as though I'm reading several different nights from different perspectives rather than a continuous description of An Indian night sky. I do also have one suggestion, in the fourth stanza on the second line. . .the colors that brushes the mysitfy. . .to avoid word the twice in that line maybe you don't even need the first "the"?
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, there;
thank you for sharing your poem about the beauty we can find anywhere; we simply have to look for it. There was a great deal of imagery in your words-making the need for an image or photo unnecessary,
~patty~
Hi, there;
thank you for sharing your poem about the beauty we can find anywhere; we simply have to look for it. There was a great deal of imagery in your words-making the need for an image or photo unnecessary,
~patty~
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017